Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Thí sinh
Unfortunately, yeah, when I was a child, I was a shy person and I couldn't immediately join a group. I was playing by myself but then I learned to have to make a friends and since then I have so many friends all over the world you can think all over the world really difficult to find, but I love older culture and I love to learn different language for this reason. I have so many friends now.
Giám khảo
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Thí sinh
Of course.
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, concise supporting details, and correct grammar. Keep it natural and avoid repetition. Specifically: 1) Begin with a direct answer (Yes/No + brief reason). 2) Use one or two supporting details with logical linking words (for example, 'but', 'so', 'because'). 3) Correct common grammar mistakes: use singular/plural correctly (a friend vs. friends), correct verb forms (learned to make friends), and simpler phrasing (I enjoy learning languages and cultures). 4) Limit to 3–4 sentences to be concise and coherent. 5) Give a concrete example (one activity or friend from a country) to make content specific.
Ví dụ: Yes. I was quite shy as a child, so I often played alone at first. However, I joined a school club when I was ten, and that helped me learn to make friends from different countries because I enjoyed learning languages and cultures. Now I have friends in several countries thanks to those early activities.
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Expand this brief reply into a short, structured answer: state your opinion clearly, then give one or two specific reasons and a brief example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to make it coherent. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and avoid one-word responses. Use slightly varied vocabulary (e.g., 'beneficial', 'broaden', 'perspective').
Ví dụ: Yes, they should, because trying different activities broadens your skills and helps you discover new interests. For example, learning a sport or a language can boost confidence and open opportunities for travel or work.
× Unfortunately, yeah, when I was a child, I was a shy person and I couldn't immediately join a group.
✓ Unfortunately, when I was a child I was shy and I couldn't immediately join a group.
The original sentence has unnecessary filler 'yeah' and redundant wording 'a shy person.' This is a style/tense clarity issue in past tense narration. Removing 'yeah' and simplifying to 'I was shy' makes the past-tense statement clearer and more natural. Suggestion: keep past-tense verbs consistent and avoid filler words in formal responses.
× I was playing by myself but then I learned to have to make a friends and since then I have so many friends all over the world you can think all over the world really difficult to find, but I love older culture and I love to learn different language for this reason.
✓ I used to play by myself, but then I learned how to make friends, and since then I have made many friends all over the world. I love older cultures and I love learning different languages for this reason.
Multiple issues limited to types in the list: 'was playing' as past continuous is acceptable but 'I used to play' better matches habitual past (Verb + -ing form issue category 8). 'learned to have to make a friends' is incorrect structure; correct is 'learned how to make friends' (Verb + -ing and pronoun/quantifier issues). 'I have so many friends' better as 'I have made many friends' to show change since then (present perfect). 'older culture' should be plural 'older cultures' and 'learn different language' should be 'learning different languages' (verb + -ing form). Suggestions: use 'learned how to' for acquiring social skills, use plural nouns when speaking generally, and use gerund 'learning' after 'love'.
× I have so many friends all over the world you can think all over the world really difficult to find,
✓ I have so many friends all over the world; they are really difficult to find elsewhere,
The original repeats 'all over the world' and has unclear quantifier/phrase 'you can think.' This is a quantifier/phrase clarity issue. Use a concise quantifier and complete the comparative idea: 'they are really difficult to find elsewhere.' Suggestion: avoid repetition and complete comparative phrases.
× but I love older culture and I love to learn different language for this reason.
✓ but I love older cultures and I love learning different languages for that reason.
'Older culture' should be plural 'older cultures' when speaking generally, and 'to learn different language' requires plural 'languages' and better uses the gerund 'learning' after 'love.' This is an adjective/adverb and verb form issue. Suggestion: use plurals for general statements and use gerunds after verbs like 'love.'
× I have so many friends now.
✓ I have many friends now.
'So many' is not incorrect but in formal answers 'many' is more neutral. The original stands, but simplifying improves clarity. This is a minor sentence structure/style suggestion: prefer concise phrasing in exam responses.