Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you prefer sad or happy music?
Thí sinh
The music has a significant and important part of my life, so I really like a happy diverse music. To illustrate today with a smile, I really like Lady Gaga voice, so the happy music I prefer the happy music give me a lot of positive energy for all day, and from my perspective, the happy music has a profound and widespread preference.
Giám khảo
Does happy music make you feel more excited?
Thí sinh
From a perspective, happy music make everyone feel more excited, especially at the teenagers prefer a diverse positive, positive energical music, because there can adapt and can accumulate the positive energy and can give others with communication.
Giám khảo
Have you taken any music classes?
Thí sinh
No I haven't, however I really like my traditional instrument is Tom Bra because my grandfather plays can't play adverse profound and innovation music in Dombra, so subsequent subsequently I really like this instrument. Also nowadays everyone have a wider range of the school music schools.
Giám khảo
Do you listen to music while doing other things?
Thí sinh
It seems to me that yes. However, when I study, I don't listen and I can't listen the music because I must consider in my educational tasks. To put it simple, the music give me a comfortable everywhere and I try when I I try listening to music when I try when I cook because it's give me a relaxed feeling, Yes.
Do you prefer sad or happy music?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Сделайте ответ более чётким и естественным: начните с короткого прямого утверждения (тема), затем добавьте 1–2 конкретные причины или пример. Избегайте повторов и неправильной структуры. Работайте над грамматикой (артикли, согласование глаголов) и упрощайте фразы.
Ví dụ: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and gives me energy. For example, I enjoy Lady Gaga’s songs since her upbeat voice and catchy rhythms help me feel motivated throughout the day.
Does happy music make you feel more excited?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: Говорите конкретно о себе и приводите логичное объяснение с плавными связками. Избегайте обобщений без примеров и исправьте грамматические ошибки (singular/plural, порядок слов). Используйте связки: 'because', 'for example', 'so'.
Ví dụ: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because fast rhythms and upbeat melodies increase my energy. For example, when I listen to an energetic pop song, I feel more motivated to exercise or meet friends.
Have you taken any music classes?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: Начните с простого прямого ответа, затем объясните конкретно: какое у вас отношение к инструменту и почему. Избегайте неясных фраз и повторов, улучшите лексику (названия инструментов, правильные формы). Сократите количество предложений до 2–3 и используйте связку 'because' или 'so'.
Ví dụ: No, I haven't taken formal music classes, but I love my traditional instrument, the dombra, because my grandfather played it and inspired me. I enjoy listening to his music and hope to learn it someday.
Do you listen to music while doing other things?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: Дайте чёткий ответ и объяснение с приведением конкретных ситуаций. Устраняйте повторы и работайте над согласованием времён и местоимений. Используйте связки: 'however', 'for example', 'so' и ограничьте ответ 2–3 предложениями.
Ví dụ: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other activities, but not when I study because I need to concentrate. For example, I like to play relaxing songs when I cook because it helps me unwind.
× The music has a significant and important part of my life, so I really like a happy diverse music.
✓ Music plays a significant and important part in my life, so I really like diverse happy music.
Использовано неверное словообразование и порядок слов: 'a happy diverse music' некорректно, потому что 'music' неисчисляемое и не требует артикля 'a', а прилагательные должны располагаться в правильном порядке перед неисчисляемым существительным. Исправление: убрать артикль, поменять порядок прилагательных на 'diverse happy' или лучше 'diverse, happy music', и перестроить начало предложения на 'Music plays a significant and important part in my life'. Suggestion: use 'music plays' + 'in my life' and omit 'a' before 'music'.
× To illustrate today with a smile, I really like Lady Gaga voice, so the happy music I prefer the happy music give me a lot of positive energy for all day, and from my perspective, the happy music has a profound and widespread preference.
✓ To illustrate, I really like Lady Gaga's voice, so I prefer happy music because it gives me a lot of positive energy throughout the day; from my perspective, happy music is widely preferred.
