Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答总体能传达意思，但存在多处错误与不自然表达：1) 句子里“learned the photography”与“dance performance”不匹配，语义混淆；2) 句子过长且结构不清，缺少恰当的连词；3) 词汇使用不准确（如“learned the photography”应为“learned the choreography”或“learned the dance”）；4) 细节不够具体（何种舞蹈、具体贡献等）。改进建议：用一到两句主题句直接回答，随后用一到两句补充具体细节并用连接词衔接，注意词汇准确性和句子简洁。示例步骤：开头主题句（I did ...），然后说明准备过程（We practiced X for Y time）并具体讲成果或感受（It improved my ...）。

Ví dụ: I did. For our graduation ceremony, my classmates and I performed a choreographed dance. We practiced the routine every evening for three weeks, which was hard but helped me become more confident and learn to work closely with others.

Gợi ý: 回答有观点但表达混乱且有词汇错误：1) 首句“depends on a person's wealth lingers”不通；2) “broaden my horridness”完全错误用词，影响理解；3) 结尾例子结构混乱，缺少清晰的理由和连接词；4) 超出5句限制且语法错误频出。改进建议：先给出简洁明确的立场（Yes/No/It depends + 简短原因），然后用一两个具体例子或理由支持，使用适当连接词（for example, because, which helped）。注意词汇选择（broaden my horizons, photography taught me different perspectives/seasons/techniques）。

Ví dụ: I think people should try different things because it helps them learn and grow. For example, last year I started learning photography; it taught me how to see scenes from different perspectives and improved my patience and creativity.

× We learned the photography over three weeks which was challenging but memorable and helped me improve my confidence and teamwork.

✓ We learned photography over three weeks, which was challenging but memorable and helped me improve my confidence and teamwork.

问题类型：6（现在时/时态问题）和26（句子结构错误）以及22（冠词错误）。原句中使用了定冠词“the photography”不恰当，foto/photography作泛指时不需要“the”。另外缺少逗号来引出非限制性定语从句，造成句子连接不清晰。建议：去掉“the”，在“weeks”和“which”之间加逗号，使句子更自然。

× I think it depends on a person's wealth lingers.

✓ I think it depends on a person's wealth.

问题类型：26（句子结构错误）和13（词语用法错误）。原句中“lingers”毫无意义且不合语法，可能是误用或多余词。原意是取决于一个人的财富，直接说“I think it depends on a person's wealth.”即可。建议：删除无意义单词“lingers”，保持句子简洁。

× Personally, I enjoy trying new activities I haven't done before because it helps me gain new skills and broaden my horridness for example last year I started learning photography and it taught me two season differently

✓ Personally, I enjoy trying new activities I haven't done before because they help me gain new skills and broaden my horizons. For example, last year I started learning photography, and it taught me to see two seasons differently.

问题类型：13（形容词/副词使用不当）、26（句子结构错误）和11（介词/短语搭配）。错误点：1) 主语一致：原句中“it helps”与前面的复数“activities”不一致，应使用“they help”。2) 单词错误：“horridness”拼写和用法错误，应为“horizons”。3) 缺少标点分隔两个独立句，应在“for example”前后使用逗号或分号并首字母大写。4) “it taught me two season differently”结构不正确，应改为“taught me to see two seasons differently”或“taught me how two seasons look different”。建议：修正规范搭配与拼写，保持主谓一致，并用适当标点分隔句子。