Paper— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be clearer and more coherent: give a direct topic sentence, correct word choice, and concise supporting details. Use linking words and proper sentence structure. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

Ví dụ: Yes. I made several paper crafts at school when I was a child, such as paper frogs, lanterns and cranes. In our art classes we often practiced folding and cutting techniques, which I enjoyed because they improved my patience and hand skills.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence and use specific details. Correct grammar (e.g., tense and articles), avoid hesitations and repetition, and explain briefly why it mattered. Keep to 2–4 sentences with linking words.

Ví dụ: I enjoyed drawing on paper when I was a child because it helped me express my ideas and understand the world. For example, at around age four I would draw dozens of pictures of people and animals, and these drawings helped me practice observation and creativity.

Gợi ý: Be more accurate with vocabulary and grammar, and structure the response with a clear topic sentence followed by reasons and an example. Use linking words to contrast preferences (e.g., however).

Ví dụ: I still write physical letters occasionally, mainly birthday or Christmas cards. However, I usually prefer writing electronically because it is faster and more convenient; nevertheless, I find physical cards more personal for close friends and family.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and correct grammar and word forms. Use linking words and give a concise personal example. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms.

Ví dụ: Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters because they have sentimental value, especially older generations. For example, I have kept a few important letters and cards from close friends as mementos because they remind me of special occasions.

Gợi ý: This answer is clear and relevant; improve by removing hesitation and adding a brief linking phrase to explain purpose. Keep sentences concise and natural.

Ví dụ: No, I usually only bring paper and pens when I go to the library, because I study and do research there and need them to take notes and record useful information.

× Yes, I made paper cream at school when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I made paper crafts at school when I was a child.

The student used 'paper cream', which is likely a vocabulary mistake rather than grammar; however 'made' is correct past tense. The sentence also has a noun choice error; replace with 'paper crafts' to match intended meaning. Suggestion: use correct noun collocations (paper crafts) when referring to handmade paper items.

× We did have our art classes we made. Frogs, lanterns, cranes, sometimes I.

✓ We had art classes where we made frogs, lanterns, cranes, and sometimes other things.

Original is fragmented and incorrect clause linkage. 'We had art classes where we made...' fixes structure and links clauses. Remove extraneous 'did' and complete the final fragment. Suggestion: combine related ideas into one sentence and use a relative clause to show purpose or place.

× Well, I say I quite into drawing things on paper as a child.

✓ Well, I was quite into drawing things on paper as a child.

Mismatch of tense and auxiliary: 'say' (present) is incorrect for past preference. Use past 'was' for a state in childhood. Suggestion: use past tense verbs to describe past habits or states.

× The main the main reason is that it helped me to express my thought and explore the world when I was young.

✓ The main reason is that it helped me express my thoughts and explore the world when I was young.

Duplicate phrase 'the main the main' and plural 'thought' is more natural. 'Helped me express' avoids unnecessary 'to'. Suggestion: proofread for repeated words and use plural for countable nouns like 'thoughts' when speaking generally.

× Uh, I was 4 at the time. I used to draw hundreds of poke.

✓ Uh, I was four at the time. I used to draw hundreds of pictures.

Number should be spelled out optionally; more importantly 'poke' is incorrect word choice. Use 'pictures' to indicate drawings. 'Used to draw' correctly indicates a past habitual action. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary and use 'used to' for repeated past actions.

× I occasionally write physical one, but it's birthday cards or Christmas cards on occasions like that.

✓ I occasionally write physical ones, but they are usually birthday cards or Christmas cards for occasions like that.

Pronoun agreement and article usage: 'one' should be plural 'ones' to match 'write' occasionally multiple items; 'it's' is singular and unclear—replace with 'they are usually'. Also preposition 'on' should be 'for'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number and choose correct prepositions for occasions.

× Mostly I prefer wedding electronically because it's faster and more convenient, but physical letters feels more personal and meaningful to close friends and family.

✓ Mostly I prefer emailing because it's faster and more convenient, but physical letters feel more personal and meaningful to close friends and family.

'Prefer wedding electronically' is incorrect word choice; likely 'writing electronically' or 'emailing'. Use 'feel' to agree with plural subject 'letters'. Suggestion: use correct verb/noun collocations ('emailing' or 'writing electronically') and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I think some people still keep and read the letters because they are have sentimental value, especially older generations or anyone who likes to preserve memories.

✓ Yes, I think some people still keep and read letters because they have sentimental value, especially older generations or anyone who likes to preserve memories.

Remove extraneous 'the' before 'letters' unless referring to specific letters; 'are have' is ungrammatical—use 'have'. Suggestion: avoid doubling verbs and use correct verb forms; omit definite article when speaking generically.

× I personally kept keep a few important letters and cards form close friends as mementos.

✓ I personally keep a few important letters and cards from close friends as mementos.

Mix of past and present: 'kept keep' is redundant; context of still keeping suggests present 'keep'. 'Form' is misspelled and should be 'from'. Suggestion: choose consistent tense that matches meaning and check spelling.

× No, no. Usually I only bring paper and pens when I go to the library.

✓ No, usually I only bring paper and pens when I go to the library.

Repetition 'No, no.' is informal and unnecessary. Sentence itself is grammatical; suggestion to remove repeated interjection for clarity and formality.

× I study and do research there, so I need them to take notes and write down useful information.

✓ I study and do research there, so I need them to take notes and write down useful information.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable. Minor stylistic note: 'them' correctly refers to 'paper and pens'. No correction needed. Suggestion: keep as is.