Tiredness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and start with a clear topic sentence. Avoid fillers like "as such" and repeating ideas. Add one specific detail to make the answer more vivid (for example mention the kind of work or timeframe). Keep to two or three sentences.

Ví dụ: I don't often feel tired; only when I work very long shifts. For example, after a 12-hour hospital shift without breaks I feel exhausted, but otherwise I usually have plenty of energy.

Gợi ý: Open with a clear topic sentence and remove hesitations like "uh." Use linking words to structure the answer (e.g., "usually" or "often"). Be specific about timing and describe briefly how you feel or what you do then.

Ví dụ: I usually feel tired in the early afternoon, especially after a heavy lunch. At that time I often want a short power nap because my concentration drops and I feel sleepy.

Gợi ý: Begin with a direct topic sentence and avoid vague phrases like "like sometimes". Use linking words ("sometimes", "otherwise") and give a clear reason why these actions help. Correct grammar and finish the sentence about nature for clarity.

Ví dụ: When I feel tired I usually take a short nap because it restores my energy and improves my focus. Sometimes I go for a brief walk in a nearby park instead, since fresh air and greenery help me feel refreshed.

× There are days where I feel tired, so it's usually when I've been working for 12 hours straight with no break as such.

✓ There are days when I feel tired, usually when I've been working for 12 hours straight with no break.

Use 'days when' not 'days where' because 'when' refers to time; 'where' is for places. Also 'so it's usually when' is redundant; remove 'so it's' to be concise and maintain tense consistency.

× Only on those days I feel tired rather than that I feel pretty energetic all the time.

✓ Only on those days do I feel tired; otherwise, I feel pretty energetic all the time.

Main clause inversion is required after 'only on those days' for correct emphasis: 'do I feel'. 'Rather than that' is unnatural here; use 'otherwise' to contrast. This fixes sentence structure and word choice.

× I feel tired around the day so it's pretty much after I have a heavy lunch I feel tired and then usually feel like taking a small power nap.

✓ I feel tired during the day, usually after a heavy lunch, and then I usually feel like taking a short power nap.

Use 'during the day' not 'around the day'. Combine clauses with commas and include subject 'I' for the second clause. 'Small' is acceptable but 'short' is more natural for naps. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× Uh, so that is the hit time for me.

✓ That's my low point of the day.

'Hit time' is not idiomatic in English; this is a sentence structure/word choice problem. 'Low point of the day' or 'that's when I hit a slump' are natural alternatives. Keep contractions to match spoken style.

× So whenever I feel tired I prefer to take a small nap which helps me regain all the energy back and makes me focus on my tasks better.

✓ Whenever I feel tired, I prefer to take a short nap, which helps me regain my energy and helps me focus on my tasks better.

Add commas for clarity. 'Regain all the energy back' is redundant: use 'regain my energy'. Use parallel structure 'helps me regain... and helps me focus...' or combine with 'so it helps me focus'. Maintain present simple for habitual action.

× Other than that, like sometimes I prefer to go on small walk just looking at the nature makes me.

✓ Other than that, sometimes I prefer to go for a short walk; just looking at nature helps me.

Use 'go for a walk' not 'go on small walk'. 'Short' is more natural than 'small' for walks. 'Looking at nature makes me' is incomplete; add 'helps me' to complete the idea and remove the definite article before 'nature'.