Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more direct and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific details (when, what you learned) and one brief result or feeling. Use correct tense and avoid repetition. Add linking words (for example, later/afterwards, because) to make it coherent.

Ví dụ: Yes. I had the chance to try several new activities as a child, especially cooking. For example, when I was about ten I learned basic recipes from my mother and practised measuring ingredients and following steps. Later, I became confident preparing simple meals, which made me more independent and creative in the kitchen.

Gợi ý: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (for example, firstly/because/therefore). Avoid vague phrases and incorrect grammar; use concise, relevant vocabulary.

Ví dụ: Yes, people should try as many different things as possible. Firstly, trying different activities helps you discover new skills and interests, which can improve your job prospects. Secondly, it encourages creativity and social understanding because you meet different people and perspectives, so overall it benefits both individuals and society.

× Yeah, I do actually.

✓ Yeah, I did actually.

The question asks about past opportunities as a child, so the student should use past tense. 'Do' is present tense; 'did' correctly matches the past context.

× I took part in cooking which I never came to know about what it is and how to use and everything.

✓ I took part in cooking, which I had never known about before, such as what it is and how to do it.

The sentence refers to a past situation before the action of taking part, so past perfect 'had never known' is appropriate. The original also uses awkward phrasing 'how to use' for an activity; 'how to do it' or 'how it works' is clearer. Commas and relative clause punctuation improve clarity.

× But later during my childhood when things goes on, I keep I kept learning things how to make, what are the ingredients to mix.

✓ But later during my childhood, as things went on, I kept learning how to make things and what ingredients to mix.

Multiple issues: 'things goes on' is incorrect subject-verb agreement and tense — use 'things went on' for past. 'I keep I kept' contains a redundant present and past verb; keep should be removed. Word order in 'learning things how to make' is awkward; use 'learning how to make things'. Also 'what are the ingredients to mix' should be 'what ingredients to mix' (correct word order for an indirect question).

× Yeah, I prefer people should do because I'm making a different kind of things in every field is very much useful for games and for the society, I think.

✓ Yes, I think people should try different things because learning various skills in different fields is useful for personal development and for society.

'I prefer people should do' mixes preference and recommendation ungrammatically; use 'I think people should' or 'I prefer that people try'. 'I'm making a different kind of things' uses the wrong tense and verb; 'learning various skills' fits meaning and tense. 'is very much useful for games and for the society' is unclear and unidiomatic; replace with specific, natural phrasing 'useful for personal development and for society'.

× So exploring things and getting to know about it and making a different conclusion will be very much useful.

✓ So exploring things, getting to know them, and forming different conclusions will be very useful.

Maintain parallel structure in the list: 'exploring', 'getting', 'forming' should be parallel gerunds. 'Getting to know about it' is unidiomatic—use 'getting to know them' (referring to 'things'). 'Making a different conclusion' is better as 'forming different conclusions'. 'Very much useful' should be 'very useful'.