Tiredness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 你直接回答了问题，也提供了喝咖啡的原因，但后两句重复表达咖啡因很多，影响简洁度。“six shots for Americano”表达不自然，可说“six shots of espresso in my Americano”；“even I'm physically feel tired”有语法问题，可改为“even if I feel physically tired”。建议用一两句补充咖啡带来的效果，并避免把咖啡因描述成让身体真正不疲劳。

Ví dụ: Not very often, although I sometimes feel tired after a long day. I usually have a strong Americano in the morning, which helps me feel more alert.

Gợi ý: 回答有具体情境，但后半段语法错误较多，导致意思不够清楚。“high efficient”应改为“efficient”，“plan my things very according to my schedule properly”表达重复且不自然；“there will be of a sudden thing that pop into”可改为“something unexpected may come up”。建议先直接说熬夜赶工会让你疲惫，再用一句说明这是偶尔发生的情况。

Ví dụ: I usually feel tired when I have to stay up late to finish a project. I try to plan my work carefully, but unexpected tasks sometimes come up. After a sleepless night, I find it hard to concentrate the next day.

Gợi ý: 你给出了小睡和喝咖啡两种做法，内容切题，但句子过长，多个意思挤在一起，逻辑连接不清。“go on bed”应为“lie down”或“go to bed”，“makes me clear”应为“helps me feel alert”；“energy drinking”不自然，可说“an energy drink”。建议拆成两三句，并明确说明什么时候会选择每种方法。

Ví dụ: If I can, I lie down and take a short nap. When I’m at work and can’t rest, I usually have a cup of coffee to help me feel more alert. I try not to drink too much, though.

Gợi ý: 你清楚表达了累的时候会选择休息，也补充了朋友能够理解这一点。不过“I don't, I would not do this”重复，“Even my friends invited me”应改为“Even if my friends invited me”，“say a no”应为“say no”；“watch my body really needs”表达不清，可说“get the rest my body needs”。建议简洁回答，并用自然的条件句说明你会拒绝邀约。

Ví dụ: Usually, I’d rather stay home and rest when I’m tired. Even if my friends invited me out, I’d politely say no because I need to recharge. They understand, since we all have busy lives.

× So even I'm physically feel tired, but with all those chemicals running in my blood, I think I'm doing fine.

✓ So even if I feel physically tired, with all those chemicals running in my blood, I think I'm doing fine.

这里表达“即使……”，应使用连词 even if，而不是 even。改成 even if 后，后面的 but 也不必再用来表示转折，避免重复。

× So even I'm physically feel tired, but with all those chemicals running in my blood, I think I'm doing fine.

✓ So even if I feel physically tired, with all those chemicals running in my blood, I think I'm doing fine.

原句中 I'm physically feel 同时使用了 be 动词和动词 feel，结构不正确。表达“我感觉身体疲惫”时，应直接说 I feel physically tired。

× Normally it won't happen to me because I'm very high efficient and I would plan my things very according to my schedule properly, but there will be of a sudden thing that pop into that have to stay up late.

✓ Normally it won't happen to me because I'm highly efficient and I plan my tasks carefully according to my schedule, but sometimes something suddenly comes up that means I have to stay up late.

修饰形容词 efficient 应使用副词 highly，而不是 high。原句中的 very 也不能直接放在 according to 前作修饰语；可用 carefully 修饰 plan。建议注意副词修饰形容词或动词时的位置和形式。

× Normally it won't happen to me because I'm very high efficient and I would plan my things very according to my schedule properly, but there will be of a sudden thing that pop into that have to stay up late.

✓ Normally it won't happen to me because I'm highly efficient and I plan my tasks carefully according to my schedule, but sometimes something suddenly comes up that means I have to stay up late.

there will be 后面不能接 of a sudden thing。此处表达“突然有事情发生”，可以直接说 something suddenly comes up。建议不要在 there be 结构中多加介词 of。

× Normally it won't happen to me because I'm very high efficient and I would plan my things very according to my schedule properly, but there will be of a sudden thing that pop into that have to stay up late.

✓ Normally it won't happen to me because I'm highly efficient and I plan my tasks carefully according to my schedule, but sometimes something suddenly comes up that means I have to stay up late.

原句后半部分的 that pop into that have to stay up late 缺少清楚、完整的句子结构，无法明确表达“突然有事情发生，导致我必须熬夜”。可以改为 something suddenly comes up that means I have to stay up late。

× I would just go on bed to take a quick nap if it's possible but if it's not, I would just keep drinking coffee until it makes me clear and refreshed most of the time if I feel tired during the work where I cannot take a nap, so the energy drinking is my best choice.

✓ I would just go to bed to take a quick nap if it's possible, but if it's not, I would keep drinking coffee until I feel clear and refreshed. If I feel tired while working and can't take a nap, energy drinks are my best choice.

表示“上床、去睡觉”时使用 go to bed，而不是 go on bed。建议记住固定搭配 go to bed。

× I would just go on bed to take a quick nap if it's possible but if it's not, I would just keep drinking coffee until it makes me clear and refreshed most of the time if I feel tired during the work where I cannot take a nap, so the energy drinking is my best choice.

✓ I would just go to bed to take a quick nap if it's possible, but if it's not, I would keep drinking coffee until I feel clear and refreshed. If I feel tired while working and can't take a nap, energy drinks are my best choice.

原句把多个条件和结果连续堆在一起，导致句子结构混乱，尤其是 most of the time if... so... 的连接不清楚。建议拆分成两个句子，并让每个 if 条件对应清楚的结果。

× I don't, I would not do this.

✓ No, I wouldn't do this.

原句用逗号连接了两个完整意思，形成逗号拼接句；而 I don't 后面也没有补充它所否定的动作。可以简洁地说 No, I wouldn't do this。

× Even my friends invited me, I would say a no to them because I do deserve this quiet peaceful rest and watch my body really needs.

✓ Even if my friends invited me, I would say no to them because I do deserve the quiet, peaceful rest that my body really needs.

这里表达“即使朋友邀请我”，应使用 even if 引导条件或让步从句，不能只用 even。建议使用完整的连词 even if 来连接从句。

× Even my friends invited me, I would say a no to them because I do deserve this quiet peaceful rest and watch my body really needs.

✓ Even if my friends invited me, I would say no to them because I do deserve the quiet, peaceful rest that my body really needs.

no 在 say no 这个表达中作“不”使用，不需要冠词 a。建议记住固定表达 say no to someone。

× Even my friends invited me, I would say a no to them because I do deserve this quiet peaceful rest and watch my body really needs.

✓ Even if my friends invited me, I would say no to them because I do deserve the quiet, peaceful rest that my body really needs.

原句中的 rest and watch my body really needs 结构不完整，watch 无法与 rest 并列，也无法构成后面的从句。可改为 the rest that my body really needs，其中 that 引导修饰 rest 的定语从句。

× And all my friends actually they would understand the situation because most of us have a very tiring and hectic life.

✓ And my friends would actually understand the situation because most of us have a very tiring and hectic life.

原句中 all my friends 和 they 都作主语，造成主语重复。保留其中一个主语即可；actually 放在 would 后面也更清楚。