Politeness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答は主題に直接答えていますが、文法と語順の誤り、時制の一貫性の欠如、具体的なエピソード不足が見られます。より自然で効果的にするため、過去形と現在形を区別し、短い具体的な例（誰が、いつ、どのように教えたか）を加えてください。また、接続詞（for example, because, so）を使って文の流れを滑らかにしましょう。

Ví dụ: My parents taught me manners from a young age. For example, when I was seven my mother always reminded me to offer my seat to elderly passengers on the train, and she explained that it shows respect.

Gợi ý: 主張は示されていますが、語彙選択（"pride"は不適切）と文の論理構成が弱く、内容が冗長で不明瞭です。適切な語（polite, respectful）を使い、理由を明確に一つか二つに限定して具体例で裏付けてください。接続語で理由と例を区切ると良いです。

Ví dụ: Yes, I believe politeness is very important because it helps everyone get along. For instance, if people are respectful on public transport, elderly passengers can travel more comfortably and independently.

Gợi ý: 答えは的確ですが、語法の誤り（"offer my seat"→"offer our/their seat"）と表現の単調さが見られます。複数の場面（家庭、職場、公共の場）を挙げ、接続語で区切りながら具体例を加えると良いでしょう。文は短く簡潔に保ってください。

Ví dụ: We should be polite in many situations, such as on public transport, at work, and when visiting someone's home. For example, on the train we should offer our seat to elderly or disabled passengers.

Gợi ý: 意図は伝わりますが、文法（時制混乱、冗長なフレーズ）と語順のミスが目立ちます。過去形に統一し、具体的な行動を簡潔に述べてください。また、例を一つに絞り詳しく説明すると説得力が増します。

Ví dụ: As a child I often helped people who needed assistance. For example, I would approach elderly people and politely ask if they needed help carrying shopping bags or finding the right bus.

× Well, when I was a child, I learned to be polite by my parents.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I was taught to be polite by my parents.

The original uses 'learned ... by my parents', which awkwardly combines 'learned' with agent 'by'; passive 'was taught' is more natural to indicate parents taught the child. Suggestion: use 'was taught' or 'learned from my parents'.

× For example, if elderly people are on the train I should offer my seat.

✓ For example, if elderly people are on the train I should offer them my seat.

The sentence omits the object 'them' after 'offer' and so reads incomplete. Also 'offer my seat' needs a recipient: 'offer them my seat'.

× Yes, I think so because if many people are pride to others, society will be better for example, if people pride to others on the train, elderly people can go out easily.

✓ Yes, I think so because if many people are proud of others, society will be better. For example, if people are considerate to others on the train, elderly people can get off more easily.

'Pride' is a noun; the correct adjective is 'proud' but 'proud of others' is awkward in context. 'Considerate' fits meaning. Also 'go out' should be 'get off' (a train) and 'easily' modified placement. Suggest using 'considerate' and 'get off more easily'.

× Well, we should be polite when we use public transportation. For example, if elderly people or handicapped people are on the train, we should offer my seat.

✓ Well, we should be polite when we use public transportation. For example, if elderly people or disabled people are on the train, we should offer them our seats.

Pronouns are inconsistent: 'we should offer my seat' mixes 'we' with 'my'. Change to 'offer them our seats'. Also 'handicapped' is outdated; 'disabled' is more appropriate.

× Well, when I was a child I usually talked to people who need help for example if I see if I saw elderly people, I asked them whether they need help.

✓ Well, when I was a child I usually talked to people who needed help. For example, if I saw elderly people, I asked them whether they needed help.

Tenses are inconsistent: the main clause refers to the past ('was a child', 'usually talked'), so subordinate clauses should also use past tense ('needed', 'saw', 'needed'). Also the phrase 'if I see if I saw' is a duplication and must be reduced to 'if I saw'.