Politeness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: giảm tiếng lấp lửng (umm/uh), dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể về cách bố mẹ dạy (ví dụ: quan sát, nhắc nhở, khen/nghiêm). Hạn chế lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp (that was → it was). Giữ câu không quá dài, tối đa 3–4 câu để tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

Ví dụ: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They taught me by example — they always greeted others and corrected me gently when I was rude. As a result, I picked up simple habits like saying "please" and "thank you".

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: sửa ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng (avoid phrases like "key role in the in a conversation"), dùng từ vựng phù hợp ("politeness plays a key role"), và đưa lý do cụ thể với liên từ (because, therefore). Tránh từ lặp và sai như "planners" — có thể là "people" hoặc "it".

Ví dụ: Yes, politeness plays a key role in conversations because it creates a positive impression. For example, being polite can help you make friends, build professional relationships, and open up job opportunities.

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: tránh lỗi từ ("blindness" không phù hợp) và lặp từ; nêu rõ các dịp cụ thể (formal events, job interviews, family gatherings). Sử dụng liên từ để mạch lạc (for example, especially). Giữ câu ngắn và rõ ràng, tối đa 3 câu.

Ví dụ: We should be polite in many situations, especially in formal settings. For example, at job interviews, official meetings, and family gatherings politeness shows respect and helps communication. In casual situations it is also nice, but less formal language is acceptable.

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: loại bỏ tiếng lấp lửng, dùng thì phù hợp và hoàn chỉnh câu cuối. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: helped with homework, greeted teachers) và dùng từ nối khi liệt kê (for example, and, also). Giữ tối đa 4 câu.

Ví dụ: As a child, I always said "thank you" to anyone who helped me and apologized when I made a mistake. I also greeted neighbors and teachers every morning. These small habits showed my respect and helped me get along with others.

× They taught me a lot about politeness and umm, they told me that that's, that was the, uh, most important in communication.

✓ They taught me a lot about politeness and they told me that it was the most important thing in communication.

The student mixed present and past tense ('that's' with 'that was') in a past narration. Maintain past tense throughout when describing childhood learning. Also add 'thing' after 'important' to complete the noun phrase. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense verbs (taught, told, was) and include necessary nouns for clarity.

× Certainly, politeness is a key role in the in a conversation, planners give a gives us a lot of chances to add new friends or have a new job or more.

✓ Certainly, politeness plays a key role in a conversation; it gives us many opportunities to make new friends or get a new job, among others.

Errors: unnecessary articles ('the in a conversation') and word choice ('planners give a gives us') and count/quantifier issues. Use 'a conversation' and correct verb phrase 'plays a key role'. Replace 'gives us a lot of chances' with 'gives us many opportunities' for natural English. Use parallel structure for examples.

× I think every part of life also need the blindness, but in some important occasions or like uh, appointment or umm, a event, an event, uh, we need to be polite more and more.

✓ I think every part of life also needs politeness, but on important occasions, such as appointments or events, we need to be especially polite.

Problems: subject-verb agreement (need -> needs), wrong noun ('blindness') used instead of 'politeness', incorrect article 'a event' should be 'an event', and awkward phrase 'polite more and more'. Suggest using 'needs politeness', correct verb form, and 'especially polite' for emphasis.

× To show my politeness as a child, uh, I learned to say thanks to everyone who helped me and say sorry when I made a mistake.

✓ To show my politeness as a child, I learned to say thank you to everyone who helped me and to apologize when I made a mistake.

Use infinitive parallelism ('to say' ... 'and to apologize') and prefer 'thank you' and 'apologize' for formal correctness. Maintain past tense 'learned' and 'made' which are correct; adjust verb forms for clarity.

× Umm and umm say hi or goodbye to everyone that.

✓ I also learned to say hello and goodbye to everyone.

The original is an incomplete clause ('everyone that') and informal fillers. Correct by making a complete sentence with parallel infinitives 'to say hello and goodbye' and remove fillers. This fits the past narration context.