Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and clarity: use past tense consistently (e.g., 'I had the chance'), simplify and complete the idea, and add one or two specific supporting details. Keep responses concise (max 4–5 sentences). Use linking words (for example, 'for instance' or 'because') to connect ideas and explain why the experience mattered.

Ví dụ: Yes, I had opportunities to try new activities. For instance, when I was in the first grade of primary school, I was recruited for the basketball team. Because of that experience, I developed a love for the sport and learned teamwork and discipline. It gave me confidence to try other activities later on.

Gợi ý: Make the opinion direct and support it with clear, specific reasons and an example. Avoid filler words ('like', 'maybe') and use linking words ('because', 'for example', 'as a result') to structure the response. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and finish the thought with a clear conclusion or result.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it helps them discover new interests and skills. For example, someone who tries painting might find they enjoy creative work and decide to take classes. As a result, trying new activities can open career or hobby opportunities and increase personal growth.

× Yes, when I was a child, I have a chance to take part on the new activities.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had a chance to take part in new activities.

Tense inconsistency: the sentence begins with 'when I was a child' (past time) but uses present tense 'have'. Use past tense 'had' to match time frame. Also incorrect preposition 'on' with 'take part' — correct is 'take part in'. Suggestion: maintain past tense for past events and use 'take part in' for activities.

× That was that I was recruited to be in the basketball player when I was in first primary school on the first grade and that's why I love

✓ I was recruited to be on the basketball team when I was in first grade of primary school, and that's why I loved it.

Multiple issues: 'the basketball player' incorrectly uses singular noun and article; 'on the basketball team' or 'to be a basketball player' are correct. 'First primary school on the first grade' is incorrect word order and redundancy; use 'first grade of primary school' or 'first grade'. Also tense: describing past event so 'loved' fits better than present 'love'. Suggestion: use 'be on the basketball team' or 'be a basketball player' and maintain past tense consistency.

× In my opinion, I would say yes because if there's many different activities that individuals can try, they can find like a new way to maybe opportunity to gain.

✓ In my opinion, I would say yes because if there are many different activities that individuals can try, they can maybe find new opportunities.

Incorrect contraction and verb 'there's' (there is) with plural 'many different activities' — subject-verb agreement requires 'there are'. The phrase is wordy and contains awkward modal placement 'maybe opportunity to gain'; better: 'they can maybe find new opportunities'. Suggestion: use 'there are' for plural, simplify phrasing, and place 'maybe' before the verb or phrase it as 'may find'.

× For example, they just can find like something that they like and

✓ For example, they can find something they like, and

Awkward insertion of 'just' and filler 'like' used incorrectly. 'Find like something' is incorrect collocation. Also sentence is incomplete; ending with 'and' should lead to a completion. Suggestion: remove unnecessary fillers, use 'they can find something they like' and finish the sentence with the consequence (e.g., 'and pursue it').