Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: Giảm sử dụng tiếng lắp (uh, um), trả lời trực tiếp hơn với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động và vai trò của mẹ, dùng liên từ để mạch lạc. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn trả lời trực tiếp: “Yes, I had many opportunities…”. (2) Kể 1–2 hoạt động cụ thể (ví dụ: làm bánh, vẽ, chơi thể thao). (3) Mô tả vai trò của mẹ: bà dạy như thế nào, tần suất, bạn học được gì. (4) Giữ độ dài tối đa 3 câu, tránh cảm thán không cần thiết.

Ví dụ: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. For example, my mother often taught me how to bake cookies and encouraged me to join a local art club on weekends. As a result, I learned basic cooking skills and became more confident trying creative hobbies.

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp, rút gọn câu dài và giảm lặp từ (take part/many different things). Thêm một hoặc hai lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn để minh họa. Sử dụng liên từ để kết cấu logic (for example, therefore). Giữ tối đa 3 câu, dùng từ vựng phù hợp (broaden horizons, develop soft skills, opportunities).

Ví dụ: Yes, I believe people should try many different activities because it broadens their horizons and helps them develop useful soft skills. For example, joining a team sport can improve communication and teamwork, while volunteering can build problem-solving abilities. Therefore, trying new things prepares you for future opportunities.

× I used to have a lot of, uh, chance to take part in many activities by my mother.

✓ I used to have a lot of chances to take part in many activities with my mother.

'Chance' should be plural 'chances' when modified by 'a lot of'. Also, 'by my mother' is unnatural here; 'with my mother' correctly indicates she participated with you. Suggestion: use plural nouns with quantifiers like 'a lot of' and choose appropriate prepositions for participation.

× she helped me to bake some cookies and teach me.

✓ she helped me bake some cookies and taught me.

After 'help' the infinitive without 'to' or the base form is common: 'helped me bake'. However, parallel structure is needed: 'helped me bake... and taught me' uses simple past for both actions. The original mixes 'helped' with 'teach' (base) causing tense/parallelism error. Suggestion: keep verbs parallel and match tense.

× Well, from my perspective, I think people should uh, take part in many different things if they are able to because they can broaden their knowledge as well as accumulate more soft skills to do a bigger thing in the future or in another plan.

✓ Well, from my perspective, I think people should try many different things if they can because it broadens their knowledge and helps them develop soft skills for bigger opportunities in the future.

The original sentence is wordy and contains awkward phrases: 'take part in many different things if they are able to' (wordy), 'accumulate more soft skills to do a bigger thing' (unnatural collocation), 'in another plan' (unclear). Corrections simplify language, fix subject-verb agreement ('it broadens'), use appropriate verbs ('try', 'develop'), and clarify meaning ('bigger opportunities'). Suggestion: aim for concise, natural collocations and ensure subject-verb agreement and clear object phrases.