Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be a bit more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail and a brief example. Use linking words (e.g., because, so, for example) and avoid repetitive phrases like “I did have.” Also vary vocabulary (e.g., “extracurricular programs” instead of repeating “activities”). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes — I had many opportunities at school because it offered a wide range of extracurricular programs. I mainly joined the sports teams and a dance club, so I spent most afternoons training and rehearsing. For example, I played on the football team and performed in the end-of-year recital.

Gợi ý: Finish your answer and make it more natural and coherent. Start with a clear opinion, then give two linked reasons using connectors (for example, because / therefore) and finish with a brief example or prediction. Avoid fragmented sentences and grammar mistakes (e.g., “does not know any limit” → “are less limited”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes — people should try different things, especially when they are young, because they are less limited mentally and physically. Trying new activities helps you discover your strengths and learn new skills, so you can make better choices later. For example, sampling music, sports and clubs helped me decide to focus on dance and team sports.

× Yes, I did have a good opportunity to participate in activities.

✓ Yes, I had good opportunities to participate in activities.

The original uses 'did have' which is grammatically correct but sounds unnatural here; also 'a good opportunity' suggests a single chance while the context implies multiple extracurricular options. Use simple past 'had' for naturalness and plural 'opportunities' to match meaning.

× The main reason for that was that the school I was in had a lot of extracurricular activities.

✓ The main reason was that the school I attended had many extracurricular activities.

'The school I was in' is wordy and less natural; use 'the school I attended'. 'A lot of' is informal; use 'many' for clarity. Overall restructure improves fluency and formal tone, keeping past tense consistent.

× I was primarily interested in sports and in dance and those were the areas where I focused all of my attention.

✓ I was primarily interested in sports and dance, and those were the areas on which I focused all of my attention.

Parallelism: 'sports and dance' is enough without the second 'in'. The clause is long; adding a comma before 'and' improves readability. Use 'on which' instead of 'where' for precision when referring to areas of focus.

× Yes, of course people should try a variety of things, especially at a young age.

✓ Yes, of course people should try a variety of things, especially at a young age.

This sentence is grammatically correct; modal 'should' is appropriate for advice. No change needed.

× Since at that time your mental capacity and physical capacity does not know any limit.

✓ Since at that time your mental and physical capacities do not know any limits.

Subject 'mental and physical capacities' is plural, so verb must be 'do' not 'does'. Use plural 'capacities' and plural 'limits' for natural collocation. Also combine 'mental capacity and physical capacity' into 'mental and physical capacities' for conciseness.

× So the chance of you

✓ So the chance for you to try new things is higher.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a verb and object. Complete the thought by adding what the chance refers to and a predicate. This corrects the sentence fragment and clarifies meaning.