Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you often feel tired?
Thí sinh
Yes, I feel tired recently this year maybe I'm a little old and what he 2 years old and I have many responsibilities to family and and my career so I always have.
Giám khảo
When would you feel tired?
Thí sinh
Mostly I will feel tired after a long day work. I'm not a physical worker, I'm work in an office but there's always some mind exhausting things like to do.
Giám khảo
What do you do when you feel tired?
Thí sinh
I like to do some workouts like drawings or push-ups and put on my earphones, listen some pop music and movies, chat with my colleagues or call my family.
Do you often feel tired?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: 回答不够清晰且有语法和逻辑错误。应直接回应问题,使用一到两句说明原因,避免冗长和口语化停顿。可先给出总体判断(Yes/No),然后用连词如 because 或 due to 简明阐述原因,注意时态和主谓一致,避免无意义词语。
Ví dụ: Yes, I have been feeling more tired recently because I’m juggling family responsibilities and a demanding job. These responsibilities have left me with less time to rest.
When would you feel tired?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答基本明确但有语法和表达不准确的地方。应先给出直接回答,再用一两句具体细节支持。使用连词(for example, because, especially)使表达更连贯,并修正句子结构(long day of work, I work)。
Ví dụ: I usually feel tired after a long day at work, especially when I’ve been concentrating on difficult tasks. For example, after several hours of meetings or problem-solving I often feel mentally exhausted.
What do you do when you feel tired?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答内容丰富,但部分词语使用不当且句子有点冗长。应先给出一两种主要方法,再用连词列举其他方式,区分放松与锻炼。注意用词准确(drawings 应为 drawing or sketching, listen to music/watch movies)。
Ví dụ: When I feel tired, I usually do some light exercise, such as push-ups or stretching, to re-energize myself. I also like to relax by listening to pop music or watching a movie, and sometimes I call family or chat with colleagues.
× Yes, I feel tired recently this year maybe I'm a little old and what he 2 years old and I have many responsibilities to family and and my career so I always have.
✓ Yes, I have been feeling tired recently. Maybe I'm a little older — I'm 27 years old — and I have many responsibilities to my family and my career, so I'm often tired.
错误类型:句子结构错误(26)。原句中包含多个子句没用恰当连接造成混乱(如“what he 2 years old”不通),时态与表达不一致。建议把句子拆成更清晰的部分:先说明近期感受(使用现在完成进行时或现在完成时),然后解释原因,使用正确的人称代词(my family)、修正数字表达,并使用连接词或破折号分隔想法。具体建议:使用“have been feeling”强调持续状态;用“I'm 27 years old”或“I'm a little older”明确年龄;用“my family and my career”替换“to family and and my career”。
× Mostly I will feel tired after a long day work.
✓ Mostly I feel tired after a long day's work.
错误类型:现在时问题(6)。原句用“will”不恰当,因为这里描述的是经常性的事实,应使用一般现在时;另外“long day work”缺少所有格和名词连接,正确为“a long day's work”。建议使用一般现在时描述习惯性动作,注意名词短语的所有格。
× I'm not a physical worker, I'm work in an office but there's always some mind exhausting things like to do.
✓ I'm not a manual/physical worker; I work in an office, but there are always mentally exhausting tasks to do.
错误类型:形容词/副词使用不当(13)。原句中“I'm work”动词短语错误,应为“I work”;“physical worker”可以更自然地说“manual worker”或“physical worker”前加名词类型;“mind exhausting”不是标准用法,应改为“mentally exhausting”;“things like to do”结构不自然,改为“tasks to do”。建议注意主系表结构、动词形式及使用正确的形容词或副词来修饰名词或动词。
× I like to do some workouts like drawings or push-ups and put on my earphones, listen some pop music and movies, chat with my colleagues or call my family.
✓ I like doing some exercises like push-ups or drawing, putting on my earphones to listen to pop music or watch movies, chatting with my colleagues, or calling my family.
错误类型:动词+ -ing 形式(8)。原句混用了不定式和并列结构,造成并列项形式不一致(to do, put on, listen, movies)。建议在列举并列动作时保持形式一致,使用动名词(doing, putting on, listening, watching, chatting, calling)更自然;另外“workouts like drawings”不恰当,drawing(画画)不是“workout”,应区分“exercise”和“drawing”。也要使用正确搭配“listen to music”和“watch movies”。