Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve grammatical accuracy and completeness, make the answer concise and clear (max 5 sentences). Start with a direct topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetitions and finish your thought. Work on past tense consistency and smoother phrasing.

Ví dụ: Yes. I had many opportunities at school to try new activities when I was a child. For example, I joined the dance club and the skating team, and I also took part in school plays. These activities helped me become more confident and make friends.

Gợi ý: Give a clear direct opinion first, then explain with organized reasons using linking words. Use neutral, respectful language (avoid phrases like 'bad financial conditions' without clarification). Keep sentences grammatically correct and avoid repetition. Provide 2 specific reasons or examples and conclude briefly.

Ví dụ: I think people should try different things when possible, but there are practical limits. For example, someone from a middle-class family may not have the time or money to join many clubs, while wealthier families can afford more activities. Therefore, opportunities depend on resources, but everyone can still explore hobbies that fit their schedule and budget.

× Yes, definitely in my childhood I get many opportunities in school to get get participation in activities because in my childhood there are too many activities in my school like dancing, skating and playing playing roles of many different things, but I.

✓ Yes, definitely. In my childhood I had many opportunities at school to participate in activities because there were many activities at my school, like dancing, skating, and playing different roles.

Errors: incorrect present tense 'get' should be past 'had' because the speaker refers to childhood (past time); repeated words 'get get' and 'playing playing' are redundant; wrong collocation 'get participation' should be 'to participate'; 'in my school' better as 'at my school'; 'there are too many activities in my school' should be past 'there were many activities at my school'. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time reference, remove duplicated words, use correct verb collocations ('participate in'), and prefer 'at school' for location.

× It has to.

✓ It does.

'It has to' is used incorrectly here; the student likely intended to agree or say 'it does' (short for 'it does have two sides' or 'it is so'). 'Has to' indicates obligation. Suggestion: use 'it does' to affirm the previous idea or rephrase to 'there are two sides to it' for clarity.

× It has two sides because people's generally mostly are from middle class families.

✓ There are two sides because people are generally from middle-class families.

Errors: 'It has two sides' is awkward; better 'there are two sides' or 'there are two aspects'. 'people's generally mostly' combines possessive and adverbs incorrectly and duplicates adverbs 'generally mostly'. Also 'middle class' should be hyphenated as 'middle-class' when used as adjective. Suggestion: simplify to 'people are generally from middle-class families' or 'most people are from middle-class families'.

× They don't, they don't have enough time to try different activities because of their bad financial conditions.

✓ They don't have enough time to try different activities because of their poor financial conditions.

Error: repeated 'they don't, they don't' is redundant; 'bad financial conditions' is unnatural—use 'poor financial conditions' or 'financial difficulties'. Suggestion: remove repetition and choose natural collocation 'poor financial conditions' or 'financial difficulties'.

× But in cases of upper middle class or rich class, they can go.

✓ But in the case of upper-middle-class or wealthy families, they can participate.

Errors: 'in cases of' is awkward; 'upper middle class or rich class' should be 'upper-middle-class or wealthy families'; 'they can go' is vague—use 'they can participate' or 'they can afford to join'. Suggestion: use clearer phrasing and correct adjective form with hyphens, and specify the action ('participate').