Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Thí sinh
Yes I did. I had opportunities to join swimming activities because in my in my country swimming sport is very was very popular and I loved it when I was.
Giám khảo
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Thí sinh
Yes, I should. People try as many different things as they can because I think this would have some different and interesting things and they can try different things. It can provide some confident and flexible for the soul.
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 回答要更简洁且语法正确,避免重复。先用一句主题句直接回答,然后给出一到两句具体细节(例如什么时候开始、参加频率或感受)。注意时态和重复词的修正。可以增加衔接词让句子更流畅。
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I had the chance to join swimming lessons when I was a child because swimming is very popular in my country. I started at around age seven and trained twice a week, and I really enjoyed it because it kept me active and helped me make friends.
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答需更有逻辑和具体理由,避免重复和不自然的词组(如 "for the soul")。先给出直接观点,然后用一到两句具体原因或例子支持。使用连接词(for example, because, so)使表达更连贯,并注意修饰词的正确使用。
Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try different activities because it helps them discover new interests and build confidence. For example, trying public speaking or a team sport can improve communication skills and make someone more adaptable in different situations.
× Yes I did. I had opportunities to join swimming activities because in my in my country swimming sport is very was very popular and I loved it when I was.
✓ Yes, I did. I had opportunities to join swimming activities because in my country swimming was very popular and I loved it when I was a child.
句子中时态混用("is" 和 "was" 同时出现),描述过去经历时应使用过去时;另外缺少“a child”来完整表达“当我还是个孩子时”。建议:谈及过去经历时,全句使用过去时,例如把“is”改为“was”;去掉重复的词汇(如第二个“in my”);补上必要的名词短语(“a child”)。
× Yes, I should. People try as many different things as they can because I think this would have some different and interesting things and they can try different things.
✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because this brings different and interesting experiences and opportunities to try new things.
原句中情态动词使用不当(“Yes, I should.” 与上下文不搭配,应表达个人观点或建议用“should”放在主句里),以及句子结构重复、表达不清。建议:对观点表态时用“I think people should...”,避免重复短语,使用名词如“experiences”或“opportunities”来代替模糊的“things”。
× It can provide some confident and flexible for the soul.
✓ It can provide some confidence and flexibility for the soul.
原句使用了形容词而非名词(用“confident”和“flexible”但需要名词形式),导致词类错误。应使用名词“confidence”和“flexibility”。此外,“for the soul”表达不够地道,可用“for a person”或“for oneself”更自然。