Paper— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答直接回答了问题，也提供了例子，但句子过长，缺少清晰的停顿和连接词。“original drums”表达不够自然，建议说“paper drums”或“drums made of paper”。“while I was a kid”应改为“when I was a child”，“the Southern Bolk”含义不清，可能需要说明具体物品名称。可以按照“直接回答—具体例子—感受”的结构组织答案。

Ví dụ: Yes, I have. When I was a child, I made paper flowers and small paper drums for school projects. I really enjoyed making them because it was a fun and creative way to spend my free time.

Gợi ý: 回答表达了“用纸进行自我表达和放松”的观点，但语法错误较多。“always use”应改为“always used”，“enjoy something that I want to express myself”表达不自然。建议具体说明喜欢做什么，例如画画、折纸或写故事，并避免重复使用“express myself”。同时注意过去时的一致性。

Ví dụ: When I was a child, I liked drawing pictures and making origami with paper. It was a relaxing hobby, and it allowed me to express my ideas in a creative way.

Gợi ý: 回答了“不写”的核心问题，但后半部分语法和表达不清。“at the period of student”应改为“when I was a student”，“usually write”应改为“usually wrote”。“classmates that not near to me”可以改为“classmates who lived far away”。建议使用电子邮件或即时通讯作为对比，使答案更完整。

Ví dụ: No, I don’t. I used to write letters when I was a student, especially to classmates who lived far away. However, I now use messaging apps because they are much faster and more convenient.

Gợi ý: 回答没有完整结束，导致观点和理由不够清楚。“from our country people's perspective”不自然，可以说“In my country”或“From my perspective”。“how self confidence how self disciplined”应改为“how confident and disciplined a person is”。建议明确说明人们保留手写信的原因，例如纪念意义和情感价值，并完成句子。

Ví dụ: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters in my country. They can show how thoughtful and sincere the writer is. In addition, people often keep them as sentimental reminders of important relationships or special occasions.

Gợi ý: 回答有清晰的现在与过去对比，但答案未完成，影响连贯性。“instead”前需要停顿或连接词；“ebook”应为复数“e-books”，而Apple Pencil是电子设备，不是“电子工具”的最佳概括。建议说明携带电子设备的具体原因，并完整结束过去时的对比。

Ví dụ: Nowadays, I don’t usually carry paper and pens because I rely on my smartphone and tablet instead. They are more convenient for taking notes and accessing information. When I was a child, however, I often carried them to school for writing and drawing.

× Yes, I have made original drums and paper flowers before and I did this mostly while I was a kid it was very fun and for example I brought the Southern Bolk for a school project.

✓ Yes, I have made original drums and paper flowers before. I did this mostly when I was a kid, and it was very fun. For example, I brought the Southern Bolk for a school project.

原句把多个完整句子直接连接在一起，缺少句号、逗号和连接词，导致句子过长且结构混乱。应将不同意思分成几个完整句子，并使用适当的标点符号。

× When I was a kid, I always use paper to enjoy something that I want to express myself. I thought it is a good way to relax myself and express myself at the time.

✓ When I was a kid, I always used paper to express myself. I thought it was a good way to relax and express myself at the time.

“When I was a kid”和“at the time”表示过去时间，所以应使用一般过去时：use 改为 used，is 改为 was。过去叙述中，主句使用过去时后，相关从句通常也要相应使用过去时。

× When I was a kid, I always use paper to enjoy something that I want to express myself.

✓ When I was a kid, I always used paper to express myself.

“use paper to enjoy something that I want to express myself”结构不完整且意思不清楚。“express myself”可以直接表示“表达自己”，因此应改为“used paper to express myself”，使句子结构完整自然。

× No, I don't, but while I was at the period of student, I usually write something to have communication with my classmates that not near which that not near to me.

✓ No, I don't, but when I was a student, I usually wrote letters to communicate with classmates who were not near me.

“at the period of student”不是正确的英语表达。表示“在我作为学生期间”应使用“when I was a student”。此外，“near”后面直接接地点或人，不需要使用“to”。

× No, I don't, but while I was at the period of student, I usually write something to have communication with my classmates that not near which that not near to me.

✓ No, I don't, but when I was a student, I usually wrote letters to communicate with classmates who were not near me.

“when I was a student”描述的是过去经历，所以“write”应改为过去式“wrote”。在讲述过去习惯时，通常使用一般过去时。

× No, I don't, but while I was at the period of student, I usually write something to have communication with my classmates that not near which that not near to me.

✓ No, I don't, but when I was a student, I usually wrote letters to communicate with classmates who were not near me.

修饰人的关系代词应使用“who”，不能使用“that ... which that”的混合结构。同时，原句缺少谓语“were”，所以应说“classmates who were not near me”。

× Yes, from our country people's perspective.

✓ Yes. From our country's perspective, handwriting is a good way to show how self-confident and self-disciplined a person is.

“From our country's perspective”只是介词短语，没有谓语，不能独立构成完整句子。应将它与后面的完整句子连接起来，或补充主语和谓语。

× Handwriting is a good way to say how people how self confidence how self disciplined a person is and it is a good way to give

✓ Handwriting is a good way to show how self-confident and self-disciplined a person is, and it is also a good way to express feelings.

原句中“how people how self confidence how self disciplined”重复使用 how，句子层次混乱；“it is a good way to give”也没有完成表达。应使用“how + 形容词 + 主语 + be”结构，例如“how self-confident and self-disciplined a person is”，并补全后半句。

× Handwriting is a good way to say how people how self confidence how self disciplined a person is.

✓ Handwriting is a good way to show how self-confident and self-disciplined a person is.

“self confidence”是名词，不能直接用来描述人；描述人的性格特征时应使用形容词“self-confident”。同样，“self disciplined”应写成形容词“self-disciplined”，并使用连字符。

× Nowadays I don't usually carry paper or pens instead I use electronic tools such as ebook and apple pencil.

✓ Nowadays, I don't usually carry paper or pens. Instead, I use electronic tools such as an e-book and an Apple Pencil.

可数名词单数“e-book”和“Apple Pencil”前需要冠词，因此分别使用“an e-book”和“an Apple Pencil”。同时，两个完整分句不能只用逗号连接，应使用句号。

× But while I was a kid, I often brought them to

✓ But when I was a kid, I often brought them with me.

“brought them to”后面缺少地点或目的，句子没有完整结束。若想表达“随身携带”，应使用固定表达“bring something with me”。