Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Thí sinh
Of course, when I was a child I was invited to join the school dance team to perform a show, but at the time my grades were not very good, so I decided to focus on my study and decline the offer. I feel a bit disappointed, but I think the.
Giám khảo
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Thí sinh
Yeah, I think so. By trying various activities, people can find what they really love. For example, joining a Sports Club or learning new language can find unexpected interests. People can discover themselves from different sides and grow more confident.
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 回答整体能表达意思,但存在不完整句、语法和连贯性问题。建议(1)避免句子过长或重复,简化为一两句完整表达;(2)补全未完结的句子,说明原因或结果;(3)使用连接词(for example, so, therefore)使逻辑更清晰;(4)提供具体细节如年龄、活动时长或你后来是否后悔,以丰富内容。示例练习句型:先给主句,再用一两个短句补充细节。
Ví dụ: Yes. When I was 12, I was invited to join the school dance team, but my grades were poor at the time, so I declined to focus on studying. I felt disappointed afterward, and later I regretted not trying because dancing was a great way to build confidence and meet friends.
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Điểm: 78.0Gợi ý: 回答清晰且观点明确,但可改进之处有:(1)注意语法和搭配,如“learning a new language”;(2)使用连接词使句子更连贯(for example, moreover, therefore);(3)在支持细节中加入更具体的例子或结果(如如何变得更自信);(4)控制句子数量与长度,保持自然。
Ví dụ: Yes, I believe so. By trying different activities, people can discover their true interests and strengths. For example, joining a sports club can improve teamwork and fitness, while learning a new language can open up travel and career opportunities. As a result, people often become more confident and adaptable.
× Of course, when I was a child I was invited to join the school dance team to perform a show, but at the time my grades were not very good, so I decided to focus on my study and decline the offer. I feel a bit disappointed, but I think the.
✓ Of course, when I was a child I was invited to join the school dance team to perform a show, but at the time my grades were not very good, so I decided to focus on my studies and decline the offer. I felt a bit disappointed, but I think that was the right choice.
句子中描述的是过去发生的事情,时态需要保持一致。原句前半部分使用了过去时(was invited,decided),但后半部分“I feel a bit disappointed”使用了现在时,造成时态不一致,应改为过去时“felt”。另外“study”作为可数名词的复数形式“studies”更常用于指学业。最后句子不完整,补全为“that was the right choice”使意思明确。建议:描述过去事件时全句使用过去时,注意常见名词复数形式的使用。
× For example, joining a Sports Club or learning new language can find unexpected interests.
✓ For example, joining a sports club or learning a new language can lead to unexpected interests.
原句存在多处问题:1) “Sports Club”不需要大写,普通名词应小写且不需要大写每个词首字母;2) “learning new language”缺少冠词,应该是“learning a new language”;3) 动词搭配不当,“can find unexpected interests”主语是活动,应使用“lead to”或“help people find”;因此改为“can lead to unexpected interests”。建议:注意名词大小写、可数名词需加冠词或复数,以及动词与主语的搭配。
× People can discover themselves from different sides and grow more confident.
✓ People can discover different sides of themselves and become more confident.
原句“discover themselves from different sides”结构不自然,英语常用表达是“discover different sides of themselves”。另外“grow more confident”虽可理解,但更常见和自然的搭配是“become more confident”。建议:学习常用固定搭配和词序,‘discover ... of themselves’更符合习惯说法。