Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 응답은 적절했지만 몇 가지 개선점이 있습니다. 먼저 불필요한 말버릇(예: 'uh')을 줄이고 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 둘째, 세 가지 예시를 나열할 때 연결어를 사용하여 흐름을 부드럽게 하고, 각각에 대한 간단한 설명을 추가하면 더 구체적이고 설득력 있어집니다. 셋째, 문장 구조를 조금 더 명확한 주제문 + 세부 설명 형태로 구성하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. For instance, I took piano lessons for several years, which helped me develop discipline and listening skills. I also practiced Taekwondo, which improved my fitness and confidence. In addition, learning to ride a bike gave me a sense of independence.

Gợi ý: 답변은 논리적이고 이유와 예시를 제시하여 효과적이지만 몇 가지 개선할 점이 있습니다. 첫째, 'adapt new situations' 같은 표현은 문법적으로 'adapt to new situations'로 고쳐야 자연스럽습니다. 둘째, 연결어를 더 사용해 이유와 결과의 관계를 명확히 하고, 예시를 하나만 들지 말고 구체적인 사례(직업 종류나 취미)를 하나 추가해 보세요. 셋째, 문장을 2~4문장 내로 유지하여 간결하게 표현하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I believe people should try a wide range of activities because it helps them build confidence and adapt to new situations. For example, taking up public speaking can improve communication skills, while learning a new language can make it easier to connect with people from different cultures. As a result, these experiences broaden your skill set and make future learning easier.

× Yes, I had lots of opportunities to learn as a child, such as uh, playing a piano or Taekwondo and riding a bike.

✓ Yes, I had lots of opportunities to learn as a child, such as playing the piano, practicing Taekwondo, and riding a bike.

The original sentence has two issues relevant to the '-ing form' and article use: 'playing a piano' is incorrect because 'play' with musical instruments usually uses no article or the definite article 'the'; the structure 'such as uh, playing a piano or Taekwondo and riding a bike' mixes activities without parallel forms. Using 'playing the piano, practicing Taekwondo, and riding a bike' creates parallel gerund phrases. Suggestion: keep activities in the same grammatical form (gerunds) and use 'the' for specific instruments or omit the article for general reference.

× Yes, I think people should try as many activities as possible because it helps them to gain confidence and adapt new situations.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many activities as possible because it helps them to gain confidence and adapt to new situations.

The verb phrase 'adapt new situations' is missing the preposition 'to' after 'adapt'. This is a modal/contextual issue where the verb 'adapt' requires the preposition 'to' when referring to situations. Suggestion: use 'adapt to new situations' to convey the correct meaning.

× For example, trying different hobbies or job can broaden their skills and make it easier to learn other things later.

✓ For example, trying different hobbies or jobs can broaden their skills and make it easier to learn other things later.

The phrase 'different hobbies or job' mixes plural and singular forms; 'hobbies' is plural so 'job' should match as 'jobs' (plural) to be parallel. Also 'trying different hobbies or jobs' maintains parallel structure. Suggestion: keep coordinated nouns in the same number (both plural) for grammatical agreement and parallelism.