Tiredness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise, avoid repetition and hesitations, and give a clear reason or brief example. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use correct phrasing (e.g., “feel tired” not “get him”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I often feel tired after a long day at work. For example, after busy shifts I feel drained by the evening, so I usually rest for a while before doing anything else.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear, structured answer: state the main time you feel tired and then give specific activities that cause it. Use linking words like “because” or “due to” and avoid fillers. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: I usually feel tired in the evening after a long day of work. This is mainly because I commute for an hour and then do household chores, so by the time I get home I have little energy left.

Gợi ý: Give a clear main action and then a brief reason using correct vocabulary and grammar. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases (e.g., “the IT, it uh, brain it cost not more”). Use linking words like “so” or “because” and limit to 2–3 sentences. Be specific about what you listen to or watch.

Ví dụ: I usually listen to relaxing music or watch short comedy shows to unwind. I do this because it helps me relax my mind and forget stress after a busy day.

× I usually umm, I usually get him bad, uh, sooner or later after my dinner and.

✓ I usually, um, get him bad, sooner or later after my dinner.

The original sentence contains unclear and incorrect verb usage and extra conjunction 'and' at the end. The phrase 'get him bad' is ungrammatical; perhaps the student meant 'get really tired' or 'feel bad'. Replace with a clear present verb phrase that fits the context. Also remove the repeated 'I usually' and the trailing 'and'. Suggestion: use 'get' + adjective or 'feel' + adjective (present simple) for habitual actions.

× I usually feel tired, uh, in the evening after a long day work and uh, some house drawer and the commute, uh, between, uh, between the family and between home and company.

✓ I usually feel tired in the evening after a long day at work, after doing some housework, and after the commute between home and the company.

Several noun and preposition errors: 'a long day work' needs the preposition 'at' and 'work' is uncountable so no article 'a' should attach to 'work' except 'a long day at work'. 'house drawer' is incorrect; the intended word is 'housework' (uncountable). 'the commute' is correct but the phrase 'between the family and between home and company' is redundant and incorrect; use 'the commute between home and the company' or 'commuting between home and work'. Also add commas and 'after' to parallel the list of causes of tiredness.

× I usually, uh, listen music or watching some comedies for relaxing, uh, because the IT, it uh, brain it cost not more.

✓ I usually listen to music or watch comedies to relax because my brain does not have to work so hard.

Parallel structure and verb patterns are incorrect: 'listen music' requires the preposition 'to' ('listen to music'). When presenting alternatives use base form verbs in parallel: 'listen to music or watch comedies'. 'For relaxing' is awkward; use the infinitive 'to relax'. The final clause is ungrammatical: 'the IT, it uh, brain it cost not more' is unclear. A grammatical and clear expression is 'because my brain does not have to work so hard' (present simple for habitual truth). This corrects pronoun repetition and verb choice.