Tiredness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答切题，并给出了毕业论文和展示的原因，但表达略显重复和不自然。应直接说明“最近经常疲惫”，然后用一个连接词补充具体原因。注意说“prepare for graduation”“work on my graduation thesis”和“prepare for my presentation”，而不是“ready for the graduation”或“work with my essay”。尽量减少停顿词和重复表达。

Ví dụ: Yes, I’ve been feeling tired quite often recently because I’m in my final year of university. I’m working on my graduation thesis and preparing for my final presentation, so I’ve been under quite a lot of pressure.

Gợi ý: 回答包含了疲惫出现的时间和原因，但“do one chapter”不自然，应该说“write a chapter”或“work on a chapter”。“it really exhausting”缺少be动词，应改为“it’s really exhausting”。“fill up the gap”表达不准确，可以说“find information to support my arguments”。建议使用“especially when”连接具体情境，并避免重复和过多停顿。

Ví dụ: I usually feel tired when I work on a difficult chapter of my thesis, especially when I have to search for reliable sources online. It can be exhausting because finding enough information to support my arguments often takes several hours.

Gợi ý: 回答清楚说明了会外出放松，并给出了散步和慢跑的例子。不过“find some new things”语义不清，建议改为“do something different”或“change my surroundings”；“do some jog”应改为“go jogging”或“do some jogging”。可以用“for example”自然引出具体活动，并补充这些活动如何帮助你恢复精力。

Ví dụ: When I feel tired, I usually do something different to clear my mind. For example, I take a walk in the park or go jogging for a while. Getting some fresh air helps me relax and return to my work with more energy.

Gợi ý: 回答直接表明了会和朋友外出，也提供了放松、锻炼和买零食等细节。但“relax myself”应改为“help me relax”，“find some common ideas”不符合此处语境，可以说“chat about things we have in common”。并列内容较多且语法形式不统一，应使用“chat, exercise, or buy...”这样的平行结构。最后可说明和朋友相处能帮助你暂时忘记学习压力。

Ví dụ: Yes, I still go out with my friends when I’m tired because spending time with them helps me relax. We might chat over a drink, go for a walk, or buy some snacks together. It gives me a break from my studies and helps me feel better.

× I often feel tired recently because I am a senior student and I am uh ready for the graduation, and I have to work with my UH graduation paper essay and deal with my presentation.

✓ I often feel tired because I am a senior student, I am getting ready for graduation, and I have to work on my graduation essay and prepare for my presentation.

“work with my graduation essay”中的介词搭配不正确。表示“从事、撰写某项工作”时，通常使用“work on”，而不是“work with”。另外，“getting ready for graduation”比“ready for the graduation”更自然；“graduation”在这里通常不需要定冠词“the”。

× I often feel. I often feel tired when I umm, do 1 chapter of my essay because umm, it really exhausting to to umm, find the materials and uh, resources uh, from the Internet to fill up the gap.

✓ I often feel tired when I work on one chapter of my essay because it is really exhausting to find materials and resources on the Internet to fill the gap.

“I often feel.”没有表达完整意思，后面缺少必要的补充内容，因此应删除。句子“it really exhausting”缺少系动词“is”，正确形式是“it is really exhausting”。

× When I feel tired I would like to find some new things, umm go outside to distract my attention. Like take a walk in the park and do some jog maybe?

✓ When I feel tired, I like to find something new and go outside to distract myself, such as taking a walk in the park or doing some jogging.

“do some jog”中的“jog”需要使用动名词形式“jogging”。“do some jogging”表示“慢跑”。在“such as”后面列举活动时，也要保持形式一致，因此使用“taking”和“doing”。

× When I feel tired, I will still go out with my friend because umm, going out with friends can relax myself.

✓ When I feel tired, I still go out with my friends because going out with friends helps me relax.

“relax myself”在这里使用不自然。主语“going out with friends”不能直接“relax myself”；更自然的表达是“help me relax”，意思是“帮助我放松”。“myself”通常用于强调主语或表示主语对自己做某事。

× When I feel tired, I will still go out with my friend because umm, going out with friends can relax myself.

✓ When I feel tired, I still go out with my friends because going out with friends helps me relax.

问题是询问一种经常性的习惯：“When you feel tired, do you still go out...?” 因此回答应使用一般现在时“still go”，而不是表示将来或意愿的“will still go”。同时，“going out with friends”是单数动名词短语，所以谓语应使用“helps”。

× Uh, we can find some common ideas and maybe do some exercise together and hanging around, buy something, maybe drinks or snacks umm.

✓ We can share ideas, do some exercise together, hang around, and buy drinks or snacks.

原句中“do”“hanging”“buy”的形式不平行，导致句子结构混乱。并列列举多个动作时，应使用相同形式： “share”“do”“hang around”和“buy”。另外，“maybe drinks or snacks”不能单独作为句子成分，应该直接放在“buy”后面。