Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you often feel tired?
Thí sinh
Yeah, sometimes I often feel tired when I go back to home, when I have the daily to work. I also have some part time job, you know, after job I come home and after I finish my homework, I always feel tired.
Giám khảo
When would you feel tired?
Thí sinh
Maybe in the afternoon or in the evening when I come by home and finish my part time job or finish my class. Yeah under I need to claim my cat and do some homework
Giám khảo
What do you do when you feel tired?
Thí sinh
Sometimes I just laying on the bed if I have some energy I like to watch some movie or make some snack for me
Giám khảo
When you feel tired, do you still go out with your friends?
Thí sinh
Oh, that was true. I like playing tennis. When I feel tired, sometimes I play tennis with my friends if I was free. So So sometimes, maybe not often, not every day, but if I still have high energy, I come I go back.
Do you often feel tired?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 回答基本切题,也提供了疲劳的原因,但“sometimes I often”语义重复;“go back to home”“the daily to work”“after job”等表达不自然。建议先直接回答频率,再按照“原因+结果”的顺序补充细节,并使用更准确的搭配,如“go home”“after work”以及“part-time job”。同时避免重复使用“after”和过长的句子。
Ví dụ: Yes, I sometimes feel tired, especially after a long day. I have a part-time job, and I usually do my homework when I get home. As a result, I often feel exhausted by the end of the day.
When would you feel tired?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: 回答提到了具体时间段和原因,但“come by home”应改为“come home”,“claim my cat”不符合语境,应该是“clean/feed/take care of my cat”。“Yeah under”意思不清楚。建议用“通常是在……的时候”的结构,并把上课、兼职和照顾宠物等活动清楚地连接起来。
Ví dụ: I usually feel tired in the afternoon or evening, especially after my classes or my part-time job. When I get home, I still need to take care of my cat and do my homework, so I often feel worn out at that time.
What do you do when you feel tired?
Điểm: 64.0Gợi ý: 回答直接说明了休息、看电影和做零食等活动,内容合适,但“just laying”应改为“just lie”或“just lie down”,“watch some movie”应改为“watch a movie/some movies”,“make some snack for me”应改为“make myself a snack”。建议加入连接词,并用条件句清楚表达不同精力状态下的做法。
Ví dụ: When I feel tired, I usually lie down and take a short break. If I still have a little energy, I watch a movie or make myself a snack. These activities help me relax without requiring too much effort.
When you feel tired, do you still go out with your friends?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答尝试表达“有时仍然会和朋友出去”,但开头“Oh, that was true”不自然,且“if I was free”应改为“if I am free”,“I come I go back”意思不清楚。回答中有较多重复和自我修正。建议先明确回答“Yes, sometimes”或“No, usually not”,然后说明只有精力充足时才会打网球,并使用简洁、连贯的条件句。
Ví dụ: Yes, sometimes I still go out with my friends, especially to play tennis. However, I only do this if I have enough energy and I am not too busy. If I am extremely tired, I prefer to stay home and rest.
× Yeah, sometimes I often feel tired when I go back to home, when I have the daily to work.
✓ Yeah, sometimes I feel tired when I go back home after my daily work.
“go back home”中,home前通常不使用介词“to”。另外,“the daily to work”结构错误,表示“日常工作”可以说“my daily work”。“sometimes”和“often”同时使用不自然,因此保留“sometimes”即可。
× I also have some part time job, you know, after job I come home and after I finish my homework, I always feel tired.
✓ I also have a part-time job. You know, after work, I come home, and after I finish my homework, I always feel tired.
“job”是可数名词单数,前面需要使用冠词“a”,所以应说“a part-time job”。“after job”表达不正确;表示“下班后”时通常说“after work”。
× Maybe in the afternoon or in the evening when I come by home and finish my part time job or finish my class.
✓ Maybe in the afternoon or in the evening, when I come home after my part-time job or class.
“come by home”中的介词使用错误,表示“回家”应说“come home”,不能说“come by home”。“after my part-time job or class”可以更清楚地表达时间关系。
× Yeah under I need to claim my cat and do some homework.
✓ Yeah, and I need to clean my cat and do some homework.
这里需要使用连词“and”连接前后的信息。“under”不能在此处充当连词。“claim my cat”不符合语境;如果你想表达“给猫清洁”,应使用“clean my cat”。
× Sometimes I just laying on the bed if I have some energy I like to watch some movie or make some snack for me.
✓ Sometimes I just lie on the bed. If I have some energy, I like to watch a movie or make a snack for myself.
“just”后面需要接动词原形,因此不能说“just laying”,应说“just lie”。这里谈论通常的习惯,使用一般现在时。由于“movie”和“snack”都是可数名词单数,前面需要使用“a”。“for myself”表示“给自己”,比“for me”更准确。
× Sometimes I just laying on the bed if I have some energy I like to watch some movie or make some snack for me.
✓ Sometimes I just lie on the bed. If I have some energy, I like to watch a movie or make a snack for myself.
原句把两个完整的句子直接连接在一起,缺少适当的标点或连接方式。可以拆成两个句子,并在“If I have some energy”后加逗号,使句子结构清晰。
× Sometimes I just laying on the bed if I have some energy I like to watch some movie or make some snack for me.
✓ Sometimes I just lie on the bed. If I have some energy, I like to watch a movie or make a snack for myself.
“movie”和“snack”在这里都是单数可数名词,不能直接与“some”搭配。应使用“a movie”和“a snack”。
× Oh, that was true.
✓ Oh, that’s true.
问题询问的是你现在通常的情况,因此应使用一般现在时“is”,而不是过去时“was”。“That’s true”表示“确实如此”。
× When I feel tired, sometimes I play tennis with my friends if I was free.
✓ When I feel tired, sometimes I play tennis with my friends if I am free.
这句话描述现在或平时的情况,所以条件从句也应使用一般现在时。“I was free”是过去时,应该改为“I am free”。
× So So sometimes, maybe not often, not every day, but if I still have high energy, I come I go back.
✓ Sometimes, maybe not often or every day, but if I still have a lot of energy, I still go out with my friends.
“I come I go back”包含重复且不完整的动词结构,句子意思不清楚。应该根据问题中的“go out”使用完整表达“go out with my friends”。同时,删除重复的“So”,并用“a lot of energy”表达“很多精力”,使句子更自然。