Предложение плохо структурировано: лишние фразы ('today with a smile'), повторения ('the happy music I prefer the happy music'), и ошибки в притяжательном падеже и глагольных формах. Исправление: убрать лишнее, использовать притяжательный апостроф для 'Lady Gaga's voice', изменить порядок 'I prefer happy music' и использовать 'gives me' и 'throughout the day' для корректного выражения времени. Рekomendation: разбивать длинные мысли на несколько предложений и избегать повторов. Suggestion: use possessive 'Lady Gaga's' and ensure subject-verb agreement 'it gives'.
× From a perspective, happy music make everyone feel more excited, especially at the teenagers prefer a diverse positive, positive energical music, because there can adapt and can accumulate the positive energy and can give others with communication.
✓ From my perspective, happy music makes everyone feel more excited, especially teenagers who prefer diverse, positive, energetic music, because it can help them adapt, accumulate positive energy, and communicate with others.
Нарушено согласование подлежащего и сказуемого: 'happy music make' должно быть 'happy music makes'. Некорректная структура и выбор слов: 'at the teenagers prefer' неверно; 'positive energical' - неверное прилагательное; использование 'can' многократно создает громоздкость. Исправление: 'teenagers who prefer', 'energetic' вместо 'energical', и объединение однородных глаголов после 'it can'. Suggestion: ensure singular subject 'music' pairs with 'makes' and use correct adjective 'energetic'.
× No I haven't, however I really like my traditional instrument is Tom Bra because my grandfather plays can't play adverse profound and innovation music in Dombra, so subsequent subsequently I really like this instrument.
✓ No, I haven't; however, I really like my traditional instrument, the Tom Bra, because my grandfather played the Dombra and introduced me to its profound and innovative music, so I later developed a strong liking for this instrument.
Смешение времен и неверные формы: 'my grandfather plays can't play' бессмысленно. Требуется прошедшее время 'played' для описания действий дедушки в прошлом. 'adverse profound and innovation music' некорректно; правильнее 'profound and innovative music'. 'subsequent subsequently' лишнее. Исправление: использовать прошедшее 'played', 'innovative' и убрать повторы. Suggestion: use past tense for past events and choose correct adjectives 'profound' and 'innovative'.
× Also nowadays everyone have a wider range of the school music schools.
✓ Also nowadays everyone has access to a wider range of school music programs.
Нарушено согласование числа глагола: 'everyone have' должно быть 'everyone has' (everyone - единственное число). Фраза 'the school music schools' тавтологична; лучше 'school music programs' или 'music schools'. Исправление: 'has access to a wider range of school music programs.' Suggestion: use singular verb with 'everyone' and avoid repeating words.
× It seems to me that yes. However, when I study, I don't listen and I can't listen the music because I must consider in my educational tasks.
✓ It seems to me that yes. However, when I study, I don't listen to music because I must concentrate on my educational tasks.
Неправильное употребление глагольных конструкций и предлога: 'don't listen and I can't listen the music' избыточно и 'listen the music' должно быть 'listen to music'. 'consider in my educational tasks' неверно — лучше 'concentrate on my educational tasks'. Исправление: удалить повтор и использовать 'listen to' и 'concentrate on'. Suggestion: use 'listen to' and verbs appropriate to context like 'concentrate on'.
× To put it simple, the music give me a comfortable everywhere and I try when I I try listening to music when I try when I cook because it's give me a relaxed feeling, Yes.
✓ To put it simply, music makes me comfortable everywhere, and I try to listen to music when I cook because it gives me a relaxed feeling.
Неверные формы слов и порядок: 'To put it simple' должно быть 'To put it simply' (наречие). 'the music give' — неверное согласование: 'music makes' (третье лицо единственного числа). Лишние повторы 'I try when I I try' и 'it's give me' должно быть 'it gives me'. Исправление: использовать 'simply', 'makes', 'listen to', и 'gives'. Suggestion: use adverb 'simply', ensure subject-verb agreement and remove repetitions.