Music— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 답변이 의도는 분명하지만 문법 오류와 중복 표현이 있어 자연스럽지 않습니다. 먼저 주제문을 명확히 하고 이유를 한두 문장으로 간결하게 제시하세요. 감정의 변화(기분이 우울할 때 슬픈 음악을 듣는 경우)를 설명할 때는 연결어(for example, however 등)를 사용해 논리적으로 이어주고, 중복된 어구(‘I upset or upset’)는 제거하세요. 또한 ‘makes me feel bad’ 대신 더 정확한 표현(‘makes me feel melancholic’ 등)을 사용하면 어휘 점수가 올라갑니다.

Ví dụ: I usually prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and makes me feel energetic. However, when I’m feeling down, I sometimes choose sad songs because they help me process my emotions and feel understood.

Gợi ý: 답변이 긍정적이지만 문장이 단편적이고 연결이 부자연스럽습니다. 토픽 문장으로 시작한 뒤 이유와 구체적 예시를 한두 문장으로 연결해보세요. 연결어(so, therefore, for example)를 사용해 문장들을 매끄럽게 이어주고, 불필요한 단어(‘With listening to music’)는 간결하게 정리하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, it does — happy music usually makes me feel more energetic, so I often dance along. For example, I have a playlist of upbeat songs that I play when I want to boost my mood or exercise.

Gợi ý: 답변이 솔직하지만 어휘 선택과 문장구조가 어색합니다. ‘I don't have any connection of musicalities’ 대신 ‘I haven’t had any formal musical training’처럼 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요. 또한 이유(학교에 수업이 없었다)를 먼저 말하고, 개인적인 상황을 덧붙여 한두 문장으로 마무리하면 더 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: No, I haven’t taken any music classes. My school didn’t offer music lessons, and I haven’t had any formal musical training outside school either.

Gợi ý: 의도가 분명하지만 문장이 혼란스럽고 모순되는 표현(‘not all the time. All the time’)이 있습니다. 먼저 간단한 주제문으로 명확히 답한 뒤, 이유와 구체적 상황(예: 공부할 때, 집안일을 할 때)을 연결어를 써서 설명하세요. ‘It helps me concentrate’ 같은 표현을 정확한 어순과 문법으로 고쳐야 합니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things, but not always. For instance, I usually play background music when I’m doing housework or studying because it helps me concentrate and stay motivated.

× I usually prefer happy music because sad music makes me feel bad but sometimes I upset or upset I listen to sad music too.

✓ I usually prefer happy music because sad music makes me feel bad, but sometimes when I am upset I listen to sad music too.

The sentence misuses the verb 'upset' where the adjective or passive verb form 'am upset' is required to describe the speaker's state. Use the appropriate pronoun + be verb construction for temporary states (I am upset). Also add a comma before the conjunction 'but' and include 'when' to clarify the time clause. Suggested improvement: use 'when I am upset' to indicate condition and ensure proper clause linkage. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Yeah, it does. I dance. With listening to music and I have a playlist with happy music.

✓ Yeah, it does. I dance while listening to music, and I have a playlist of happy songs.

'With listening to music' is an incorrect prepositional phrase; use a subordinate clause 'while listening to music' or the gerund correctly. Also 'playlist with happy music' is more naturally 'playlist of happy songs.' The original has fractured sentence structure; combine ideas with a comma and conjunction for clarity. Suggested improvement: use 'while' to indicate simultaneous actions and prefer 'of happy songs' for natural collocation. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× Umm, actually my school doesn't have a music class and I don't have, uh, any connection of musicalities, so I haven't.

✓ Umm, actually my school doesn't have a music class and I don't have any musical connections, so I haven't taken any classes.

'Any connection of musicalities' is incorrect phrasing and word choice. Use 'musical connections' (plural noun) or 'any connection to music.' Also 'so I haven't' is a sentence fragment; it needs the verb 'taken any classes' to complete the meaning. Ensure subject-verb agreement and use natural noun phrases. Suggested improvement: specify the omitted verb and use 'musical connections' or 'connections to music.' Grammar problem type ID: 27

× Yes, I often do that, but not all the time. All the time. Something I don't like, It helps me more concentrate first time.

✓ Yes, I often do that, but not all the time. Sometimes I don't because it helps me concentrate better at first.

The original contains fragmented sentences and incorrect adverb placement ('more concentrate' should be 'concentrate more' or 'concentrate better'). 'All the time. Something I don't like' are sentence fragments; combine into a coherent sentence. 'First time' is unclear; use 'at first' to express initial effect. Suggested improvement: use 'concentrate better' and restructure fragments into full sentences for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 20