Tiredness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I often feel tired), then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (credits, I study a lot) and avoid redundancy.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often feel tired because I’m a university student and I have many credits to complete. As a result, I spend long hours studying every day, especially in the evenings, which leaves me feeling drained.

Gợi ý: Clarify timing and correct vocabulary and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details (e.g., number of classes, time of day). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: I usually feel tired after school, especially in the late afternoon, because I have several classes every day and I study intensively afterwards. For example, on days with four or five classes I often feel exhausted and want to take a nap.

Gợi ý: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and two specific options, using linking words (for example, if… otherwise…). Improve phrasing (take a nap, watch videos, hang out) and give brief reasons or outcomes.

Ví dụ: If I have time, I usually take a short nap for about an hour or two to recharge. If I can’t sleep, I’ll either watch videos on YouTube to relax or go out and hang out with friends to refresh my mind.

× I am a university student so I have a lot of credit I need to obtain.

✓ I am a university student, so I have a lot of credits I need to obtain.

The noun 'credit' should be plural 'credits' because the student refers to multiple course credits. Use a comma before 'so' when joining independent clauses. Suggestion: Use 'credits' for countable plural and add a comma before 'so'.

× I usually spend a lot of time on studying.

✓ I usually spend a lot of time studying.

After 'spend time' the verb should be in the gerund form without 'on'. 'Spend time on studying' is redundant. Suggestion: Use 'spend a lot of time studying'.

× I usually feel tired after school because I have egg classes a day and I started seriously so when I after school I feel very want to sleep and exhausted.

✓ I usually feel tired after school because I have eight classes a day and I study seriously, so after school I feel very sleepy and exhausted.

Multiple errors: 'egg' is a spelling error for 'eight' (number). 'I started seriously' is incorrect tense and verb choice; 'I study seriously' fits habitual present. Word order 'when I after school' is incorrect; remove 'when' and use 'after school'. 'Feel very want to sleep' mixes verbs; use adjective 'sleepy'. Combined clauses need commas and correct conjunction use. Suggestion: Check spelling of numbers, use present simple for habitual actions, use 'sleepy' for wanting to sleep, and place commas before 'so' when joining clauses.

× If my time is enough, I may sleep for a while just like nap for one to two hours, but if I don't want to sleep at that time, I may watch videos on YouTube or hang out with my friends.

✓ If I have enough time, I might sleep for a while, like taking a nap for one to two hours, but if I don't want to sleep then, I might watch videos on YouTube or hang out with my friends.

'If my time is enough' is unnatural; use 'If I have enough time.' 'May' is acceptable but 'might' is more natural for this hypothetical habit; either is possible. 'Just like nap' should be 'like taking a nap' and include an article. Add 'then' for time reference. Suggestion: Use 'have enough time', 'take a nap', and 'might' or 'may' consistently for hypothetical possibilities.