Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Thí sinh
Yeah, I have an opportunity to take part in a new activities as a child because I love exploring things and I have freedom to do things out. I mean do things outside
Giám khảo
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Thí sinh
Yes, absolutely because exploring things as many as you can will help you to grow and it starts from
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Điểm: 52.0Gợi ý: Be more grammatically accurate, more concise, and provide a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense (past) and plural forms, avoid repetition, and keep to 2–4 sentences. Add a linking word to make the answer coherent.
Ví dụ: Yes, I had many chances to try new activities as a child because my parents encouraged outdoor play. For example, I joined a local scout group and took weekly hiking trips, which helped me learn teamwork and basic survival skills. As a result, I became more confident trying unfamiliar things.
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Điểm: 46.0Gợi ý: Give a full, coherent response: start with a clear opinion, then support it with a specific reason and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore). Avoid trailing off—finish the thought and keep within 2–4 sentences.
Ví dụ: Yes, absolutely, because trying different activities broadens your skills and perspective. For example, learning a musical instrument and volunteering taught me patience and communication, which later helped me in school and work. Therefore, experimenting with new things is a good way to grow personally and professionally.
× I have an opportunity to take part in a new activities as a child because I love exploring things and I have freedom to do things out.
✓ I had opportunities to take part in new activities as a child because I loved exploring and had the freedom to do things outside.
The original sentence mixes singular and plural ("an opportunity" with "activities") and uses present tense while referring to childhood. Change to plural 'opportunities' or change 'an' to remove mismatch; here we use plural 'opportunities' and 'new activities'. Also change tense from present to past ('have' -> 'had', 'love' -> 'loved') to match the time reference 'as a child'. 'Do things out' is unnatural; use 'do things outside'. Combine repeated phrases to be concise.
× I mean do things outside
✓ I mean doing things outside.
The fragment 'I mean do things outside' lacks correct verb form and is a sentence fragment. Use the gerund 'doing' after 'I mean' to create a coherent clause: 'I mean doing things outside.' This fixes sentence structure and makes the comment a clarification of the previous statement.
× exploring things as many as you can will help you to grow and it starts from
✓ exploring as many things as you can will help you grow, and it starts from there.
Word order for the expression should be 'exploring as many things as you can' (not 'exploring things as many as you can'). 'Help you to grow' is acceptable but 'help you grow' is more natural. The clause 'and it starts from' is incomplete; add 'there' to complete the idea. Using the gerund 'exploring' is correct here, but word order and completeness needed fixing.