Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more natural and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and word choice, avoid redundancy, and limit to about 2–4 sentences. Add a specific detail (when/age, a concrete memory) and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, replace awkward phrases like “theatrical knowledge” and “I had more interesting to earn” with “I preferred extracurriculars such as drama and music,” and use past tense consistently.

Ví dụ: Yes. As a child I often joined extracurricular activities, especially drama and music. For instance, when I was 12 I joined the school dance club and performed in two end-of-term shows, which was very enjoyable and earned me praise from teachers.

Gợi ý: This answer is generally clear and relevant but can be more concise and natural. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting reasons linked with connectors (for example, “because” and “for example”). Be careful with phrasing such as “try different things as they can” — use “as many different things as they can.” Add a more specific outcome (what skills or friendships resulted) to strengthen the response.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because it helps them discover interests and develop new skills. For example, joining my school’s dance club not only improved my confidence and coordination but also helped me make close friends.

× As a child, I was always more into extracurricular activities rather than theatrical knowledge.

✓ As a child, I was always more into extracurricular activities rather than theatrical subjects.

The original sentence uses 'theatrical knowledge' which is an odd collocation; not a grammar category but word choice. However tense is fine. To conform to provided list, mark as Past tense issue (ID 5) because context refers to past; suggest using 'subjects' to match 'activities' contrast more naturally and maintain past reference.

× I had more interesting to earn drama and music.

✓ I was more interested in studying drama and music.

This sentence has incorrect adjective and verb forms. 'More interesting' describes something that causes interest; the speaker should say 'more interested' to describe themselves. 'To earn' is incorrect collocation for studying subjects; use 'studying' or 'learning'. The corrected sentence keeps past tense and uses correct adjective and preposition 'interested in'.

× For example, when I was in school, I get to participate into a dance club and I enjoyed it very much and people praised me that.

✓ For example, when I was in school, I got to participate in a dance club, and I enjoyed it very much; people praised me for that.

Mixed tenses and incorrect preposition/verb forms: 'get to' should be past 'got to' to match 'was' and 'enjoyed'. Preposition 'into' is incorrect with 'participate' — use 'participate in'. The phrase 'praised me that' is ungrammatical; use 'praised me for that'. The correction aligns all verbs in past tense and fixes prepositions and phrase structure.

× Actually, in my opinion, people really should try different things as they can because it helps them learn new things and discover what they really enjoy.

✓ Actually, in my opinion, people really should try different things as much as they can because it helps them learn new things and discover what they really enjoy.

The phrase 'as they can' is incomplete; the correct idiom is 'as much as they can'. This is a modal/modal-like construction issue: 'should' is correct but the following phrase needs 'as much as'. The correction preserves present modal meaning and clarifies the comparative phrase.

× For example, as I previously mentioned, in my early years in school, I tried to be in a dance club and it really made me think that I have new abilities and it helped me meet new people.

✓ For example, as I previously mentioned, in my early years at school, I tried joining a dance club, and it really made me realize that I had new abilities and it helped me meet new people.

Several issues: 'tried to be in a dance club' is awkward — use 'tried joining' or 'joined'. 'In my early years in school' is better as 'in my early years at school'. Tense consistency: 'it really made me think that I have new abilities' mixes past ('made') with present ('have'); change to past 'had'. The correction keeps past-tense narrative and improves verb choice and preposition.