Music— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be clearer and more coherent. Start with a direct topic sentence (I prefer happy music), then give two specific reasons using linking words (because / so). Avoid unclear phrases and irrelevant words. Keep it within 2–4 concise sentences.

Ví dụ: I prefer happy music because it boosts my mood and energy. For example, upbeat songs help me feel motivated when I'm exercising or doing chores, so I stay focused and positive.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and simply. Say yes/no and explain with a clear reason and an example. Use linking words like because and for example, and avoid vague or garbled phrases.

Ví dụ: Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because it often has fast tempo and high-pitched melodies that lift my mood. For example, when I hear an upbeat song, I start tapping my feet and feel more energetic.

Gợi ý: Give a full sentence about your experience, mention duration, and explain one specific difficulty with a clear linking word (but / however). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use correct grammar.

Ví dụ: Yes, I took piano lessons for two years. I enjoyed learning basic pieces, but I found reading rhythm challenging because complex timing patterns are hard for me to follow.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and include specific activities and effects. Use linking words (for example, so) and avoid confusing statements. Keep sentences concise and relevant.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often listen to music while doing chores or studying. For example, upbeat pop songs give me energy when I'm tidying the house, while calm classical music helps me concentrate when I'm reading.

× I prefer happy music 'cause happy music makes me more hyped and less because listening to some music, my atmosphere is also tough and I hate to spend at most beer.

✓ I prefer happy music because it makes me more energetic and improves my mood; when I listen to music, my atmosphere becomes better, and I don't like to waste time being sad.

ID 16: The sentence uses 'cause' and multiple 'because' awkwardly and includes irrelevant phrase 'at most beer'. This is a sentence structure and cohesion issue. Replace informal 'cause' with 'because', connect ideas with a semicolon, remove nonsensical parts, and use clear expressions like 'more energetic' and 'improves my mood'.

× That's why I was happy music.

✓ That's why I like happy music.

ID 26: 'I was happy music' is ungrammatical: a person cannot 'be' music. The intended meaning is preference, so use 'I like happy music' to express that reason.

× This is gas because I I've been with you, it's more of temples and also high tones towns and happily rises for you guys to become more cheerful with this completely.

✓ Happy music has energetic rhythms and high tones that lift people's spirits and make them feel more cheerful.

ID 26: The original sentence contains many confusing fragments and incorrect word choices ('gas', 'temples', 'towns'). Rephrase to a clear subject-verb structure and use appropriate vocabulary: 'energetic rhythms', 'high tones', 'lift people's spirits'.

× That's why I'm not uh, that's why I believe.

✓ That's why I think so.

ID 16: The repetition and filler 'uh' make the sentence unclear. Use a concise expression 'That's why I think so' to convey belief.

× Yeah, I like piano. 2 years.

✓ Yes, I have played the piano for two years.

ID 26: '2 years' alone is a sentence fragment. Use a complete sentence with present perfect 'have played' to indicate experience continuing to the present and include the duration.

× I like it, but it's hard for me to read the beat off.

✓ I like it, but it's hard for me to read the beat.

ID 14: 'read the beat off' is informal and slightly awkward. Removing 'off' makes the verb phrase clearer: 'read the beat' or 'read the rhythms'.

× Piano one particular destiny.

✓ The piano is a particular passion of mine.

ID 26: The fragment lacks verbs and clear meaning. Recast into a full sentence: 'The piano is a particular passion of mine' expresses a personal interest.

× Yeah, I like to listen to music with the other things.

✓ Yes, I like to listen to music while doing other things.

ID 11: 'with the other things' is incorrect collocation. Use the preposition 'while' plus a gerund to indicate simultaneous actions: 'while doing other things'.

× When I tidy up, I can get more energy to clean it up and stuff.

✓ When I tidy up, I get more energy to clean and do other tasks.

ID 12: The pronoun 'it' is vague and 'can get' is unnecessary modal. Use simple present 'get' for habitual actions and replace 'stuff' with 'other tasks' for clarity.

× So when I'm classical, every time I listen I'm bleeding music but bit of confidence.

✓ So when I listen to classical music, I feel moved and gain a bit of confidence.

ID 13: 'I'm classical' incorrectly uses an adjective to describe the person; 'bleeding music' is wrong collocation. Use 'listen to classical music', 'feel moved', and 'gain a bit of confidence' to convey the intended meaning.