Tiredness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Make the answer more concise and natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason and a brief detail. Reduce filler words and correct grammar (e.g., 'I work part-time jobs for almost 11 hours').

Ví dụ: Yes, I often feel tired. I work part-time for almost 11 hours a day to earn more money, so by the evening I usually feel exhausted.

Gợi ý: Provide a direct topic sentence and use linking words to connect ideas. Fix grammar and be specific about timing (e.g., 'after work' and 'in the mornings'). Limit to two supporting details.

Ví dụ: I usually feel tired after finishing my long shifts and when I get home; additionally, some mornings I struggle to get up early because I didn't sleep well.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear statement of what you do, then give one or two specific examples and explain the effect using linking words. Correct word choice (e.g., 'watch films or children’s dramas') and reduce repetition.

Ví dụ: When I feel tired, I usually watch films or children’s dramas on Netflix because they are light and help me relax; as a result, I forget my tiredness for a while.

× I do a lot of part time jobs so for like almost 11 hours, uh, to earn more money.

✓ I do a lot of part-time jobs, working for almost 11 hours to earn more money.

The original sentence needed hyphenation for 'part-time' and clearer verb structure. 'A lot of part time jobs' is acceptable but clearer as 'a lot of part-time jobs'. Also 'so for like almost 11 hours' is a fragment; using 'working for almost 11 hours' links the duration to the jobs. Suggestion: use hyphenated compound adjectives and ensure verbs complete the clause.

× That's why I often feel very exhausted.

✓ That's why I often feel very exhausted.

No change needed for tense here; sentence is correct. It uses present simple to describe a habitual state. Keep present simple for regular feelings or states.

× Umm especially after working and go going back to my home and sometimes I feel exhausted in the mornings I can't get up early.

✓ Especially after working and going back home, and sometimes in the mornings, I feel exhausted and I can't get up early.

Issues: 'go going back to my home' is ungrammatical; use the gerund 'going' after 'after'. 'Back to my home' is awkward; 'back home' is natural. Run-on sentence needs punctuation and conjunctions: separate ideas with commas and 'and'. Maintain present simple 'I feel' for habitual situations. Suggestion: use correct gerund forms and proper clause linking.

× Umm, when I feel tired I often watch what's films or kid dramas on Netflix.

✓ When I feel tired, I often watch films or kids' dramas on Netflix.

Problems: 'what's films' is incorrect and unclear; likely meant 'what films' or simply 'films'. 'Kid dramas' should be 'kids' dramas' or 'children's dramas' (possessive). Remove filler 'Umm' and add comma after the subordinate clause. Suggestion: use correct noun phrases and possessive when describing genres for children.

× Umm when I watch them I can relax and they forget that I am tired.

✓ When I watch them, I can relax and forget that I am tired.

Pronoun error: 'they forget that I am tired' wrongly assigns 'they' as the subject forgetting; the student (I) should be the subject who forgets. Remove the extra pronoun and keep 'I forget'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns refer to the intended subject; use commas after subordinate clauses.