Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 発音、文法、語順の誤りを直し、より自然で簡潔な表現を使うことを勧めます。具体的には：1) 文法（例：'had the chance to try' と不定詞を使う）2) 単語選択（'civil activities' は不自然なので具体的な活動名に置き換える）3) 冗長な繰り返し（'I I' や不要な接続詞）を避ける。さらに、1文目で直接答えを述べ、2文目で具体例を挙げ、接続語（for example / such as）でつなぐ練習をしてください。

Ví dụ: Yes. When I was a child, I had the chance to try several new activities. For example, I took swing dance lessons and attended English-speaking classes, which helped me become more confident.

Gợi ý: 考えを明確にまとめ、論理的に理由を述べる練習をしてください。現在の回答は支離滅裂で断片的なので、まず結論の文（Yes, I think people should）を言い、その後に明確な理由を2つほど示し、接続詞（because / moreover / for example）でつなぐと良いです。語彙は簡潔で正確な語を使い、主語・動詞の一致を意識してください。具体例を加えるとさらに説得力が増します。

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. Trying different things helps people discover their interests and learn new skills. For example, children who try sports or music often develop confidence and teamwork abilities, which benefit them later in life.

× Yeah, when I was a child I had the chance try to civil activities.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child I had the chance to try civic activities.

'Chance' is normally followed by the infinitive with to (to try). Also 'civil activities' is incorrect collocation; 'civic activities' (community-related activities) is likely intended. Use 'to try' for correct verb form and replace 'civil' with 'civic' for proper meaning. Suggestion: Use 'have the chance to + verb' and check word choice for collocations.

× For example, I I took Swing lesson and English speaking and more.

✓ For example, I took swing lessons, English speaking classes, and more.

There is a repetition 'I I' and incorrect singular/plural and noun forms. 'Swing lesson' should be plural 'swing lessons' if referring to more than one; 'English speaking' needs a noun like 'classes'. Also list items should be separated by commas and use parallel noun phrases. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words, ensure parallel structure and correct noun forms (e.g., 'lessons', 'classes').

× Yeah, I think so.

✓ Yes, I think so.

'Yeah' is informal but not grammatically wrong; however, in formal test transcripts 'Yes' is preferred. This is a style suggestion rather than strict grammar error. Suggestion: Use 'Yes' in formal speaking; 'Yeah' is colloquial.

× It it is because the chi the.

✓ It is because children...

This sentence is fragmented and contains repetitions and incomplete words. The intended idea seems to refer to 'children' or 'childhood'. The fragment must be completed: e.g., 'It is because, as children, ...' or 'It is because childhood...'. Suggestion: Complete the thought, remove duplicated words, and choose the correct noun ('children' or 'childhood').

× The study in child is.

✓ Studying as a child is important.

Original sentence is fragmentary and ungrammatical. 'The study in child is' should be rephrased to a complete clause. Use gerund 'Studying' and correct noun 'child' -> 'childhood' or 'as a child'. Suggestion: Form a full clause with subject and verb; use 'Studying as a child is...' or 'Childhood study is...'.

× This makes us improving as a people.

✓ This helps us improve as people.

After 'make' (or 'helps'), use the base verb 'improve', not the progressive 'improving'. 'Makes us improving' is ungrammatical. Also 'as a people' should be 'as people' without article. Use 'helps us' or 'makes us' + base verb. Suggestion: Use correct verb form after causative verbs (make/help) and omit unnecessary articles.