Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Thí sinh
Yes when I was a young child, I literally loved go many beautiful places with my father. For example I really prefer to go fish with my parents of two small stream or even sea.
Giám khảo
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Thí sinh
Yes, our entire life is not long to live. So we have if we can get a chance to do something in our life we have to try to more consistently and yeah.
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Điểm: 48.0Gợi ý: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms, prepositions and word choices (e.g., “go fishing,” “with my father,” “small streams or the sea”). Avoid unnecessary words like “literally.” Keep to 2–4 sentences.
Ví dụ: Yes. I often had opportunities to try new activities with my father. For example, we went fishing together at small streams and sometimes at the sea, where I learned how to cast a line and bait a hook. These trips helped me become more confident outdoors.
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Điểm: 44.0Gợi ý: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with clear reasons and one short example. Use linking words like “because” or “for example.” Make sentences grammatical and concise; avoid fillers like “and yeah.” Fix word order and expressions (e.g., “life is short,” “we should try new things when we have the chance”).
Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try many different things because life is short and new experiences help us grow. For example, learning a new hobby or traveling to a different region can teach you new skills and broaden your perspective.
× I literally loved go many beautiful places with my father.
✓ I literally loved going to many beautiful places with my father.
The verb 'love' when followed by another verb requires the gerund (-ing) form. Additionally, the preposition 'to' is needed after 'going' to indicate destination. Suggestion: use 'love doing' and include necessary prepositions: 'loved going to'.
× I literally loved go many beautiful places with my father.
✓ I literally loved going to many beautiful places with my father.
The sentence was missing the preposition 'to' before the destination 'many beautiful places'. Use 'going to' for movement toward places. Also convert the following verb to gerund form as explained in the other correction.
× For example I really prefer to go fish with my parents of two small stream or even sea.
✓ For example, I really preferred to go fishing with my parents to small streams or even the sea.
Pronoun 'parents of two small stream' is incorrect and unclear. 'Parents' is fine but the phrase describing places needs correction: use plural 'streams' and include the definite article 'the sea'. Also 'prefer' should match past context 'when I was a young child' so use past 'preferred'. Use gerund 'fishing' after 'go'.
× For example I really prefer to go fish with my parents of two small stream or even sea.
✓ For example, I really preferred to go fishing with my parents to small streams or even the sea.
After 'go' use the -ing form for activities: 'go fishing', 'go swimming'. Also tense should be consistent with previous mention of childhood, so 'preferred'.
× For example I really prefer to go fish with my parents of two small stream or even sea.
✓ For example, I really preferred to go fishing with my parents to small streams or even the sea.
Use 'to' before destinations ('to small streams') and 'the' for 'sea' when speaking generally about the sea in a specific context: 'the sea'. The original 'of' is incorrect here.
× Yes, our entire life is not long to live.
✓ Yes, our life is not very long.
The phrase 'our entire life is not long to live' is ungrammatical. Use 'life' rather than 'entire life' and avoid 'to live'. 'Is not very long' is a correct present-tense statement about duration.
× So we have if we can get a chance to do something in our life we have to try to more consistently and yeah.
✓ So if we get a chance to do something in life, we should try it as often as possible.
The original sentence has fragmented structure and incorrect modal phrasing. Remove redundant 'we have' and use conditional 'if we get a chance'. Use modal 'should' to give advice and 'as often as possible' or 'more consistently' reordered to fit natural English. Also remove filler 'and yeah'.
× So we have if we can get a chance to do something in our life we have to try to more consistently and yeah.
✓ So if we get a chance to do something in life, we should try it as often as possible.
The original uses 'have to' which implies obligation; 'should' is more appropriate for advice. Also 'try to more consistently' is ungrammatical — use 'try it more consistently' or better 'try it as often as possible'.