Paper— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 答案内容具体、有故事性，但语言有些重复与语法问题，句子较长且冗余。建议在开头直接回答问题，然后用1-2个简短句子补充细节，注意时态和从句使用，简化表达以保持自然流畅。比如减少重复（"at the end with her help" 与前文重复意义），将细节按逻辑顺序呈现。

Ví dụ: Yes. My mother taught me how to fold a paper boat when I was four. It was hard at first, but with her help I finished it and we watched it float on the small lake near our home.

Gợi ý: 回答有内容但时态与语法错误（如“do brush calligraphy exercises”应为过去时），表达不够简洁，逻辑衔接词使用不当。建议先给出主题句（I practised calligraphy），然后用一两句说明原因和频率，注意动词时态和自然搭配。

Ví dụ: As a child, I enjoyed practising brush calligraphy. My mother enrolled me in classes at first, and I soon became interested, so I practised regularly.

Gợi ý: 回答直接但存在语法和用词错误（如“families”应为“family”，“Q mailbox”不自然，句子结构混乱）。建议用一两个清晰句子直接回答并说明原因，注意冠词、单复数和否定结构。

Ví dụ: No, I don't. Nowadays I usually message my family and friends via apps like WeChat and email my colleagues, so I rarely write physical letters.

Gợi ý: 观点明确但表达不够简洁且有语法错误（如“equipped themselves”位置和“no need writing”不正确）。建议先给出直接观点，然后用一两条具体理由支持，注意动词和介词搭配。可适当承认例外以显得成熟。

Ví dụ: Generally no. Most people use smartphones and messaging apps like WeChat and Facebook, so they rarely write letters by hand. However, some people still keep special handwritten notes for sentimental reasons.

Gợi ý: 回答有对比但句子冗长且有拼写错误（如“pans”应为“pens”），表达不够紧凑。建议用一到两句先给出总表达态度（depends），然后用并列句说明两种情形的不同理由，注意拼写和简洁。

Ví dụ: It depends. For casual outings I only take my smartphone, but for business meetings I usually bring paper and a pen to take notes because a notebook can be bulky.

× Then we put it in the lake near our home, seeing it floating away.

✓ Then we put it in the lake near our home and saw it floating away.

原句中使用“seeing”作为现在分词导致结构不清晰，句子应为并列动作，使用并列连词“and”并把动词用过去式“saw”与前面的过去式“put”保持时态一致。建议：当描述过去发生的两个连续动作时，用并列连词+过去式，避免滥用现在分词。

× Except doing calculations and taking notes on paper, I particularly do brush calligraphy exercises on paper as a child.

✓ Besides doing calculations and taking notes on paper, I practiced brush calligraphy on paper as a child.

原句中“Except”用法不当且时态不一致；应使用“Besides”或“Besides ... , I practiced ... as a child”。另外“do brush calligraphy exercises”不自然，改为“practiced brush calligraphy”。建议：表示“除了......之外”用Besides/Aside from，描述过去习惯用过去式。

× At first, my mother made me to have calligraphy classes, but soon I found that intrigued to me, so I often practiced a lot.

✓ At first, my mother made me take calligraphy classes, but soon I found it intriguing, so I practiced a lot.

“made someone to do”是不正确的结构，正确是“make someone do”（使役动词后面不加to）。“found that intrigued to me”结构错误，应该用“found it intriguing”或“I became intrigued”。时态也改为过去式以一致。建议：学习使役动词用法（make + 人 + 动词原形）以及形容词与动词的搭配。

× As a result, I need write physical letters in any way.

✓ As a result, I don't need to write physical letters in any way.

原句缺少否定形式且“need”后需加不定式“to write”。根据上下文应为否定句。建议：表示“不需要做某事”用“don't need to do something”。

× No, in today's technology driven society, I often send messages to my families and my friends by social networking applications like WeChat, I always send emails to my colleagues and clients via Q mailbox.

✓ No. In today's technology-driven society, I often send messages to my family and friends using social networking apps like WeChat, and I always send emails to my colleagues and clients via QQ Mail.

“families”用法错误，应为不可数/集合名词“family”。另外句子过长缺连接词并有拼写与专有名词错误（Q mailbox应为 QQ Mail）。建议：注意集合名词family和复数families区别，分句时用句号或连词连贯表达。

× I guess the answer is no, since people are always equipped themselves with smart phones, with a wide range of messaging apps such as WeChat and Facebook, there is no need writing letters by hand any more

✓ I guess the answer is no, since people always equip themselves with smartphones and use a wide range of messaging apps such as WeChat and Facebook; there is no need to write letters by hand anymore.

“are always equipped themselves”中既有被动“are equipped”又有反身“themselves”，冗余且错误；应使用主动“equip themselves”或被动“are equipped with...”。此外“不需要写信”应为“no need to write”并用不定式。建议：避免被动与反身同时使用，注意“不需要做某事”用“no need to do”。

× Well, it depends if I hang out with my friends for entertainment.

✓ Well, it depends on whether I hang out with my friends for entertainment.

“depends if”不如“depends on whether”地道，且缺少介词“on”。建议：使用“depend on whether”表达“取决于是否……”。

× I carry smartphone only, but if I go out for business, such as having meetings with clients, I tend to carry paper and pens to make notes because notebooks are heavier than paper and pans they aren't convenient for me to carry out.

✓ I only carry a smartphone for leisure, but if I go out for business, such as to meet clients, I tend to carry paper and pens to take notes because notebooks are heavier and not convenient to carry.

句子存在多个问题：缺冠词（a smartphone）、词序不当（carry smartphone only->only carry a smartphone）、“pans”应为“pens”且重复表述，最后“carry out”用法不当。改为“carry paper and pens to take notes”并调整比较结构。建议：注意冠词使用、词序、拼写和常用短语（take notes，not convenient to carry）。