Paper— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 응답은 질문에 직접 답했지만 시제 일관성, 문법, 자연스러운 표현과 간결성이 필요합니다. 예: 현재·과거 시제를 혼용하지 말고 하나로 유지하세요(예: "I made" vs "I teach"). 불필요한 반복을 줄이고 연결어를 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 만드세요. 또한 "art Academy"는 일반적으로 소문자와 관사 사용(‘the art academy’)으로 수정하고, 활동을 설명할 때 구체적 정보(어린이 연령, 배운 기술 등)를 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I made a paper boat when I was younger, and now I teach children at the local art academy how to fold simple origami boats. For example, I demonstrate each step slowly and then let them try it themselves.

Gợi ý: 의미는 전달되지만 문법과 어휘 선택에서 오류가 많아 자연스럽지 않습니다. 감정 표현은 적절하지만 표현 방식이 어색합니다. ‘They are touched to me’는 잘못된 표현이며, ‘I feel very happy when they read them’처럼 자연스러운 표현으로 바꾸세요. 또한 ‘awful’은 부정적 의미로 잘못 사용되었으므로 ‘very much’ 또는 ‘so much’로 수정하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still write physical letters for my friends' birthdays because they appreciate the personal touch. I feel very happy when they smile after reading my letters.

Gợi ý: 응답이 이해되지만 의미 전달에 방해되는 문법과 어휘 오류가 있습니다. ‘smart pony’는 잘못된 단어 사용으로 보이며 아마 ‘smartphone’을 말하려 한 듯합니다. 주장을 뒷받침하는 이유를 하나 이상 제시하고 연결어를 사용해 논리를 명확히 하세요(예: convenience, speed).

Ví dụ: I don't think many people keep handwritten letters these days because most communication is done through smartphones and social media, which are more convenient and faster.

Gợi ý: 기본 답변은 있지만 문법(‘I am art major’ → ‘I'm an art major’)과 동사 형태(‘drawing the people’ → ‘to draw people’ 또는 ‘to sketch people’)을 고쳐야 합니다. 또한 ‘Also I like Rockies’는 문맥상 관련성이 없고 무슨 뜻인지 불분명합니다. 대신 언제, 왜 스케치하는지(시간대, 장소, 목적)를 추가해 구체성을 높이세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I usually carry a sketchbook and pens because I'm an art major and often like to sketch people or scenes when I'm out, especially in parks or cafés.

Gợi ý: 문장이 단편적이고 문법(‘When I was child’ → ‘When I was a child’, 동사 형태 일관성) 오류가 있습니다. 더 자연스럽게 답하려면 주제문으로 시작한 뒤 연결어로 세부사항을 덧붙이고, 활동의 구체적 예(어떤 장면을 그렸는지, 사용했던 도구 등)를 제시하세요.

Ví dụ: When I was a child, I loved drawing on paper, especially pictures of my family and the trees near our house. I often used colored pencils to add bright details.

× Yes, I made a boat with paper.

✓ Yes, I made a boat out of paper.

The original sentence is understandable but 'with paper' is less natural than 'out of paper' when describing what material something is made from. Use 'made out of' to indicate the material. Example: 'I made a boat out of paper.'

× Now I am teaching the children in the art Academy.

✓ Now I am teaching children at the art academy.

Use lowercase for 'academy' unless it is a proper name, and use the preposition 'at' for places like an academy. Also omit 'the' before 'children' when speaking generally. Use 'teaching children at the art academy.'

× I taught children how to make a boat.

✓ I taught children how to make a boat.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense. No change needed. (Kept for completeness.)

× Yes, of course, I still write physical letters on my friend's birthday.

✓ Yes, of course, I still write physical letters for my friends' birthdays.

Use plural 'friends' and plural possessive 'friends'' if you mean multiple friends, and 'for' is more natural than 'on' when talking about the occasion of birthdays. If only one friend is meant, use 'my friend's birthday.'

× They are touched to me and I feel very happy at them.

✓ I am touched by them and I feel very happy about them.

Use 'touched by' to indicate emotional reaction to something and 'happy about' to indicate the cause of happiness. 'Feel happy at' is not natural in this context.

× I like their smiles awful.

✓ I like their smiles a lot.

'Awful' has negative meaning; to express strong positive feeling use 'a lot' or 'very much.' So 'I like their smiles a lot.'

× I don't think people still keep handwritten letters because nowadays people usually use smartphone.

✓ I don't think people still keep handwritten letters because nowadays people usually use smartphones.

Use plural 'smartphones' when speaking generally. Also maintain plural agreement: 'people usually use smartphones.'

× A smart pony, so easy to use.

✓ Smartphones are so easy to use.

Original is fragmented and contains a likely typo 'pony' for 'phone.' Combine into a full sentence 'Smartphones are so easy to use.'

× I usually carry paper and pens when I go out.

✓ I usually carry paper and pens when I go out.

This sentence is correct. No change needed.

× I am art major so I take a pen and drawing the people.

✓ I am an art major, so I take a pen and draw people.

Use the article 'an' before 'art major.' Use the base verb 'draw' after 'take a pen' instead of the gerund 'drawing.' Remove 'the' before 'people' when speaking generally.

× Also I like Rockies.

✓ Also, I like mountains.

'Rockies' refers specifically to the Rocky Mountains; if meaning mountains in general use 'mountains.' If referring to the Rockies specifically, write 'I like the Rockies.'

× When I was child, I usually.

✓ When I was a child, I usually...

Missing article 'a' before 'child.' Also the sentence is incomplete; add the action after 'usually.' Example completion: 'When I was a child, I usually drew.'

× Draw a picture at paper.

✓ Drew pictures on paper.

Use 'on paper' to indicate the surface and correct tense/number: 'I drew pictures on paper.'

× I love to drawing my family and I like to draw trees.

✓ I loved drawing my family, and I liked drawing trees.

When speaking about childhood habits use past tense: 'loved' and 'liked.' Use 'drawing' (gerund) after 'loved' and 'liked.' Alternatively, present habitual: 'I love drawing my family and I like drawing trees.'