Politeness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문법과 단어 선택이 많이 부정확합니다. 'polite'와 'policy'를 혼동했고, 표현들이 일관성이 없으며 문장 구조가 자주 어색합니다. 개선 포인트는 다음과 같습니다: 1) 핵심 어휘 정확히 사용하기: 'polite (예의 바른)'와 'policy (정책)'를 구분하세요. 질문은 예의 교육 방법에 대한 것이므로 'polite' 관련 단어들을 사용해야 합니다. 2) 간단한 주제문 + 구체적 세부사항: 첫 문장에 직접적으로 답하고, 그 다음에 언제/누구에게 배웠는지 구체적 예시를 한두 개 덧붙이세요. 연결어(for example, because, when 등)를 사용해 논리적으로 이어가세요. 3) 문법과 시제 정리: 과거 경험을 말할 때는 과거형을 일관되게 사용하세요 (learned, went, played 등). 주어-동사 일치와 동사 형태를 점검하세요. 4) 단어 수 조절: 최대 5문장 이내로 간결하게 말하세요. 구체적 연습 방법: 어린 시절에 예의를 배운 상황을 하나 떠올려 그 과정을 시간 순으로(when → who → what → why) 3문장 내로 정리해 연습하세요.

Ví dụ: I learned to be polite from my parents when I was a child. For example, my mother taught me to say "please" and "thank you" when asking for things, and my father showed me how to greet older people respectfully. Because they explained why manners matter, I always try to be considerate of others.

Gợi ý: 핵심 어휘 혼동과 논리 전개 미흡이 문제입니다. 'polite'와 'policy/police'를 잘못 사용했고 이유 제시가 모호합니다. 개선 포인트는 다음과 같습니다: 1) 정확한 어휘 사용: 질문에는 'being polite'가 주제이므로 관련 어휘(considerate, respectful, manners)를 사용하세요. 2) 명확한 이유 제시: 왜 중요한지 한두 가지 이유(사회적 관계 형성, 갈등 감소 등)를 구체적으로 들고, 연결어(because, so, therefore)를 활용해 논리를 전개하세요. 3) 예시 하나 추가: 자신의 경험이나 일반적 상황을 들어 설명하면 신뢰성이 올라갑니다. 4) 문장 수와 구조 유지: 3문장 내로 주제문→이유→예시 구조를 연습하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps people get along and shows respect. For example, saying "excuse me" on public transport can prevent conflicts and makes others feel comfortable. Therefore, politeness improves both personal relationships and daily life.

× When I was young I went to Canada and Nemo Mountain.

✓ When I was young, I went to Canada and visited Nemo Mountain.

The original sentence is missing a verb to show the action with 'Nemo Mountain'. This is a sentence structure issue: listing two places without parallel verbs can be confusing. Add 'visited' to make the action clear and use a comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: use parallel structure when listing actions or places (e.g., 'I went to Canada and visited Nemo Mountain').

× I learned about policy.

✓ I learned about politeness.

The student likely intended the noun 'politeness' not 'policy'. This is a word choice error in adjective/noun usage. Use the correct noun 'politeness' to convey learning good manners. Suggestion: check similar words (policy vs. politeness) and choose the one that matches context.

× I lay the mountain with my friends.

✓ I climbed the mountain with my friends.

The verb 'lay' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is to ascend a mountain, so use 'climbed'. This is a sentence structure/word choice error. Suggestion: use verbs that correctly describe physical activities ('climb' for mountains).

× I saw a lot of flowers and trees and laccoon.

✓ I saw a lot of flowers, trees, and raccoons.

The noun 'laccoon' is misspelled and singular where plural is needed to match 'a lot of'. This is a singular/plural and spelling issue. Use plural 'raccoons' and add commas to separate items. Suggestion: use plural nouns after expressions like 'a lot of'.

× In South Korea, we do not count this environment.

✓ In South Korea, we do not appreciate this kind of environment.

The verb 'count' is incorrect for the intended meaning; likely the student meant 'value' or 'appreciate'. This is misuse of verbs/pronouns context. Replace with 'appreciate' and add 'kind of' for clarity. Suggestion: choose verbs that match semantic meaning ('appreciate' for valuing something).

× We learn the environment policy as a child.

✓ We learn about environmental awareness as children.

'Environment policy' is not the natural expression for learning manners; likely intended 'environmental awareness' or 'environmental education'. Also change 'as a child' to plural 'as children' to match 'we'. This is sentence structure and plurality issue. Suggestion: use correct collocations and match subject plurality.

× Yes, I think being policy is very important because the policy can make a lot of things.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important because politeness can achieve many things.

'Being policy' and 'the policy' are incorrect; use the adjective 'polite' and the noun 'politeness'. Also 'make a lot of things' is unnatural; use 'achieve many things'. This is adjective/noun misuse and awkward phrasing. Suggestion: use 'being polite' and 'politeness' with verbs like 'help', 'create', or 'achieve'.

× I believe for example do things means that a police can make a friends relationship.

✓ I believe, for example, doing kind things helps build friendships.

This sentence has multiple problems: 'do things' should be 'doing things'; 'a police' is wrong (police is uncountable or 'a police officer'); 'make a friends relationship' is ungrammatical. The corrected sentence uses gerund 'doing' and the verb 'helps build' with plural 'friendships'. This is incorrect pronoun/noun use and sentence structure. Suggestion: use gerunds for general actions and correct nouns ('police officer' or just 'people').

× It is very important I think.

✓ I think it is very important.

The word order is awkward. Move 'I think' to the beginning or use commas: 'I think it is very important.' This is a sentence structure/style issue. Suggestion: use natural word order for opinions.