Politeness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答の主旨は伝わりますが、文が長く、文末が不自然に途切れています。また、“before sleep in the bed”は“before I went to sleep in bed”、“behave polite”は“behave politely”とする必要があります。最初に「母から絵本を通して学んだ」と直接答え、その後に物語の具体的な内容と学んだことを2〜3文で説明すると、より自然で効果的です。

Ví dụ: I learned to be polite mainly from my mother. When I was a child, she often read me picture books before I went to sleep. In many of the stories, a rude character eventually learned to behave politely, so I understood that good manners were important.

Gợi ý: 意見と理由は明確ですが、条件文が連続していて、文法的に“are the people willing”や“more easy”が不自然です。“people are more willing to support you”や“it is easier to ask for help”を使いましょう。“First”や“Also”などの linking words を加え、最後の未完の部分を避けて、2〜4文で完結させてください。

Ví dụ: Yes, definitely. If you are rude, people may be less willing to help you, whereas polite people usually make a better impression. In addition, it is easier to ask someone for assistance when you speak to them respectfully.

Gợi ý: 質問には答えていますが、“in any occasion”は“on any occasion”、“behave polite”は“behave politely”が正しい表現です。また、“especially in when”や“our boss in the job”も不自然です。“when speaking to older people or our boss at work”のように簡潔に言い換えましょう。最後の文を完成させ、丁寧な言葉遣いが相手への敬意を示すという具体的な結果を述べるとよいです。

Ví dụ: We should be polite on every occasion, but it is especially important when speaking to older people or our boss at work. For example, we should use respectful language and listen without interrupting. This shows that we value and respect the other person.

Gợi ý: 具体的な行動と結果が含まれており、4問の中では比較的よく構成されています。ただし、“the only thing that I could was using”は“the main thing I could do was use”、“other way”は“other ways”または“another way”が自然です。子どもの頃の具体例として、先生に挨拶したり、話を遮らずに聞いたりしたことを加えると、内容と語彙の幅がさらに向上します。

Ví dụ: As a child, I mainly showed politeness by using respectful language with my teachers. I also greeted them and listened carefully when they were speaking. These habits helped me build good relationships with my teachers, and as I grew older, I learned other ways to show respect.

× When I was a child, my mother often read me a picture book before sleep in the bed and normally those stories are like this the main character at first they are rude but somehow they learn how to behave polite then.

✓ When I was a child, my mother often read me a picture book before going to sleep.

After before, when the subject is understood to be the same as the main subject, a gerund phrase such as going to sleep is natural. Before sleep is not the appropriate expression here.

× When I was a child, my mother often read me a picture book before sleep in the bed and normally those stories are like this the main character at first they are rude but somehow they learn how to behave polite then.

✓ When I was a child, my mother often read me a picture book before going to sleep in bed.

The usual expression is in bed, not in the bed, when referring to the general activity of sleeping.

× When I was a child, my mother often read me a picture book before sleep in the bed and normally those stories are like this the main character at first they are rude but somehow they learn how to behave polite then.

✓ When I was a child, my mother often read me a picture book before going to sleep. Usually, the stories were like this: the main character was rude at first but eventually learned how to behave politely.

Because you are describing stories that you read in the past, use the past tense were, was, and learned. Keep the verb tense consistent with the past-time context.

× When I was a child, my mother often read me a picture book before sleep in the bed and normally those stories are like this the main character at first they are rude but somehow they learn how to behave polite then.

✓ Usually, the stories were like this: the main character was rude at first but eventually learned how to behave politely.

The subject the main character is singular, so it must take the singular verb was. Avoid using they for this singular noun in this sentence.

× When I was a child, my mother often read me a picture book before sleep in the bed and normally those stories are like this the main character at first they are rude but somehow they learn how to behave polite then.

✓ Usually, the stories were like this: the main character was rude at first but eventually learned how to behave politely.

Politely is an adverb because it describes how the character behaves. The adjective polite cannot directly modify the verb behave.

× When I was a child, my mother often read me a picture book before sleep in the bed and normally those stories are like this the main character at first they are rude but somehow they learn how to behave polite then.

