Tiredness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question (Yes/No and why), then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (e.g. avoid double negatives and repetitive phrases) and linking words (however, for example). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: No, I don't often feel tired; in fact, I'm usually energetic, even in the mornings. However, some days leave me exhausted, for example after a long commute that includes a school run and a train journey. In those cases I feel very tired by the evening.

Gợi ý: Structure your answer: give a clear topic sentence stating specific situations, then support with one detailed example using linking words (for example, because, also). Correct verb tense and article use, and avoid long, unfocused lists. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: I usually feel tired after long periods of physical activity or nonstop travel. For example, when I worked as a personal trainer I would train clients, do my own workout and then study for two to three hours after 11 pm, so I was exhausted by evening. I also get tired after long business trips because of constant travel and little rest.

Gợi ý: Give a direct topic sentence about your typical reaction, then provide two clear, specific activities as examples. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words (for instance, sometimes, occasionally) and correct word forms (embrace myself → be alone/relax). Keep within 2–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: When I feel tired, I usually withdraw and relax by myself. For instance, I often sit on my balcony with a book or a cup of coffee to unwind, and sometimes I simply close my eyes and listen to music for twenty minutes to recharge.

× Not exactly I do not feel tired occasionally Quite opposite.

✓ Not exactly; I do not feel tired; quite the opposite.

The original sentence has adverbs and phrases in the wrong order and missing punctuation, making the meaning unclear. 'Occasionally' conflicts with 'Not exactly' and 'do not feel tired.' Rearranging to 'Not exactly; I do not feel tired; quite the opposite.' places the adverbial idea of contrast correctly. Use punctuation to separate short responses and ensure adverbs do not contradict the main verb.

× I'm mostly energetic at most of the time included mornings which is hard to be energetic for most people.

✓ I'm mostly energetic most of the time, including mornings, which are hard for most people to be energetic in.

Problems: incorrect phrase 'at most of the time' and wrong form 'included mornings'. Also 'which is hard to be energetic for most people' has wrong clause structure and agreement. Use 'most of the time' or 'mostly' (here 'mostly energetic most of the time'), 'including mornings' as a participial phrase, and correct relative clause 'which are hard for most people to be energetic in.' This fixes adverb placement and subject agreement.

× Nevertheless, sometimes the day I spend makes me feel exhaustive in evenings.

✓ Nevertheless, sometimes the days I spend make me feel exhausted in the evenings.

Errors: 'day' should be plural 'days' to agree with 'sometimes' and 'makes' should be 'make' for subject-verb agreement. 'Exhaustive' is an adjective meaning 'thorough' — the intended adjective is 'exhausted.' Add definite article 'the evenings.' This addresses pluralization and correct adjective choice.

× For example after a long school run and a train following it would be strongly possible for me to feel to feel excited.

✓ For example, after a long school run and a train journey afterward, I would be very likely to feel exhausted.

Issues: missing comma after 'For example', awkward phrase 'a train following it' and incorrect modal phrasing 'would be strongly possible' and repeated 'to feel'. Also 'excited' contradicts context; 'exhausted' fits. Use 'likely' with 'would be' or simply 'I am likely to feel.' Use 'afterward' or 'after that' instead of 'following it.'

× usually feel tired after a long run working or non stop travelling.

✓ I usually feel tired after a long run at work or nonstop traveling.

Sentence begins with lowercase and lacks subject; add 'I'. 'Long run working' is unclear — likely 'long run at work' or 'long period of work.' 'Non stop' should be one word 'nonstop.' Fix capitalization and word order.

× For instance, I spend a period of my life where I work in as a personal trainer after school and doing my own workout, after job.

✓ For instance, I spent a period of my life working as a personal trainer after school and doing my own workout after work.

Tense mismatch: context refers to a past period, so use past tense 'spent' and gerund 'working.' Remove extra preposition 'in' and change 'after job' to 'after work.' Use consistent verb forms (past simple + gerund).

× Additionally I will study for two to three hours after my own workout after eleven PM.

✓ Additionally, I would study for two to three hours after my workout, often after eleven PM.

The original uses future 'will' incorrectly when describing a habitual past routine. 'Would' or 'used to' is better for past habits. 'My own' is unnecessary; 'my workout' suffices. Add commas for clarity and place time expression 'after eleven PM' at end.

× So I used to feel tired in evenings in that period.

✓ So I used to feel tired in the evenings during that period.

Add definite article 'the evenings' and replace 'in that period' with 'during that period.' Original is understandable but needs correct preposition and article use.

× Moreover I traveled a lot to attend some conference.

✓ Moreover, I traveled a lot to attend some conferences.

'Some conference' is ungrammatical as 'conference' should be plural or have an article: 'some conferences' or 'a conference.' Also add comma after 'Moreover.' Use plural since 'a lot' suggests multiple events.

× When I feel completely tired, I usually do nothing but whatever I want to do at that moment for example, I usually eager to move away from move away from any crowd to embrace myself and from time to time.

✓ When I feel completely tired, I usually do nothing but whatever I want to do at that moment; for example, I am eager to move away from any crowd to be alone from time to time.

Multiple problems: missing verb 'am' in 'I usually eager', repeated phrase 'move away from move away from', and unclear 'embrace myself'. 'Embrace myself' should be 'be alone' or 'embrace solitude.' Use semicolon or sentence break before 'for example.' Fix verb forms and remove repetition.

× Additionally sometimes I do literally literally nothing, just sitting on my balcony and maybe reading a book or just sipping coffee.

✓ Additionally, sometimes I literally do nothing: just sit on my balcony, maybe read a book, or sip coffee.

Duplicate 'literally literally' should be once. Use base verb forms 'sit', 'read', 'sip' after 'do nothing' rather than gerunds for parallel structure. Add commas and colon for clarity.

× moreovers if I

✓ Moreover, if I ...

Fragment: 'moreovers if I' is incomplete and incorrectly spelled. Capitalize 'Moreover,' fix spelling, and complete the clause. Avoid sentence fragments by providing the main clause following the 'if' conditional.