Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you prefer sad or happy music?
Thí sinh
Yes, I prefer sad music because it fits my lyrics and melodies and I have grown up in a family which listens to sad music. So I really emotionally, I'm really emotionally connected to it.
Giám khảo
Does happy music make you feel more excited?
Thí sinh
Yeah, happy music make me feel more energetic. It's like beat, beat pop song. They makes my mood lift up. And yeah, it just makes me energetic. But I prefer sad music because I'm really emotionally connected to it.
Giám khảo
Have you taken any music classes?
Thí sinh
No, I haven't taken any music classes because I have not been like interested in this thing. I don't want to learn any instrument but I listen to music when I'm free so it just makes me happy.
Giám khảo
Do you listen to music while doing other things?
Thí sinh
Yeah, I listen to music while doing other activities, for example when I'm showering and especially in my gym when I need to workout. So I listen to any energetic music. It gives me power and support.
Do you prefer sad or happy music?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: Be more direct and concise with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add a specific reason or example to support your preference. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., because, so, for example).
Ví dụ: I prefer sad music because its melodies and lyrics match my emotions. For example, many songs my family listened to when I was young were slow and melancholic, so I grew up feeling a strong emotional connection to that style.
Does happy music make you feel more excited?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fragmented phrases and repetition, and link contrasting ideas using connectors (for example, however, but). Provide one concise example of when happy music energises you.
Ví dụ: Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because of its upbeat rhythm. For example, upbeat pop songs with a strong beat lift my mood when I need a boost, however I still prefer sad music for its emotional depth.
Have you taken any music classes?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Give a direct answer, then briefly explain your reason with specific detail and use linking words. Avoid filler phrases like 'like' or 'this thing' and try to expand slightly with an example of how you engage with music instead.
Ví dụ: No, I haven't taken any music classes because I was never interested in learning an instrument. Instead, I enjoy listening to songs in my free time—for example, I often play albums while relaxing because they help me unwind.
Do you listen to music while doing other things?
Điểm: 76.0Gợi ý: Answer directly, then give specific examples and link why you choose certain types of music for activities. Replace vague phrases like 'any energetic music' with precise genres or song types.
Ví dụ: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other activities. For example, I play upbeat pop or electronic music at the gym because the fast tempo helps me stay motivated and improves my workout performance.
× So I really emotionally, I'm really emotionally connected to it.
✓ So I'm really emotionally connected to it.
This sentence contains a redundancy and an incorrect conjunction/phrasing. Remove the extra phrase 'I really emotionally,' and use the simple subject-verb structure 'I'm really emotionally connected to it.' This improves clarity and grammar by avoiding duplicated adverbial expressions. Grammar problem type ID:16
× Yeah, happy music make me feel more energetic.
✓ Yeah, happy music makes me feel more energetic.
Subject 'happy music' is singular (uncountable/collective), so the verb should be in the third person singular form 'makes.' Use '-s' on the verb to match the subject. Grammar problem type ID:2
× It's like beat, beat pop song.
✓ It's like a beat-driven pop song.
Original phrasing is awkward and missing article and proper modifier order. Add the indefinite article 'a' and use a compound adjective 'beat-driven' to clearly describe the type of pop song. Grammar problem type ID:26
× They makes my mood lift up.
✓ They make my mood lift up.
Pronoun 'They' requires the base verb form 'make' (plural), not 'makes.' Ensure subject and verb agree in number. Grammar problem type ID:27
× No, I haven't taken any music classes because I have not been like interested in this thing.
✓ No, I haven't taken any music classes because I haven't been very interested in it.
Use negative present perfect 'haven't been' consistently and replace colloquial 'been like interested' with 'been very interested.' Also replace vague 'this thing' with 'it' referring to music classes. Grammar problem_type ID:5
× I don't want to learn any instrument but I listen to music when I'm free so it just makes me happy.
✓ I don't want to learn any instrument, but I listen to music when I'm free, so it makes me happy.
Punctuation and conjunctions improve sentence flow. No modal correction needed except clarity: keep present simple 'don't want' and 'listen.' Add commas to separate clauses. Grammar problem type ID:4
× For example when I'm showering and especially in my gym when I need to workout.
✓ For example, when I'm showering and especially at the gym when I need to work out.
Use 'at' with 'the gym' and split 'workout' (noun) into 'work out' (phrasal verb) to match context. Also add comma after 'For example' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:11
× So I listen to any energetic music.
✓ So I listen to energetic music.
'Any' is unnecessary and sounds odd here; drop it to make the sentence natural. The pronoun/determiner choice affects meaning and fluency. Grammar problem type ID:12
× It gives me power and support.
✓ It gives me energy and motivation.
'Power and support' is grammatical but unnatural here; replace with more natural collocations 'energy and motivation' to match context and register. Grammar problem type ID:13