Tidiness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce filler words and hesitations.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I always wipe dust off my table after work and tidy my room whenever it gets messy, so I can relax in a clean space.

Gợi ý: Answer directly in past or habitual past form and avoid contradictory tenses. Give a clear time reference and one reason or habit detail. Remove hesitations and repeated words.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. As a child I cleaned my room every day, usually at about 2:00 pm, because my parents expected me to take responsibility for my things.

Gợi ý: Explain the routine step by step with clear linking words and correct phrases. Remove unclear words and gibberish. Limit to three to four sentences and include a specific example of what you do.

Ví dụ: I tidy my study space after finishing work. First I put my books and laptop into my bag, then I wipe the desk and put away any papers so the area is ready for the next session.

Gợi ý: State your opinion clearly and support it with one specific reason and a brief example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' but avoid repeating words and fillers.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think it is necessary because a tidy environment reduces dust and germs. For example, a clean room helps prevent allergies and makes it easier to find things.

× Yes, I love to keep things tidy. When there is dust on my table I I clean it after my work and also when there is a messy room I keep it very clean. And yeah.

✓ Yes, I love keeping things tidy. When there is dust on my table, I clean it after my work, and if my room is messy, I make it very clean.

The student mixes simple present and awkward phrasing. Use 'love keeping' or 'love to keep' for general habits. Remove repeated word 'I' and add commas. Use 'if my room is messy' or 'when my room is messy' and 'make it very clean' is clearer. Ensure subject-verb consistency and natural collocations. Suggestion: use consistent present simple for habitual actions and edit repetitions and punctuation.

× Yes, obviously I keep my room tidy, notice a child, but it's my responsibility to keep the room tidy. Uh, I, I usually clean my room uh, every day, uh, every day at at 2:00. To keep my room neat and clean.

✓ Yes, obviously I kept my room tidy as a child, but it was my responsibility to do so. I usually cleaned my room every day at 2:00 to keep it neat and clean.

Question asked about childhood (past), so verbs should be in past tense. The original uses present tense incorrectly. Remove filler words and repetitions and combine fragments into complete sentences. Use 'kept' and 'cleaned' for past habits. Suggestion: match tense to the time reference in the question (past for childhood).

× I give my break Australia space, uh, tidy when, uh, when my work work is finished, umm, I take off my, uh, books and laptop, uh, into the in into my bag and, uh start cleaning the desk and, uh, and when there is uh, some, some.

✓ I tidy my workspace during my breaks. When my work is finished, I put my books and laptop into my bag and then start cleaning the desk.

Original contains unclear phrase 'give my break Australia space' and many fillers and repetitions, causing sentence structure errors. The corrected version clarifies intended meaning, uses proper verb choice 'tidy' and 'put', and completes the idea so it is grammatical and coherent. Suggestion: remove fillers (uh, umm), avoid repetition, and express one idea per sentence with clear subject and verb.

× Yes, obviously it is necessary to, to be tidy because our environment needs to be neat and clean. Uh, for example, when there is, uh, there is messy environment, it will affect our health. So we should, we should keep uh, things ready.

✓ Yes, it is necessary to be tidy because our environment needs to be neat and clean. For example, when there is a messy environment, it can affect our health. So we should keep things tidy.

Reduce repetitions and use correct articles: 'a messy environment' requires the indefinite article. 'Will affect' is acceptable but 'can affect' is more natural when giving an example. 'Keep things tidy' corrects 'ready' which is incorrect adjective choice here. Suggestion: remove fillers and duplicates, use correct articles and appropriate verbs/adjectives for clear meaning.