Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, correct small grammar errors, and add one specific detail about your experience. Use a linking word when adding details.

Ví dụ: Yes. My school offered many activities, such as painting, drawing and sports. For example, I took painting and badminton classes and really enjoyed them at first because painting helped me express creativity, while badminton improved my fitness and teamwork.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear direct opinion sentence, avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences, and support your view with two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because and for instance). Finish your example with a short conclusion.

Ví dụ: Yes, people should try different things because it helps them discover their interests and strengths. For instance, trying cooking for the first time might reveal a passion for food or a talent for following recipes, and trying team sports could show whether you enjoy teamwork. Therefore, experimenting helps you choose activities that suit you.

× Yes, I had so many activities umm for example in my school they offer painting, drawing and sports and I had tried painting classes and uh badminton classes and I really enjoy those classes at beginning.

✓ Yes, I had so many activities. For example, in my school they offered painting, drawing and sports, and I tried painting classes and badminton classes, and I really enjoyed those classes at the beginning.

The student mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. The context asks about childhood (past), so verbs should be past: 'offer' -> 'offered', 'had tried' -> 'tried', 'enjoy' -> 'enjoyed', and add 'the' before 'beginning'. Also split into shorter sentences and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: keep all actions in past tense when talking about past experiences and use articles where needed.

× Yes, I think people should try different things because, uh, trying different things made you feel that what kind of personality you are, what kind of interest you have and for example, if you are doing cooking for the first time, you never know whether.

✓ Yes, I think people should try different things because trying new experiences can help you discover what kind of personality you have and what your interests are, and for example, if you try cooking for the first time, you never know what will happen.

The sentence mixes present and past inconsistently and has incomplete clause at the end. 'made you feel' should be present/modal: 'can help you discover' or 'help you feel' to match 'I think' and general truth. 'What kind of interest you have' -> 'what your interests are' for correct word order and plural. 'If you are doing cooking' is awkward; use 'if you try cooking'. The final clause 'you never know whether.' is incomplete; complete it to 'you never know what will happen.' Suggestion: keep consistent present/modal tense for general statements and complete clauses; use natural collocations like 'try cooking' and 'what your interests are'.