Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like to keep things tidy?
Thí sinh
Of course, keeping things tidy is a very essential skills in my daily life. Keeping things tidy can make my life in order and helps me to find things in a short time.
Giám khảo
Did you use to keep your room tidy as a child?
Thí sinh
Actually, not at all. Uh, when I was a child, uh, I was not that organized, not a organized people that my parents often helped me to tidy up my bedroom.
Giám khảo
How do you keep your work or study space tidy?
Thí sinh
I will keep my work and study place tidy by putting things onto their umm original position after I use them umm Also I will clean and clean the table and to throw some unnecessary things like once a week.
Giám khảo
Do you think that it is necessary to be tidy?
Thí sinh
Yes, of course it is very necessary and essential to be tidy. Umm, if you are a tidy person, people will leave a good impression when first see you and it is quite, quite vital in social communications.
Do you like to keep things tidy?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: 回答内容清晰但存在语法和用词错误,句子有重复信息且略长。应注意主谓一致(skills → skill),避免重复表达(两句都说“keeping things tidy”带来冗余),并将答案控制在不超过五句内。可以用一到两句直接回应,再补充一两个具体理由或例子,使用连词如 because 或 so 来增强连贯性。
Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I find that keeping things tidy helps me stay organized and saves time when I’m looking for things. For example, I always put my keys and notes in the same place so I don’t waste time searching for them.
Did you use to keep your room tidy as a child?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答直接但有多处语言错误和口头语(uh),且句子结构混乱(not a organized people)。应该改用简洁的句子,避免填充词,并给出一两句具体细节说明例如父母如何帮忙或何时开始变得有序。使用连接词 like when 或 so 来提高逻辑性。
Ví dụ: No, I wasn’t. When I was a child I was quite messy, so my parents often had to tidy my room for me. I only learned to keep things in order in my teens when I started studying for exams.
How do you keep your work or study space tidy?
Điểm: 66.0Gợi ý: 回答包含有用细节但被口头语和重复表述削弱(umm, clean and clean),并有小的语法错误(putting things onto their original position → in their original place;throw some unnecessary things → throw away)。建议使用更简洁的结构,明确频率与步骤,运用连接词如 and 或 then 增强连贯性。
Ví dụ: I keep my workspace tidy by always returning items to their designated places after use and wiping the desk regularly. For example, I throw away unnecessary papers and clean the surface once a week.
Do you think that it is necessary to be tidy?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: 观点明确但用词重复(necessary and essential;quite, quite)且有口头语。句子应更自然流畅,避免陈词滥调,最好补充具体原因或例子说明为什么整洁重要,并注意时态和语法(when first see you → when they first meet you)。
Ví dụ: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it creates a good impression and makes interactions smoother. For instance, a neat appearance and well-organized documents can help you look professional in meetings.
× Of course, keeping things tidy is a very essential skills in my daily life.
✓ Of course, keeping things tidy is a very essential skill in my daily life.
句子中“skills”应为单数“skill”,因为前面的不定冠词或数量词暗含单一概念“a ... skill”。这是形容词/名词搭配和数的一致性问题。改正为单数以保持主谓及名词短语一致。建议:把名词与其限定词(a, the, this, my等)保持一致,若使用“a”或“very essential”后通常接单数可数名词。
× Keeping things tidy can make my life in order and helps me to find things in a short time.
✓ Keeping things tidy can put my life in order and help me find things in a short time.
原句中存在主谓不一致及动词搭配问题。“can”后面接并列动词时,两个动词都应为原形(put, help),不能用“helps”。此外,习惯搭配是“put one's life in order”。建议:注意情态动词后用动词原形,并使用固定搭配。
× Actually, not at all. Uh, when I was a child, uh, I was not that organized, not a organized people that my parents often helped me to tidy up my bedroom.
✓ Actually, not at all. When I was a child, I was not that organized, not an organized person, so my parents often helped me tidy up my bedroom.
问题包括冠词错误(“a organized”应为“an organized”)和名词数不当(“people”指复数,但语境为单数“person”),以及从句连接不自然。时态“was”使用正确,但句子结构需调整。建议:注意以元音发音开头的词用“an”,以及单/复数的正确使用,并用合适的连词(如“so”)连接原因与结果。
× I will keep my work and study place tidy by putting things onto their umm original position after I use them umm Also I will clean and clean the table and to throw some unnecessary things like once a week.
✓ I keep my work and study place tidy by putting things back in their original positions after I use them. I also clean the table and throw away unnecessary things once a week.
原句中多个介词和固定搭配使用不当:应使用“put something back in its original position/positions”而不是“onto their original position”。“throw away”是固定短语,而不是单独用“to throw”。此外时态应与习惯性动作一致改为一般现在时,“clean and clean”重复,应为“clean”。建议:学习常见动词短语(put back, in, throw away)并用一般现在时表达经常性行为;注意单复数一致(position -> positions)。
× Yes, of course it is very necessary and essential to be tidy.
✓ Yes, of course it is necessary and essential to be tidy.
句子中“very necessary and essential”存在冗余和搭配不当。“necessary”和“essential”意思接近,通常不同时与“very”连用加强。改为更自然的表达“necessary and essential”或只用其中一个。建议:避免重复强调同义词,简化表达,更自然。
× Umm, if you are a tidy person, people will leave a good impression when first see you and it is quite, quite vital in social communications.
✓ Umm, if you are a tidy person, people will get a good impression when they first see you, and it is quite vital in social communication.
原句中代词和从句结构错误:“when first see you”缺少主语,应为“when they first see you”。“people will leave a good impression”也不自然,通常说“people will get/have a good impression”或“you will leave a good impression”。“social communications”用复数不自然,改为不可数名词“social communication”或短语“social interactions”。建议:注意从句中主语的补充,选择更地道的搭配(leave/get an impression),并使用正确的名词形式(uncountable或单数)。