Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence about whether you had opportunities, then give one or two specific examples with brief details. Use correct tense and smoother phrasing, and avoid unfinished thoughts. Add a linking phrase when moving from list to the main hobby.

Ví dụ: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I joined dancing and painting classes at school, which I enjoyed a lot. Dancing became my main hobby because it helped me express myself and make friends, so I kept practicing it every week.

Gợi ý: Give a clear opinion sentence then support it with two concise reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (use singular/plural appropriately) and avoid repetition. Provide a short example or result to make your point specific.

Ví dụ: Definitely — people should try as many things as possible. Firstly, opportunities are limited, so exploring different activities helps you discover your passions. Secondly, trying new things promotes personal growth and skills. For example, trying public speaking improved my confidence and helped my studies.

× Yes, during my childhood era I have numerous opportunities to participate in different kinds of recreational activities such as dancing, singing, painting, cooking, but one of the my most passionate if I say that my hobby through which I was inclined towards

✓ Yes, during my childhood I had numerous opportunities to participate in recreational activities such as dancing, singing, painting, and cooking, but my greatest passion was the hobby that I was most inclined toward.

Multiple issues: incorrect tense (present 'have' should be past 'had' to match 'during my childhood'), unnecessary word 'era', wrong article usage 'the my', awkward phrasing 'one of the my most passionate', and sentence fragment at the end. Suggestion: use simple past for past experiences, remove redundant words, use correct article and possessive forms, and complete the clause with a clear subject and verb.

× Definitely, the people should try as many things as they can because life is one so you don't have endless opportunities.

✓ Definitely, people should try as many things as they can because life is short and you don't have endless opportunities.

Using 'the people' is incorrect; 'people' without 'the' is general. Phrase 'life is one' is unclear; use 'life is short' or 'you only live once' to convey meaning. Also maintain consistent tone. Suggestion: omit the definite article when speaking generally and choose a clear idiom or adjective to express brevity of life.

× So you must use that if somebody is getting the opportunity now so we must enjoy the life to the fullest.

✓ So you should seize the opportunity when it arises and enjoy life to the fullest.

Redundant and incorrect modal use: 'must use that' and repeating 'so' makes the sentence awkward. 'Must' can be too strong; 'should' or 'seize the opportunity' is more natural. Also 'enjoy the life' should be 'enjoy life' (article error). Suggestion: use clearer modal verbs and idiomatic expressions, avoid repetition, and remove unnecessary articles.

× I believe that it helps to make one person or holistically development.

✓ I believe that it helps a person develop holistically.

Awkward word order and incorrect forms: 'make one person' is unnatural, 'holistically development' uses an adverb with a noun incorrectly. Use 'helps a person develop holistically' where 'develop' is the verb and 'holistically' correctly modifies it. Suggestion: use correct verb form and place adverb after verb for clear meaning.