Tiredness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and organize your ideas: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and grammatical errors (e.g., verb forms, articles). Aim for 2–3 sentences, using specific time expressions and correct collocations like “busy schedule,” “part-time job,” and “time management.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I often feel tired because I have a very busy schedule. For example, I study full-time and work a part-time job in the mornings and evenings, so poor time management and exam stress leave me with little rest.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence answering when you feel tired, then add a specific example and use linking words like “especially” or “for instance.” Reduce repetition and fix grammar (e.g., “during exam periods,” “all day,” “part-time job,” “tight schedule”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: I feel most tired during exam periods. For instance, during exams I study all day and also work a part-time job before and after classes, so my schedule becomes very tight and exhausting.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear topic sentence about what you do, then list 2–3 specific activities with linking words (e.g., “for example,” “also”) and correct vocabulary (e.g., “watch comedies,” “read history books,” “relax at home”). Correct grammar (e.g., verb tenses, article use) and avoid vague phrases like “what's like.”

Ví dụ: When I feel tired, I usually relax at home by listening to music and watching comedies. I also sometimes read history books because they help me unwind and forget about stress for a while.

× I feel tired because I have busy schedule, uh, my work and I study also, uh, whole day I used to study and part time morning and before morning and after class I have work.

✓ I feel tired because I have a busy schedule: I work and I study. I study the whole day, and I work part-time in the morning and after class.

Used plural/singular and article errors: 'busy schedule' requires an article 'a'. The original sentence run-on and incorrect time phrases 'part time morning and before morning' were unclear; corrected to 'part-time in the morning and after class' for clarity and proper noun forms. Also separated clauses for readability and correct verb usage (I work and I study).

× Uh, so is management time is I'm very stressed also for my exam and work I have no enough.

✓ So managing my time is difficult; I'm very stressed about my exams and work because I do not have enough time.

Problems include article and word choice: 'management time' should be 'managing my time' (gerund phrase), 'is I'm' is ungrammatical, and 'I have no enough' should be 'I do not have enough time'. Also 'exam' pluralized to 'exams' to match context. Rewritten to correct sentence structure and make meaning clear.

× Especially my exam period umm, I'm very tired because whole day I study and part time I have job uh, before class and evening after class I have work.

✓ Especially during exam periods, I'm very tired because I study all day and have a part-time job; I work before class and in the evening after class.

Tense and time expression corrections: 'my exam period' should be 'during exam periods' or 'during my exam period'. 'Whole day I study' corrected to 'I study all day'. 'Part time I have job' corrected to 'I have a part-time job'. Fixed word order and added articles to match English norms.

× So especially when I have exam period is very much tight I feel.

✓ So especially when I have an exam period, I feel very stressed and my schedule is very tight.

Original sentence has poor word order and missing articles. 'When I have exam period is very much tight I feel' is ungrammatical. Reordered to 'when I have an exam period' and clarified meaning by adding 'I feel very stressed' and 'my schedule is very tight'.

× I usually do when I am tired listening to music and uh, what's like funny movies And also sometime I rate, uh, history book.

✓ Usually when I'm tired, I listen to music or watch funny movies. Sometimes I read a history book.

Incorrect verb forms: 'do when I am tired listening to music' should be 'when I'm tired, I listen to music'. 'What's like funny movies' intended 'watch funny movies'. 'Sometime I rate' should be 'Sometimes I read'. Also added articles and corrected verb choice and word order.

× I really relaxed feel when I read book and listen the music at home and I spending time.

✓ I really feel relaxed when I read a book and listen to music at home and spend time relaxing.

Word order and article errors: 'I really relaxed feel' should be 'I really feel relaxed'. 'Read book' needs an article 'a book'. 'Listen the music' should be 'listen to music'. 'I spending time' corrected to 'I spend time' or 'spend time relaxing' to use correct verb form.