Tiredness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: ‘I think’를 반복하지 말고, 빈도 표현을 자연스러운 위치에 배치하세요. ‘feel often tired’보다는 ‘often feel tired’가 맞으며, ‘spend too much energy to prepare’는 ‘use a lot of energy preparing for’ 또는 ‘spend a lot of time preparing for’로 표현하는 것이 자연스럽습니다. 질문에 직접 답한 뒤 구체적인 이유를 한 문장으로 연결하면 더 효과적입니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often feel tired these days because I spend a lot of time preparing for the IELTS test. Studying after work can be quite exhausting.

Gợi ý: 문장 시작을 ‘Because’로 하지 말고 먼저 시간대를 직접 제시하세요. ‘get in home’은 ‘get home’ 또는 ‘come back home’으로 고치고, ‘after I cope’처럼 의미가 불분명한 반복 표현은 삭제해야 합니다. ‘I usually feel tired after work because…’와 같이 주제 문장과 이유를 명확하게 연결하세요.

Ví dụ: I usually feel tired in the evening, especially after work. I work at the office all day, so I feel exhausted when I get home.

Gợi ý: ‘take a rest item’은 자연스럽지 않으므로 ‘take a rest’ 또는 ‘get some rest’를 사용하세요. ‘instead of hanging out’ 뒤에는 비교 대상이 명확하므로 ‘instead of going out’이라고 표현하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 답변에 휴식 방법을 하나 추가하면 내용이 더 구체적이고 풍부해집니다.

Ví dụ: When I feel tired, I usually stay home and get some rest instead of going out. I might take a nap or watch a relaxing TV show.

Gợi ý: 조건문이 길고 ‘if not’이 반복되어 명확성이 떨어집니다. ‘If I already have plans, I still go out; otherwise, I stay home’처럼 두 상황을 대조적으로 정리하세요. ‘we make that appointment a few days ago’는 ‘we made the plans a few days ago’로 고치고, 친구를 만나더라도 피곤한 상태를 설명하는 구체적인 결과를 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: If I already have plans with my friends, I usually still go out, especially if we made them a few days in advance. Otherwise, I prefer to stay home and rest because I do not want to cancel at the last minute.

× Yes these days I think I feel often tired because I think I spend too much energy to prepare the IS test.

✓ Yes, these days, I think I often feel tired because I think I spend too much energy to prepare for the IS test.

The adverb often should be placed before the main verb feel, not after it. A useful pattern is subject + often + verb, as in I often feel tired.

× Yes these days I think I feel often tired because I think I spend too much energy to prepare the IS test.

✓ Yes, these days, I think I often feel tired because I think I spend too much energy preparing for the IS test.

After spend + time or energy, use a verb in the -ing form. The correct pattern is spend energy doing something, not spend energy to do something.

× Yes these days I think I feel often tired because I think I spend too much energy to prepare the IS test.

✓ Yes, these days, I think I often feel tired because I think I spend too much energy preparing for the IS test.

The verb prepare is followed by the preposition for when you mention the examination or purpose. Say prepare for the IS test.

× Because I work all day at the office so I mostly feel tired after I get in home after I cope after I come back home.

✓ Because I work all day at the office, I mostly feel tired when I come back home.

Do not use because and so together in the same cause-and-effect structure. Use because to introduce the reason, or use so to introduce the result, but not both.

× Because I work all day at the office so I mostly feel tired after I get in home after I cope after I come back home.

✓ Because I work all day at the office, I mostly feel tired when I come back home.

The natural expression is come back home or get home. Home does not normally take the preposition in after get.

× Because I work all day at the office so I mostly feel tired after I get in home after I cope after I come back home.

✓ Because I work all day at the office, I mostly feel tired when I come back home.

The original sentence contains repeated and incomplete phrases, such as after I cope and after I come back home. Use one clear time expression and one complete clause.

× If I feel tired I prefer to take a rest item instead of hanging out

✓ If I feel tired, I prefer to rest instead of hanging out.

The phrase take a rest item is not a correct English structure. Use prefer to rest or prefer to take a rest. Also, place a comma after the introductory if-clause.

× If I have an appointment with friends and we make that appointment a few days ago then I will hang out with them but if not if not in that case, I will not go out.

✓ If I have an appointment with my friends and we made it a few days ago, I will hang out with them; otherwise, I will not go out.

The time expression a few days ago refers to the past, so make must be changed to its past-tense form, made.

× If I have an appointment with friends and we make that appointment a few days ago then I will hang out with them but if not if not in that case, I will not go out.

✓ If I have an appointment with my friends and we made it a few days ago, I will hang out with them; otherwise, I will not go out.

The repeated phrase if not if not in that case is not grammatically correct. Use otherwise to introduce the alternative result.

× If I have an appointment with friends and we make that appointment a few days ago then I will hang out with them but if not if not in that case, I will not go out.

✓ If I have an appointment with my friends and we made it a few days ago, I will hang out with them; otherwise, I will not go out.

The original sentence has too many conjunctions and repeated phrases. Divide the idea into a clear conditional clause and a concise alternative clause.