Tidiness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 답변에 주제가 선명하지 않고, 잦은 중복 발화(uh, umm, like)와 문법 오류가 있습니다. 먼저 간결한 주제 문장으로 직접 답하고, 그 다음 이유나 예시를 1-2문장으로 덧붙이세요. 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어주고 불필요한 중복 표현을 제거하세요. 구체적으로 어떤 공간(집, 사무실)에서 어떤 행동(청소, 정리, 버리기)을 하는지 명확히 밝히면 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. I always clean my apartment and organize my desk because a neat environment helps me feel more relaxed and productive. For example, I throw away empty containers and store items in labeled boxes.

Gợi ý: 문법과 어휘 사용에서 오류가 있고, 불필요한 반복이 많습니다. 과거 습관을 말할 때는 ‘used to’나 ‘when I was a child’ 같은 표현을 정확히 쓰세요. 이유나 결과를 덧붙일 때는 because, so 같은 연결사를 활용하고 구체적 사례(예: 얼마나 자주 청소했는지, 부모님이 어떻게 했는지)를 포함하세요.

Ví dụ: I didn't use to keep my room tidy when I was a child. My mother often made me clean it every weekend, so I learned to tidy up occasionally but not very regularly.

Gợi ý: 동사의 시제와 표현을 명확히 하고, 반복되는 filler 단어(like)를 제거하세요. 방법을 설명할 때는 순서나 구체적인 행동(예: 하루 일과 후 정리, 불필요한 물건 버리기, 서류 정리 방법)을 포함하면 더 좋습니다. 연결어(also, then, after that)를 사용해 문장이 논리적으로 이어지게 하세요.

Ví dụ: I keep my study space tidy by cleaning it every day and removing items I don't use. I usually file papers immediately and throw away trash at the end of the day.

Gợi ý: 의견 제시 문장은 간결하고 명확해야 합니다. 'crucial' 같은 단어는 좋지만 문장 구조가 어색합니다. 이유를 말할 때는 because로 시작해 구체적인 이유(집중력 향상, 시간 절약 등)를 제시하세요. 불필요한 수식어와 반복을 줄이고 핵심을 분명히 표현하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it helps me concentrate and saves time. For instance, when my desk is organized I can find documents quickly and work more efficiently.

× Uh, yes, I'm a person.

✓ Uh, yes, I am.

Using 'a person' is unnecessary and unnatural here; native speakers simply say 'I am' or 'Yes, I do.' Replace with 'I am' to answer affirmatively.

× I, uh, always try to uh, be tidy, umm, especially in my place like or my workplaces where as well I tend to like clean or get rid of umm, this tubs I don't really used for tightness.

✓ I always try to be tidy, especially at home and at work; I tend to clean and get rid of things I don't really use.

Problems include awkward filler words and incorrect verb forms: 'used' should be 'use'. 'Place like or my workplaces' is unclear; use 'at home and at work.' Use base verb 'use' after 'don't'. Remove unnecessary words for clarity.

× I would say to be honest I didn't really keep tidy in my room when I was child.

✓ To be honest, I didn't really keep my room tidy when I was a child.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' and incorrect word order; 'keep tidy in my room' should be 'keep my room tidy.' Keep past tense 'didn't keep' is correct but needs correct noun phrase.

× However my like mom or like other like others like forced to force me to clean my whole room.

✓ However, my mother and others forced me to clean my whole room.

Remove filler 'like' and correct 'mom' to 'mother' for formality; 'forced to force me' is redundant; use 'forced me.'

× I tried to keep tidy through like cleaning every single day and also getting rid of like extra like stuff to raise I don't really used.

✓ I try to keep things tidy by cleaning every day and getting rid of extra stuff I don't really use.

Tense should match habitual action: use present 'try' not past 'tried.' 'To raise' is incorrect; remove. 'Used' should be base form 'use' after 'don't.'

× Sure, definitely. I would say it's really crucial role of build or make a place more like efficient to concentrate it on.

✓ Sure, definitely. I would say it's really crucial for creating a place that helps you concentrate.

Awkward structure 'crucial role of build or make' is incorrect; use 'crucial for creating.' 'Efficient to concentrate it on' is ungrammatical; express idea as 'helps you concentrate.'

× If I have like important like task, I need to be more like focus on the tininess, tightness always help me.

✓ If I have an important task, I need to focus more; tidiness always helps me.

Remove filler 'like.' Use article 'an' before 'important task.' 'More like focus' should be 'focus more.' 'Tininess' is wrong word; use 'tidiness.' Subject-verb agreement: 'tidiness always helps' requires 'helps.'