Music— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 간결한 주제문을 먼저 말한 뒤 구체적 이유를 논리적으로 제시하세요. 중복되는 말(어구 반복, 채움음)은 제거하고 시제·문법을 바로잡으세요. 예를 들어 ‘I prefer happy music’로 시작하고 ‘because’로 이유를 연결한 다음 한두 개의 구체적 예를 덧붙이세요. 문장 수는 최대 5문장으로 유지하세요.

Ví dụ: I prefer happy music because it lifts my spirits and keeps me motivated. For example, when I read or exercise, upbeat songs help me concentrate and feel energetic. I especially enjoy pop music for its catchy rhythms and positive lyrics.

Gợi ý: 명확한 주제문으로 시작하고 이유를 하나 또는 두 개의 구체적 근거로 연결하세요. 불필요한 망설임(uh, umm)과 어색한 표현('Circumstance says')을 제거하고 'my mood is affected by ...'처럼 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요. 연결어(for example, because, when)로 논리를 분명히 하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, it does. My mood is easily affected by music because upbeat melodies increase my energy. For example, when I listen to lively songs in the morning, I feel more motivated to start my day.

Gợi ý: 간결히 과거 경험을 진술하고 구체적 세부사항(언제, 무슨 수업, 무엇을 배웠는지)을 덧붙이세요. 문법(‘there are’ → ‘there were’, ‘I had to take’)을 고치고 혼동되는 표현('took a bad Class')을 명확히 하세요. 예문은 2~3문장으로 구성하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. In Korea, music classes were mandatory until middle school, so I had to attend them every week. I enjoyed singing lessons and learned basic music theory and rhythm.

Gợi ý: 먼저 평소 행동을 간단히 말한 뒤 상황 변화를 설명하세요. 시제와 표현을 정확히 사용하고 불필요한 반복을 줄이세요. 예를 들어 ‘Since having a baby’로 시작해 현재 습관과 예외 상황을 연결하는 문장을 만드세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. Since having a baby, I don't have as much free time, but I usually listen to music or podcasts while doing household chores. For instance, I play soft music while cooking or cleaning to help me relax.

× I I prefer happy music because I affected by a media like music and books especially. Umm, Well yes.

✓ I prefer happy music because I am affected by media such as music and books, especially.

The original sentence misused the pronoun/verb combination 'I affected' instead of passive 'I am affected'. Also 'a media' is incorrect; 'media' is plural or 'a medium' singular. Use 'media such as' or 'things like' for examples. Suggestion: use passive 'be + past participle' and correct noun choice: 'am affected by media such as music and books.'

× Yes, it does. Uh, well, I am, uh, my mood is, uh, affect. My mood tends to be affected, umm, by umm, uh, uh. Circumstance says.

✓ Yes, it does. My mood tends to be affected by circumstances.

The speaker attempted present-tense passive but used incorrect forms: 'my mood is affect' is wrong. Use 'tends to be affected' for habitual present. 'Circumstance says' is ungrammatical; use plural 'circumstances' as the cause. Suggestion: simplify to 'My mood tends to be affected by circumstances.'

× Yes I have in Korea there are uh music class until middle school so I have to take music class and I enjoyed umm take took a bad Class A lot.

✓ Yes, I have. In Korea there are music classes until middle school, so I had to take music classes and I enjoyed them a lot.

Multiple issues: 'Yes I have' needs punctuation. 'there are uh music class' has singular/plural mismatch; use 'music classes.' 'until middle school' suggests past requirement: use past tense 'had to take.' 'I enjoyed umm take took a bad Class A lot' is garbled; correct to 'I enjoyed them a lot.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement, consistent tense, and replace unclear fragments with clear pronouns.

× Do you listen to music while doing other things?

✓ Do you listen to music while doing other things?

This question sentence is correct and needs no change. No grammatical correction required.

× Yes, I do after I having, after having a baby, I usually, uh, didn't have, I don't have time to listen to music, but when I do some chores, I do listen to music or podcasts, something like that.

✓ Yes, I do. After having a baby, I usually don't have time to listen to music, but when I do chores I listen to music or podcasts.

Problems: 'after I having' is ungrammatical; use 'after having a baby' or 'since having a baby.' Tense inconsistency: 'I usually, uh, didn't have, I don't have' mixes past and present—use present 'I usually don't have.' 'when I do some chores, I do listen' is repetitive; simplify to 'when I do chores I listen.' Suggestion: use correct participle phrase and maintain consistent present tense for habitual actions.