Tidiness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or a brief example. Use linking words to connect ideas and vary vocabulary (e.g., organized, clutter-free, refreshing) instead of repeating 'everything'. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes — I prefer to keep things tidy because a clutter-free space helps me concentrate and feel productive. For example, I cleaned my room last weekend and immediately felt calmer and more focused when I started studying.

Gợi ý: Focus on a clear topic sentence and correct grammatical errors (e.g., 'used to keep my room tidy', 'clothes', 'wardrobe'). Provide one specific supporting detail and use linking words (e.g., however, although, because). Limit to 2–4 sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'wardrobe' or 'clothes scattered').

Ví dụ: Yes, I used to keep my room fairly tidy as a child because my mother helped me establish routines. However, my clothes were often scattered because I went out a lot, so I would tidy my wardrobe every few days to keep things under control.

Gợi ý: Start with a concise topic sentence explaining your main strategy, then add one specific routine and a linking word. Avoid awkward phrasing ('icy') and replace with appropriate adjectives like 'neat' or 'sparkling'. Correct small grammar issues (use shorter sentences).

Ví dụ: I keep my study space tidy by always returning items to their place after I use them. Also, I wipe my desk with a cloth twice a week to remove dust so the area stays neat and pleasant for work.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then provide one or two concise, specific reasons with linking words. Remove repetition ('makes it makes me') and tighten phrasing. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'messy', 'disorganized', 'anxious', 'unproductive'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I believe being tidy is important because a messy environment makes me feel anxious and reduces my productivity. Therefore, I regularly tidy my room to maintain a calm and efficient space.

× Yes, as much as possible I like to keep things tidy and clean because I feel more productive in a place where everything is organized and everything is in place and everything is clean as well.

✓ Yes, as much as possible I like to keep things tidy and clean because I feel more productive in a place where everything is organized and in its proper place.

The original sentence is repetitive and wordy ('everything' repeated three times and 'in place and everything is clean as well'). This is a sentence structure issue; simplifying and consolidating phrases improves clarity and flow. Suggestion: combine similar ideas and avoid unnecessary repetition.

× The other day I cleaned my room and I felt so good after it.

✓ The other day I cleaned my room and I felt so good afterward.

Using 'after it' is unnatural in this context. This is a past tense/usage issue: 'afterward' or 'afterwards' is the correct adverb to refer to a feeling following a past action. Suggestion: use 'afterward' to link the past action and the subsequent feeling.

× Yes, as a child I used to keep also my room very tidy and my mom really helped me with that.

✓ Yes, as a child I also used to keep my room very tidy and my mom really helped me with that.

Word order is awkward: 'used to keep also my room' places the adverb incorrectly. This is a problem with placement of adverb rather than verb form, but relates to past habitual construction 'used to'. Move 'also' before the verb phrase: 'I also used to keep my room...'. Suggestion: place adverbs like 'also' before 'used to' or after the subject for natural English.

× But I had all the problem with clothes because I used to go out everyday and my worger was all over the place all the time.

✓ But I had a lot of problems with my clothes because I used to go out every day and my wardrobe was all over the place.

Multiple issues: 'all the problem' is incorrect quantifier and count noun use; should be 'a lot of problems' or 'many problems'. 'Everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day' (adverb). 'Worger' is a misspelling of 'wardrobe' or could be 'clothes'. This falls under incorrect use of quantifiers and adverbs and word choice. Suggestion: use 'a lot of problems', 'every day' as two words, and correct vocabulary to 'wardrobe' or 'clothes'.

× But I always took the time to clean it up and declutter here in there.

✓ But I always took the time to clean it up and declutter here and there.

The phrase 'here in there' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'here and there' meaning in various places. This is an incorrect preposition/conjunction use. Suggestion: use established idioms like 'here and there' when indicating scattered locations.

× I try to keep everything in place, even if I move something or use something, I make sure that I put it right back after I finish using it.

✓ I try to keep everything in its place: even if I move or use something, I make sure that I put it right back after I finish using it.

Sentence is mostly correct but has minor issues with article and redundancy: 'in place' is clearer as 'in its place' and 'move something or use something' is repetitive; combine verbs for concision. This is a present tense / sentence structure refinement. Suggestion: use 'in its place' and streamline parallel verbs.

× And my main issue is dust. Dust tends to accumulate a lot on my desk, so here and there I do clean it and I feel so good after it because it appears so clean and icy.

✓ And my main issue is dust. Dust tends to accumulate a lot on my desk, so here and there I clean it and I feel so good afterward because it looks so clean and fresh.

Problems: 'do clean it' is unnecessary auxiliary; use 'clean it'. 'After it' should be 'afterward'. 'Appears so clean and icy' is odd—'icy' is incorrect adjective for cleanliness; 'fresh' or 'very clean' is appropriate. This is incorrect preposition/adverb use and incorrect adjective choice. Suggestion: remove unneeded 'do', use 'afterward', and choose appropriate adjectives like 'fresh'.

× Yes, it's a very important for me in a way to be in a place that is tidy and clean because being in a place that is a mess and dirty really makes it makes me feel anxious and I don't feel the most productive when I'm in that place.

✓ Yes, it's very important for me to be in a place that is tidy and clean because being in a messy, dirty place really makes me feel anxious and I don't feel productive when I'm there.

Errors include unnecessary article 'a very important' should be 'very important' (article error), awkward phrasing 'in a way to be in a place' (sentence structure), repetition 'makes it makes me', and 'a mess and dirty' should be 'messy, dirty'. Also 'in that place' is wordy—'there' is natural. This combines article errors and sentence structure. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles, avoid repetition, and use adjectives ('messy') rather than noun + adjective.

× So I make sure I make my room tidy and as clean as possible.

✓ So I make sure I keep my room tidy and as clean as possible.

The original 'I make sure I make my room tidy' is repetitive ('make' twice) and awkward. This is a sentence structure issue; replace the second 'make' with 'keep' to convey ongoing maintenance. Suggestion: use varied verbs to avoid repetition and express intended meaning (maintain rather than create).