Tiredness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be direct to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid irrelevant or uncertain statements (e.g. "I'm a woman" as a reason is unnecessary), and reduce repetition. Use precise language and keep the answer within 3–4 sentences. Add one specific supporting detail and a linking phrase to make it coherent.

Ví dụ: No, I don't often feel tired. Sometimes I get more tired during the two weeks before my period, when I notice lower energy and concentration. Otherwise I usually have enough rest because I try to sleep eight hours and exercise regularly.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence answering when you feel tired. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and be concise. Replace vague phrases with specific examples of what makes you tired and one brief strategy you use to cope to add depth.

Ví dụ: I usually feel tired during exam preparation because studying requires processing a large amount of information quickly. For example, reviewing three chapters in one night makes me mentally exhausted, so I break studying into shorter, focused sessions with 10-minute breaks.

Gợi ý: Give a concise topic sentence about your main strategy, then add one or two specific details and use linking words (for example, because, so) to explain why it helps. Avoid filler phrases like "or something" and correct tense consistency.

Ví dụ: I usually go for a walk in a nearby park to recharge my batteries because being in green spaces calms me and clears my mind. For instance, a 20-minute walk after studying helps me feel refreshed and improves my concentration for the next study session.

× Actually no, because I'm a woman.

✓ Actually, no, because I'm a woman.

Missing comma after introductory adverb 'Actually'; not a pronoun error but punctuation. However sentence is acceptable; add comma for clarity.

× We have periods and our period lasts in 30 days or something, and for the last two weeks of the month we feel a bit more tired than usual, but like most of the time we feel we feel OK.

✓ We have periods, and our period lasts about 30 days; for the last two weeks of the cycle we feel a bit more tired than usual, but most of the time we feel OK.

Use 'about 30 days' instead of 'in 30 days or something' for natural quantifier phrasing; 'month' changed to 'cycle' for clarity. Removed repeated phrase 'we feel' and improved punctuation and cohesion.

× I think during exam preparation I feel tired because it requires a lot of material to process and comprehend lots of information at once and to actually learn and understand it.

✓ I think during exam preparation I feel tired because it requires processing and comprehending a lot of information at once to actually learn and understand it.

Improved verb forms: use gerunds 'processing' and 'comprehending' after 'requires'. Added article 'a' before 'lot of information'. This keeps present tense and corrects verb form usage (related to verb + -ing).

× And yeah, it actually worth takes a lot of time and energy to prepare for the tests.

✓ And yeah, it actually is worth it; preparing for tests takes a lot of time and energy.

Original mixes 'worth' and 'takes' incorrectly. Use 'is worth it' or split into two clauses: 'preparing for tests takes...' This corrects sentence structure and adjective/adverb misuse.

× I tried to relax and the best thing to recharge my batteries is to go for a walk and in green spaces I feel nature helps me to escape reality or something.

✓ I try to relax, and the best way to recharge my batteries is to go for a walk in green spaces; I feel nature helps me escape reality.

Change 'tried' (past) to 'try' (habitual present) to match question asking what you do when tired. Use 'way' instead of 'thing' for natural phrasing and streamline clause order.

× And the fresh air actually very refreshing for my eyes and brain which helps me to maintain balance between study and relaxed time.

✓ And the fresh air is actually very refreshing for my eyes and brain, which helps me maintain a balance between study and relaxation.

Missing verb 'is' after subject; 'relaxed time' is unnatural—use 'relaxation'. Added article 'a' before 'balance' and removed unnecessary 'to'. This corrects adjective/adverb placement and sentence structure.