Politeness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答基本切题，也提供了具体经历，但有明显的时态、搭配和句子结构问题。将“during the family meetings”改为更自然的“through family discussions”；将“when I feel anxious”改为过去时“when I felt anxious”；“yelled to my mom”应改为“yelled at my mom”。建议按照“直接回答+具体事件+得到的教训”的结构组织，并用“after that”或“as a result”连接细节。

Ví dụ: I learned to be polite mainly through advice from my family. I remember once yelling at my mother because I felt anxious, and my family explained that I should respect others even when I was upset. After that, I tried to speak more calmly and use polite expressions.

Gợi ý: 观点明确，但“It's critical”与前一句重复，且最后一句没有完成，导致表达不完整。“you give people a very good impression”应改为“you make a good impression on people”；“you protect”需要说明保护什么，例如“you protect relationships”。建议使用一个理由和一个具体结果即可，避免重复使用Firstly和Second of all。

Ví dụ: Yes, I think being polite is very important. It helps us make a good impression and communicate more smoothly with other people. In addition, polite behaviour can prevent unnecessary arguments and help us maintain good relationships.

Gợi ý: 回答尝试列举场合，但第二个观点没有完成，严重影响连贯性和有效性。“There are two occasions”不够自然，可改为“There are several situations”。即使对方无礼，也应该保持礼貌，因此可以表达为“especially when dealing with rude people, because staying calm can prevent the situation from getting worse”。注意使用完整句子，并用“also”或“especially”自然衔接。

Ví dụ: We should be polite in most social situations, especially when speaking to people we do not know well. We should also remain polite when someone is rude or offensive, because responding calmly can prevent the situation from getting worse. For example, I would explain my opinion firmly but respectfully instead of arguing.

Gợi ý: 内容相关，也列举了分享物品、问候和道别等例子，但存在多个语法和搭配错误。“sharing my stuff to people”应改为“sharing my things with others”；“greeting to them and say goodbye”应改为“greeting them and saying goodbye”；“Loudly smiles to them a lot”表达不自然，可改为“I often smiled warmly at them”。建议把零散短语合并成两到三句完整句子。

Ví dụ: As a child, I showed my politeness by sharing my toys with other children. I also greeted people when I met them and said goodbye before leaving. In addition, I tried to smile warmly and listen when adults were speaking.

× There was one time that I yelled to my mom when I feel anxious and my family members told me that I should be polite and how important it is to respect others.

✓ There was one time when I yelled at my mom because I felt anxious, and my family members told me that I should be polite and explained how important it was to respect others.

叙述过去发生的事情时，动词要使用过去时。feel 应改为 felt，is 应改为 was。此外，because 比 when 更适合表达“因为感到焦虑”。

× There was one time that I yelled to my mom when I feel anxious and my family members told me that I should be polite and how important it is to respect others.

✓ There was one time when I yelled at my mom because I felt anxious, and my family members told me that I should be polite and explained how important it was to respect others.

yell at somebody 表示“对某人大喊”，不能使用 yell to somebody。建议记住：对某人大喊用 yell at，向某人喊话或大声说话时才可能使用 yell to。

× There was one time that I yelled to my mom when I feel anxious and my family members told me that I should be polite and how important it is to respect others.

✓ There was one time when I yelled at my mom because I felt anxious, and my family members told me that I should be polite and explained how important it was to respect others.

told me 后面应接完整的宾语从句；how important it is 不能直接与 told me 并列。这里用 explained how important it was 使两个动作结构平行、句意完整。

× Second of all, when you are being polite to other people, you protect.

✓ Second of all, when you are polite to other people, you protect yourself and create a more positive impression.

protect 是及物动词，通常需要宾语。原句中的 you protect 后面缺少宾语，因此句子不完整。可以说 protect yourself，表示“保护自己”。

× A second occasion is that we feel that other people are being rude or offensive, that's when we can

✓ A second occasion is when we feel that other people are being rude or offensive; that is when we should remain polite.

表示“某种情况是……的时候”时，应使用 is when，而不是 is that。原句末尾的 we can 没有完成句意，因此需要补充完整的动词和意思。

× When I was a child, I showed my politeness by sharing my stuff to people, greeting to them and say goodbye.

✓ When I was a child, I showed my politeness by sharing my stuff with people, greeting them, and saying goodbye.

share something with somebody 表示“和某人分享某物”，不能使用 share something to somebody。greet 是及物动词，后面直接接人，不需要 to。

× When I was a child, I showed my politeness by sharing my stuff to people, greeting to them and say goodbye.

✓ When I was a child, I showed my politeness by sharing my stuff with people, greeting them, and saying goodbye.

by 后面表示做某事的方式时，后接动词的 -ing 形式。sharing、greeting 和 saying 应保持平行结构，因此 say 要改为 saying。

× Loudly smiles to them a lot.

✓ I smiled at them a lot.

Loudly 表示“响亮地”，通常修饰声音或说话，不适合修饰 smile。这里应直接使用 smiled at them，表示“对他们微笑”。

× Loudly smiles to them a lot.

✓ I smiled at them a lot.

表示“对某人微笑”时，应使用 smile at somebody，而不是 smile to somebody。

× That's how I show politeness to people when I was a child.

✓ That's how I showed politeness to people when I was a child.

when I was a child 表示过去时间，因此主句中的 show 也应使用过去式 showed。建议根据时间状语统一判断动词时态。