Politeness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, use one or two specific supporting details, and avoid repetition. Use past tense consistently and correct word choices (e.g., "when I was a child", "my mother taught me", "basic manners"). Add a linking word to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: When I was a child, my mother taught me basic manners. For example, she always reminded me to say "please" and "thank you," and she encouraged me to be kind to others so I could gain their respect and friendship.

Gợi ý: Give a direct opinion sentence and one clear reason with correct vocabulary. Replace incorrect phrases ("being applied person") with "being polite" and avoid redundant clauses. Use a linking word like "because" to explain why it is important.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect and helps build good relationships. For instance, speaking calmly and listening to others makes people more willing to cooperate with you.

Gợi ý: Answer directly, then give two specific examples. Correct wrong phrase "be applied to others" to "be polite to others." Use linking words like "for example" or "for instance" to list occasions and avoid filler words like "uh" and repeated phrases.

Ví dụ: We should be polite at all times, not just on special occasions. For example, we should be courteous to family members at home and respectful to colleagues at work because politeness improves relationships and creates a pleasant atmosphere.

Gợi ý: Give a straightforward past-tense topic sentence and one or two specific, natural examples. Use correct words (e.g., "generosity" instead of "pluckedness") and avoid overusing "I just." Keep it brief and coherent with linking words like "for example" or "also."

Ví dụ: As a child, I showed politeness by sharing my sweets with classmates. For example, I often offered candy to friends at breaktime and gave hugs to family members to show affection and kindness.

× Well, when I was child my mother taught me how to be polite with others like it is the basic manners that she helped me a lot in.

✓ Well, when I was a child my mother taught me how to be polite to others; she helped me a lot with basic manners.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' and incorrect preposition 'with' after 'polite'; sentence is also run-on and unclear. Use 'a child' for correct noun phrase, 'polite to others' is the correct collocation, and restructure to separate ideas with a semicolon or separate sentences for clarity.

× So I think she plays a major role on the activities that I learned in my childhood.

✓ So I think she played a major role in the activities I learned in my childhood.

Tense should be past ('played') to match 'learned in my childhood.' The preposition 'on' is incorrect; use 'in' for 'role in.' Also 'that I learned' can be shortened to 'I learned' for natural phrasing.

× She always talk to me that we should always be kind to others so that we will be able to gain respect and love of our near.

✓ She always told me that we should be kind to others so that we could gain the respect and love of those close to us.

Verb 'talk' should be past tense 'told' to match narrative; 'talk to me that' is unnatural. 'Will be able to' is awkward in reported past—use 'could.' 'Love of our near' is incorrect; use 'the respect and love of those close to us' or 'our loved ones.'

× I think yes, being applied person is very necessary and it shows our basic manners like as a human we should always like to talk with others in a politeness like in a calm way so that we will be able to reflect our personality in a very effective way to the others.

✓ I think yes; being a polite person is very important and shows our basic manners. As humans, we should speak to others politely and calmly so that we can reflect our personality effectively.

'Applied person' is incorrect; use 'polite person.' Article 'a' missing. 'Like as a human' is ungrammatical—use 'as humans.' 'Talk with others in a politeness' should be 'speak to others politely.' 'Will be able to' is wordy—use 'can.' Simplify and split into two sentences for clarity.

× I think there are not any kind of occasions on which we should uh, be applied to others.

✓ I think there are no specific occasions on which we should be polite to others.

'Not any kind of occasions' is unnatural; use 'no specific occasions.' 'Be applied to others' is incorrect collocation; use 'be polite to others.'

× I think in our daily routine, while talking to our friends, while talking to our family members, we should always like be polite, be kind hearted with others so that we will be able to show our personality in an effective way.

✓ I think in our daily routine—when talking to friends or family—we should always be polite and kind-hearted so that we can show our personality effectively.

Awkward repetition and filler words ('like'). Use 'when' for occasions, hyphenate 'kind-hearted,' change 'will be able to' to 'can,' and streamline the sentence for natural flow.

× And it also help us to just gain love of others.

✓ And it also helps us to gain the love of others.

Verb agreement: 'help' should be 'helps' to match singular subject 'it.' Remove filler 'just' and add article 'the' before 'love.'

× Well, I'll be able to remember that when I was a child, I always offer my candies to the to others so that I just show my pluckedness and my kind heart to the to other persons.

✓ Well, I remember that when I was a child, I always offered my candies to others to show my politeness and kind heart.

Tense confusion: use simple past 'remember' or 'I remember' and 'offered' for past habit. Remove incorrect 'I'll be able to remember.' 'Offer my candies to the to others' has extra 'the' and wrong preposition—use 'offered my candies to others.' 'Pluckedness' is incorrect word; use 'politeness.'

× And moreover, I just like to hug them.

✓ Moreover, I liked to hug them.

Tense consistency: speaker describing past habits should use past tense 'liked.' 'And moreover' is redundant—use 'Moreover.'

× I just like to kiss my near and dear ones to show my kindness to them.

✓ I used to kiss my near and dear ones to show my kindness to them.

For past habit, use 'used to' or past tense 'kissed.' 'Near and dear ones' is acceptable but 'used to kiss' clarifies past habitual action.