Tiredness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and add a clear topic sentence then one supporting detail with linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., "tired" used many times). Include a brief reason and a typical reaction. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., "exhausted", "unwind").

Ví dụ: Yes, I often feel tired because I finish school late and have a heavy workload. For example, after a long day I usually unwind on my bed and quickly fall asleep to recover.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct topic sentence stating the typical time you feel tired, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Avoid long run-on sentences and correct plural form "homework" (uncountable).

Ví dụ: I usually feel tired in the late afternoon and evening after school because I have homework and extracurricular activities. As a result, I often fall asleep before finishing my tasks.

Gợi ý: Lead with a clear topic sentence describing your usual action, then add a consequence using a linking phrase (e.g., "however", "as a result"). Keep sentences short and correct tense ("before I can" or "before I could" depending on time).

Ví dụ: I usually sit or lie down on my bed to rest when I'm tired. However, I often fall asleep and therefore can't finish my schoolwork or have dinner.

Gợi ý: Give a direct answer then one clear condition or example. Use concise linking words (e.g., "but only if", "usually") and avoid redundancy like repeating "when". Provide a short reason or typical scenario.

Ví dụ: Yes, but only if I'm not at home. For instance, I often hang out with friends after school while I'm waiting for my ride home.

× Yes, I do, mainly because of school and I go home late.

✓ Yes, I do, mainly because of school and I go home late.

This sentence is generally acceptable in present tense; no change required. Keep present simple for habitual actions. Note: no correction needed.

× When I'm tired I usually just rest on my bed until I fall asleep

✓ When I'm tired, I usually rest on my bed until I fall asleep.

Missing comma after the introductory clause and unnecessary word 'just'. Add comma to separate clauses and remove 'just' for clearer, more natural expression. Suggestion: Use a comma after initial subordinate clauses and avoid filler words.

× I usually feel tired after school and when I get home I get even more exhausted because I have homeworks and school activities to do, but because I fall asleep every day I don't get to finish these activities.

✓ I usually feel tired after school, and when I get home I get even more exhausted because I have homework and school activities to do; because I fall asleep every day, I don't get to finish these activities.

'Homeworks' is incorrect: 'homework' is an uncountable noun (Article errors/quantifier). Also needed commas to separate clauses and a semicolon or coordinating conjunction to join related clauses for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'homework' (no plural) and add punctuation to clarify sentence structure.

× When I feel tired, I usually just take a seat or lie down on my bed to rest, but eventually I fall asleep before I could do any school activities or eat dinner.

✓ When I feel tired, I usually take a seat or lie down on my bed to rest, but eventually I fall asleep before I can do any school activities or eat dinner.

Use present tense 'can' instead of past 'could' to match the present habitual context (Present tense issue). Remove 'just' as filler. Suggestion: Maintain consistent present tense for habitual actions: 'I fall asleep before I can...'.

× Yes, I do, but only when I am not at home.

✓ Yes, I do, but only when I am not at home.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the question context; no change required. Note: No correction needed.

× I usually go out with my friends a lot after school when I am still in the area when my service hasn't picked me up yet

✓ I usually go out with my friends a lot after school when I am still in the area and my service hasn't picked me up yet.

The original has two 'when' clauses creating awkward repetition. Replace the second 'when' with 'and' to combine conditions smoothly. Suggestion: Avoid stacking 'when' clauses; use conjunctions like 'and' or restructure into separate sentences for clarity.