Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more direct and relevant to the question (childhood). Start with a clear topic sentence answering whether you had opportunities as a child. If childhood opportunities were limited, say so and then briefly mention later experiences as contrast. Use simpler, correct language and avoid awkward phrases like "fresh new man" or "opera sub." Add one specific detail about the activity and link it to purpose or outcome.

Ví dụ: When I was a child, I didn't have many chances to try new activities because my family moved a lot. However, later at university I joined a French opera club to learn French and perform, which helped me practise speaking and boosted my confidence on stage.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then support it with two concise, connected reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'for instance'). Correct grammar (e.g., 'experiences' and 'they') and avoid repetition of phrases. Provide a specific example to illustrate how trying new things leads to improvement.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try many different things because new experiences teach useful skills and broaden perspective. For example, learning a new hobby like cooking can improve patience and creativity, and studying abroad can increase independence and cultural understanding.

× It's not my childhood period, but when I started my university life as a fresh new man, I participated in a French opera sub for learning French.

✓ It was not during my childhood, but when I started university as a freshman I joined a French opera club to learn French.

The original sentence has multiple structure and word choice problems: 'It's not my childhood period' is unnatural and mismatches tense (use past: 'It was not during my childhood'); 'as a fresh new man' is incorrect phrasing for a university beginner — use 'as a freshman'; 'participated in a French opera sub' is unclear and likely means 'joined a French opera club'; 'for learning French' should be 'to learn French' (infinitive purpose). Combine clauses more smoothly and keep past tense consistent. Suggested improvement: use simple, natural phrases (during my childhood, when I started university, as a freshman, joined a club, to learn) and keep verb tenses consistent.

× I believe, I believe so because I think experience for a human being and it make the character of the people so it helps improve themselves.

✓ I believe so, because I think experience is important for a person and it shapes people's character, so it helps them improve.

The original sentence mixes incorrect verb forms and awkward noun phrases: 'experience for a human being' is unnatural — use 'experience is important for a person' or 'for people'; 'it make' violates subject-verb agreement and should be 'it makes' (or rephrase to 'it shapes'); 'the character of the people' is awkward; 'helps improve themselves' has a reflexive pronoun that is unnecessary and mismatches the subject — use 'helps them improve'. Also remove duplicated 'I believe'. Suggested improvement: avoid repetition, ensure subject-verb agreement ('it makes' or 'it shapes'), use natural noun phrases ('for a person' or 'for people'), and choose correct pronouns ('them' instead of 'themselves').