Tiredness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm, uh), and give one brief supporting reason with a linking word. Use more natural phrasing and correct grammar (e.g. ‘throughout the day’ not ‘all the day’).

Ví dụ: No, I don't. I usually feel energetic throughout the day because I plan my tasks and take short breaks, which helps me maintain my energy.

Gợi ý: This answer is clear but can be improved by adding a linking phrase and a specific reason. Mentioning a cause or routine that leads to tiredness will make it more informative. Keep it to two sentences maximum.

Ví dụ: I usually feel tired at night, especially just before bed, because I’ve been active all day and my body needs rest. As a result, I fall asleep more easily.

Gợi ý: Correct grammar and be more specific. Use a clear topic sentence and a linking word, and avoid awkward phrases (e.g. ‘a living music of K pop’). Explain briefly why that helps. Keep it natural and concise.

Ví dụ: When I feel tired, I often listen to energetic K-pop or pop songs because upbeat music lifts my mood and energises me quickly.

× No, I don't. I don't think so because umm, all the day I feel very active and umm, because I think the reason is, uh, I do anything very effectively and I don't feel very tired often.

✓ No, I don't. I don't think so, because all day I feel very active. I think the reason is that I do things very effectively and I am not often very tired.

Multiple issues: 'all the day' is incorrect preposition/phrase use (use 'all day') — categorized as Incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11). 'do anything' is wrong choice of determiner/meaning; it should be 'do things' (Incorrect use of quantifiers or word choice — ID 14). 'I don't feel very tired often' has awkward adverb placement; better 'I am not often very tired' (Incorrect adverb placement — ID 20). Also sentence structure was long and run-on; splitting into two sentences improves clarity (Sentence structure errors — ID 26). Suggestions: use 'all day', replace 'anything' with 'things' for general actions, move adverb 'often' before 'very' or place it before adjective phrase, and break long sentences into shorter ones for clarity.

× I often feel exhausted at night or before bed. It's very good for me because I can fall and sleep better.

✓ I often feel exhausted at night, before bed. That's good for me because I can fall asleep more easily.

'It's very good for me' is grammatical but slightly unnatural; use 'That's good for me' (style). 'fall and sleep' is incorrect collocation; use 'fall asleep' (Verb + -ing/phrase issue — ID 8 or ID 9 depending). 'better' after 'fall asleep' is vague; 'more easily' is clearer (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs — ID 13). Suggestion: use the collocation 'fall asleep' and replace 'better' with 'more easily'.

× When I'm not in active mode, I'm often listen to energetic music such as a living music of K pop or pop music because it enhance my mood very quickly.

✓ When I'm not in active mode, I often listen to energetic music, such as live K-pop or pop music, because it enhances my mood very quickly.

Several grammar problems: 'I'm often listen' mixes continuous auxiliary with base verb — correct is 'I often listen' (Verb in wrong form; categorized as Present tense issue or Subject-verb agreement — ID 6 or 27). 'a living music of K pop' is incorrect phrase; use 'live K-pop' or 'live music' and remove article 'a' (Incorrect use of adjectives or nouns and article errors — IDs 13 and 22). 'it enhance' lacks subject-verb agreement in present simple third person singular — should be 'it enhances' (Third person singular issue — ID 2). Suggestions: use 'I often listen', 'live K-pop', and 'it enhances'.