✓ When I was a child, my mother often read me a picture book before going to sleep. Usually, the stories were like this: the main character was rude at first but eventually learned how to behave politely.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined without clear punctuation or structure. Divide it into complete sentences and use a colon to introduce the example from the stories.

× Yes, of course I think so if you're rude, no one will help you if you need help but if you're polite, are the people willing to support you and more easy to ask someone to help you. So being polite is very good for yourself and to.

✓ Yes, of course. If you are rude, no one will help you when you need help. However, if you are polite, people will be more willing to support you, and it will be easier for you to ask someone for help. Therefore, being polite is very beneficial to you.

The original response joins too many independent clauses without clear punctuation or connectors. Separating the ideas into complete sentences makes the condition and result easier to understand.

× Yes, of course I think so if you're rude, no one will help you if you need help but if you're polite, are the people willing to support you and more easy to ask someone to help you. So being polite is very good for yourself and to.

✓ Yes, of course. If you are rude, no one will help you when you need help. However, if you are polite, people will be more willing to support you, and it will be easier for you to ask someone for help. Therefore, being polite is very beneficial to you.

The final phrase, very good for yourself and to, is incomplete. Finish the sentence with a complete complement, such as very beneficial to you.

× Yes, of course I think so if you're rude, no one will help you if you need help but if you're polite, are the people willing to support you and more easy to ask someone to help you. So being polite is very good for yourself and to.

✓ If you are polite, people will be more willing to support you, and it will be easier for you to ask someone for help.

Easy is the correct adjective, but its comparative form is easier because you are comparing the situation with being rude. More easy is not normally used in this sentence.

× Yes, of course I think so if you're rude, no one will help you if you need help but if you're polite, are the people willing to support you and more easy to ask someone to help you. So being polite is very good for yourself and to.

✓ If you are polite, people are willing to support you, and it is easier for you to ask someone for help.

In a statement, the subject people must come before the verb are. The original order, are the people, is question word order and is incorrect here.

× I'm pretty sure that we shouldn't be rude in any occasion, but we should behave polite especially in when we talk to older people or our boss in the job. By doing so, like using good language, we can show.

✓ I am pretty sure that we should not be rude on any occasion, but we should behave politely, especially when we talk to older people or our boss at work.

Use on with occasion and at work for the workplace. Do not use in before when in this sentence; especially when is the correct structure.

× I'm pretty sure that we shouldn't be rude in any occasion, but we should behave polite especially in when we talk to older people or our boss in the job. By doing so, like using good language, we can show.

✓ We should behave politely, especially when we talk to older people or our boss at work.

Politely is an adverb that modifies the verb behave. Polite is an adjective and cannot modify behave directly.

× I'm pretty sure that we shouldn't be rude in any occasion, but we should behave polite especially in when we talk to older people or our boss in the job. By doing so, like using good language, we can show.

✓ By doing so, for example by using respectful language, we can show our politeness and respect.

The phrase we can show is incomplete because show needs an object. Add an object, such as our politeness and respect, to complete the sentence.

× When I was a child, the only thing that I could was using polite language. And by doing so, I could build a good relationship with teachers. But now I learned a lot and I know other way to show respect for others.

✓ When I was a child, the only thing I could do was use polite language. By doing so, I could build good relationships with my teachers.

After the modal verb could, use the base form do. The structure the only thing I could do was use is the correct pattern.

× When I was a child, the only thing that I could was using polite language. And by doing so, I could build a good relationship with teachers. But now I learned a lot and I know other way to show respect for others.

✓ When I was a child, the only thing I could do was use polite language.

After was in the pattern the only thing I could do was, use the base form use rather than the gerund using.

× When I was a child, the only thing that I could was using polite language. And by doing so, I could build a good relationship with teachers. But now I learned a lot and I know other way to show respect for others.

✓ But now I have learned a lot, and I know other ways to show respect for others.

Use the present perfect have learned to connect past learning with your present knowledge. This is appropriate because the learning has an effect on your current situation.

× When I was a child, the only thing that I could was using polite language. And by doing so, I could build a good relationship with teachers. But now I learned a lot and I know other way to show respect for others.

✓ But now I have learned a lot, and I know other ways to show respect for others.

The phrase other ways refers to more than one method, so way should be plural. Use other ways when discussing several methods of showing respect.